Would You Let Me Hold Your Hand?

July 10, 2011
By silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
silver_ice BRONZE, Wheelock, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Imagination is the eye of the soul.
-Joseph Joubert
and
Clothes make the man. Naked people have little or no influence on society.
-Mark Twain ;P


If I gave you this flower
Would you let me hold your hand?
If I whispered something
In your ear
Could we play “toesies” in the sand?

If I told you that I love you
Would you stand there speechless?
Or would you blush in answer?
If I said
You taste like peaches?

Would you wink when I am sad
If I caught the stars for you?
If I gave you all my heart
Would you accept it?
Kiss it?
And would you make it new?

Would you smile and wrinkle your nose
If I tried to sing?
Would you cry while I sang your sonnet?
And put your finger in this ring?

If I held you in my arms
And said that
My love cannot sever
Would you say “Yes” and kiss my smile
And promise me forever?

When forever has come and gone
And we’re a beauty and wrinkled old man
If I whispered and brought you flowers
Would you?
Still will you my darling, let me hold your hand?



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on Aug. 10 2011 at 2:07 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Cute. Very cute. The only part i'm not really getting is the "you taste like peaches" part. i don't feel like you finish the thought. Maybe you shouldn't have a question mark after "Or would you blush in answer" I think that would work. Overall, very good! :)

on Aug. 10 2011 at 1:18 pm
HannSawyer15 BRONZE, North Brunswick, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"I say... lets speak it. Lets fight it. Lets write it. There's nothing to hold on to if it's already gone."

Love love love the ending! This is a really sweet poem :) and I love when you say "Would you say "Yes" and kiss my smile" I thought it was really unique and never really heard anything quite like that. Great job. :)

Number7713 said...
on Aug. 9 2011 at 11:09 pm
Number7713, La Mesa, California
0 articles 0 photos 19 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Learn to say no. Because when the Devil shows up with a trunk full of promises, it's harder than you think to walk away." -I don't know...
or
"Think outside of your situation." -Hodgy Beats

oh my gosh. i loved this. this is so cute. :) i love the imagery.

zone7294 GOLD said...
on Jul. 19 2011 at 8:59 pm
zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
If im good for nothing, then your bad for everything

this is too cute I love this it's great. You should check out my poems called remember me and more than what you see tell me what you think about it and rate them if you want.

on Jul. 15 2011 at 2:29 pm
NinjaGirl BRONZE, Valley City, North Dakota
1 article 0 photos 202 comments

Favorite Quote:
The only thing holding us back in life is our desire to stay where we are and not venture further.
~Some random person on the Internet :P

Whoa. I really like this! I think the only thing that could be done to improve it is if you changed "My love cannot sever" to "My love cannot be severed." This is a really great piece! :)


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