Wings of seduction

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Flutter your wings ever so high and test
My knowledge as to why you cannot fly
Continue your path and soon you'll go west
When you'll rebel, your death screams to the sky
Informing me of your unfaithful self
Darling you were once a truthful beauty
But to what extent have you been to dealt
But to what extent was your agony
Did it hurt? Did it burn? Were you in pain?
You were like an owl stalking for you love
Your pain turned you into something so vain
I could make a wish on you flying above
Before you last time look inside your heart
And flutter your wings for our last depart





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HisPurePrincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 3:54 pm
a comment on the writing...you're like me, and you've got emphasis on lots of wrong syllables.  sorry XD.  annoying. i know.
 
WriterFighter replied...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 8:19 pm
You have the right to comment, where do you see the wrong pattern in the syllables? 10 syllables per line were my instructions on this sonnet, and 14 lines. Shakespearean Sonnet.
 
HisPurePrincess This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 25, 2011 at 10:16 pm
it's iambic pentameter.  ah-1, ah-2, ah-3, ah-4, ah-5.  it's HARD.
 
WriterFighter replied...
Apr. 11, 2011 at 6:05 pm
Thank you! I guess we learn something different everyday.
 
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