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The Rain

December 16, 2009
By ...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
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Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell


Droplets sliding down my glass window pane,
A miracle in a liquid disguise.
I watch the simple beauty that is rain
The heavens do cry tears, I realize.
The skies split apart, enabling and
Allowing the sweet droplets to fall down
To Earth. I extend my arm and my hand
Gets wet. Rain sprinkles upon the whole town
Making our sunny day gloomy and sad,
(At least in most people's opinion.) Splish!
Splash! Splosh! Jumping in the puddles is rad!
Plpo! Plop! Plop! The drops fill the doggie's dish.
The wet liquid tears that fall from above,
The wet liquid tears I have come to love.


The author's comments:
The rain has always made me smile.

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on Jan. 8 2010 at 6:57 pm
...PensiveGurl... PLATINUM, Aurora, Colorado
20 articles 0 photos 268 comments

Favorite Quote:
You get ideas from daydreaming. You get ideas from being bored. You get ideas all the time. The only difference between writers and other people is we notice when we're doing it- Neil Gaiman.
Who are you to be who you are?-Le'Na Pernell

Poetry really isn't my thing, but I write it anyway sometimes.

I had to write a sonnet for Drama (YES DRAMA wierd I know!) and some of the lines had to rhyme.

However thanks for the comment.

on Jan. 8 2010 at 5:32 pm
NorthernWriter, Fargo, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"Only dead fish swim with the stream"

I like the part about the liquid tears from heaven...however, I don't think it needs to rhyme. If I were you, I would focus more on making it intense and condensed rather than rhyming. Good job however and keep writing b/c that is the only way to get better! :)


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