Gone Away

October 20, 2009
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I am gone,
Yet I was here.
You are sitting,
Where I was near.
I slept in this bed,
I sat in that chair.
And though I'm not present,
I breathed this air.
I stayed in this room,
Yet left no trace.
I have now moved on,
To a different place.
No one knows,
Where that may be.
Our paths may cross,
Lets wait and see...





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futurista12This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2015 at 8:41 pm
That's really cool how you leave your poem in hotel rooms. I hope I see it one day! When I stay in hotels, I like to leave a note to the people who clean the room just to say thank you.
 
CreativeWriter86 said...
Feb. 24, 2012 at 11:16 pm
I love this poem! Well written!
 
BieberLover16 said...
Sept. 23, 2011 at 5:08 am
That's amazing! keep on writing away! :)
 
Twinny said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:15 pm
This poem made great rhyming&&amazing imagery.!:)
 
Inlove4ever said...
Nov. 22, 2010 at 2:29 pm

OMG!!!!!

that is amazing!!

you are amazing writing, keep up the writing i'd love to see more!

 

 
iWriteToExpressThouqhts said...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 12:03 pm
awesome job ♥
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Aug. 1, 2010 at 10:58 pm
Thank you so much!
 
Chelz said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 1:25 pm
This poem is awesome!!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 2:40 pm

I'm so glad u think so:)

Thank u;D

 
booboo360 said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:45 pm
when i read this poem that is wat i thought of, the lovely bones.. u r so amazing!!!!!! i can just picture susie { the main character} and it makes me sad.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 1:28 pm
Sweet! thanx lol but don't think i copied it from the movie lol i wrote it yrs ago n now it's hidden in MANY hotel rooms lol
 
booboo360 said...
Feb. 22, 2010 at 2:42 pm
omg u should read the lovely bones by alice sebold
 
SilverDawn said...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 3:20 am
I totally love your writing style! You know, if I found this poem somewhere, I'd find it kinda creepy and stalker-ish, haha. But I do like it and it's very well-written. Totally admirable (:
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Dec. 11, 2009 at 7:00 pm
Yaaa but creepy is always kinda fun lol =P
 
Lixxy_93 said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 9:46 pm
i love it, and that is an amazing idea to leave this at every hotel you stay at!
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Oct. 29, 2009 at 11:25 am
Thanx! lol I love leavin it places n keepin track of where i left it...i once stayed in the same hotel room n my poem was still there...i thought it pretty neat...n thanx for ur comment:)
 
aydenblack This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Nov. 2, 2009 at 4:23 pm
This is really neat :]
I love the idea of leaving mysterious things behind for people to find.
It brings a joy to mind you can't explain.
A friend of mine likes leaving fortune cookie fortunes for her waiters when she eats out.
 
bluemagnet22 replied...
Nov. 7, 2009 at 10:16 am
Oh I love the fortune cookie idea so neat! Ya it's exciting to leave something behind cuz it's like a piece of u is always there n always will be! Kinda creepy but totally cool!
 
dreamer_believer said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 5:46 pm
i like how you wrote this! you kind of gave a sorrowful mood at first, but you ended the poem with possible happiness :) creative. this is a great poem too :) i like your work a lot!!
 
Alexx627 said...
Oct. 28, 2009 at 2:42 pm
Oooo! It gave me chills! I like it...but it's almost creepy!
 
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