Would You Let Me Hold Your Hand?

If I gave you this flower
Would you let me hold your hand?
If I whispered something
In your ear
Could we play “toesies” in the sand?

If I told you that I love you
Would you stand there speechless?
Or would you blush in answer?
If I said
You taste like peaches?

Would you wink when I am sad
If I caught the stars for you?
If I gave you all my heart
Would you accept it?
Kiss it?
And would you make it new?

Would you smile and wrinkle your nose
If I tried to sing?
Would you cry while I sang your sonnet?
And put your finger in this ring?

If I held you in my arms
And said that
My love cannot sever
Would you say “Yes” and kiss my smile
And promise me forever?

When forever has come and gone
And we’re a beauty and wrinkled old man
If I whispered and brought you flowers
Would you?
Still will you my darling, let me hold your hand?





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thetruthawaits94 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 2:07 pm
Cute. Very cute. The only part i'm not really getting is the "you taste like peaches" part. i don't feel like you finish the thought. Maybe you shouldn't have a question mark after "Or would you blush in answer" I think that would work. Overall, very good! :)
 
HannSawyer15 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 10, 2011 at 1:18 pm
Love love love the ending! This is a really sweet poem :) and I love when you say "Would you say "Yes" and kiss my smile" I thought it was really unique and never really heard anything quite like that. Great job. :)
 
-TheAftermath- said...
Aug. 9, 2011 at 11:09 pm
oh my gosh. i loved this. this is so cute. :) i love the imagery.
 
zone7494 said...
Jul. 19, 2011 at 8:59 pm
this is too cute I love this it's great. You should check out my poems called remember me and more than what you see tell me what you think about it and rate them if you want.
 
NinjaGirl This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 2:29 pm
Whoa. I really like this! I think the only thing that could be done to improve it is if you changed "My love cannot sever" to "My love cannot be severed." This is a really great piece! :)
 
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