Under the influence

May 18, 2011
By Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven." Matthew 18:3

"Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men." JFK

“Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.”Albert Einstein

"I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else."
C. S. Lewis

"A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading."
C. S. Lewis

"Anyone who doesn’t believe in miracles is not a realist."
David Ben-Gurion

"An eye for an eye makes the world go blind" Gandi


Most of us would never
play Russian roulette
but we'll take a drink
from someone we just met

you won't go in the army
because you might be shot
but you'll run the health risk
of smoking pot

you won't rob a bank
because your actually sane
but you'll break the law
to snort cocaine

you know murder
is a terrible sin
yet you'll kill yourself
injecting heroine

You won't sky dive
in fear of going 'plunk'
but you play the game
of driving drunk

The author's comments:
This is the frist thing i put on teen ink please give critical feedback. I want my writing to get better. Also i'm not sure of the type of poem i should have used please tell me

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Shadow878 GOLD said...
on Aug. 28 2011 at 6:04 pm
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven." Matthew 18:3

"Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men." JFK

“Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.”Albert Einstein

"I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else."
C. S. Lewis

"A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading."
C. S. Lewis

"Anyone who doesn’t believe in miracles is not a realist."
David Ben-Gurion

"An eye for an eye makes the world go blind" Gandi

Thanks and thanks

on Aug. 28 2011 at 5:07 pm
Myvoice4change SILVER, Other, Other
9 articles 3 photos 167 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Everything will be ok in the end. If it's not okay, it's not the end."

I really like the style of this, and it has a nice, consistent rythm to it. And I love the point!

 

ps: I love your username too ;)


on Aug. 6 2011 at 9:56 am
WithPenAndScript DIAMOND, Venetia, Pennsylvania
72 articles 232 photos 252 comments

Favorite Quote:
I believe that no matter who you are we all leave footprints on this Earth

Very true, and pretty good as well. Creative and  liek someone said above me catchy 

on Jul. 29 2011 at 1:23 pm
thetruthawaits94 SILVER, Duncan, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 353 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not about waiting for the storm to pass, but learning to dance in the rain.

Very good! How true, how true!

on Jul. 29 2011 at 12:58 pm
blitsnik SILVER, Palm Bay, Florida
8 articles 0 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you must mount the gallows, give a coin to the headman, a jest to the crowd, and meet the drop with a smile on your lips."

this is awesome. i wish people would read this and realize how stupid they can be sometimes. loved it though :)

 


on Jul. 29 2011 at 11:39 am
redhairCat PLATINUM, Pebble Beach, California
47 articles 20 photos 411 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I can do anything!"

Yoah - very creative and catchy! I love it! Very good!!

on Jul. 29 2011 at 9:09 am
b_gomez114 BRONZE, East Haven, Connecticut
3 articles 0 photos 7 comments

great job, such true words

 


on Jul. 29 2011 at 8:39 am
pill.happy.adventure PLATINUM, Manchester, New Hampshire
21 articles 3 photos 41 comments
Very creative great job

on Jun. 20 2011 at 11:44 pm
GOOD JOB!:)

on Jun. 16 2011 at 1:28 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

me too- i liked the rhyming! I love the meaning here. it is perfect :) 5 stars

on Jun. 16 2011 at 8:12 am
LoveMeIfYouDare BRONZE, Lafayette, Louisiana
1 article 0 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have many injuries. It is better not to talk about them." ~ Natalia Ma

I liked how it rhymed....very true,too. Doesn't it annoy you how people can be this way?!


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