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"Untwined"

April 26, 2010
By Meru21 GOLD, Desert Hot Springs, California
Meru21 GOLD, Desert Hot Springs, California
17 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I could be any part of you,
I'd be your tears;
To be conceived in your heart,
Born in your eyes,
Live on your cheeks,
And die on your lips."


The silver lining flakes away,
Leaving only memories behind.
A golden shadow of what used to be
Since now our destinies have untwined.
I'm not on the path you are taking,
And I can't see you there on mine.
The clock, it seems, has stopped for us
With a time we can no longer find.
The rose you gave now stands wilted.
Only a glimpse of a brighter time.
A harbored love that leaves us wanting
To find a bloom of another kind.
The letters you sent are yellow, aging.
Your name fading from where you signed.
Only echoes are now remaining
Of the heart there you once claimed was mine.


The author's comments:
I was actually about to fall asleep when this popped into my head. I was thinking about romances that are lost because one person decides that no matter what, the other isn't in their future - love or no. This was sort of like the person left behind going through the things he gave her (or she gave him) over the time and still knowing she's not over him.

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Meru21 GOLD said...
on May. 17 2010 at 11:47 pm
Meru21 GOLD, Desert Hot Springs, California
17 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If I could be any part of you,
I'd be your tears;
To be conceived in your heart,
Born in your eyes,
Live on your cheeks,
And die on your lips."

Wow. Thank you. The best work comes out of me right before I fall asleep. The problem is getting up to write it down. lol. And I'll definitely check you out. Some of my new stuff just went up, too, so be sure to give it a look. I love criticism. ^^

on May. 17 2010 at 10:12 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

wow, this is absolutely brilliant! :) very beautiful. it has such great rhythm...it feels like a song one would find on a movie such as the notebook :) haha. but really this is great, i love the line" the clock it seems has stopped for us, with atime we can no longer find." absolute genius right there :) 5 stars :) would you mind commenting on some of my work?