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No one cared to find,
All the hurt behind her eyes.
Everyone thought she was happy,
They were blinded by her lies.
They never saw the pain,
Yet they saw the false perfection.
Secretly she craved love,
All she wanted was simple affection.
Sadly no one showed concern,
As she slipped down the drain.
She just wanted someone to care,
Yet they kept ignoring her pain.
She couldn't live with herself anymore,
So she decided to quit and fail.
One day when she was all alone,
She took a deadly cocktail.
Her friends were all stunned in shock,
It broke her family's heart.
But little did they know,
They could have prevented it from the start.
Everyone thought she had it all,
But that lie only lasted for awhile.
Her disguise no longer worked,
Without her pretty,little smile.

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potatofreak said...
Jan. 1, 2016 at 4:04 am
I feel like you were talking about me,it made me cry. You are really an amazing writer. I have read all your works and all of them are really really really amazing! But my favorite is "You and Me" It's like your telling what I am experiencing right now. Again, it made me cry.
futurista12This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 13, 2015 at 8:43 pm
I feel like that girl.
HermioneHainsworth This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 23, 2014 at 6:12 am
I love this... I can relate t it myself :/ But your an amazing writer.. your work is truely inspirational!
littlekittynekocat said...
Oct. 26, 2012 at 10:59 am
this describes me so much ... i only want loved
Avalon,, said...
Sept. 12, 2012 at 12:07 pm
I feel like crying because this describes exactky how I feel about myself, except I'd never be able to take my own life. You're an amazing writer.!
Light_Walker said...
Apr. 9, 2012 at 6:51 am
When I first read this poem, I actually cried a bit. It reminded me of a friend who seems to be happy all of the time, but hides her sorrow behind a mask. She has been through some rough things in her life. I have been there for her and I am glad that I noticed her pain early on. The poem was well written. Keep it up.
Belleoftheballpointpen said...
Feb. 5, 2012 at 4:22 pm
wow! this was an amazing poem.... so sadly true.
arcanine24 said...
Dec. 23, 2011 at 7:30 pm
good job! i liked it ;)
coyote.in.the.distance said...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 2:12 pm
i realy liked it!
Supernova7 said...
Oct. 18, 2011 at 12:14 pm
This was really good keep it up:)
shoreviewgurl14 said...
Apr. 25, 2011 at 9:05 pm
Really enjoied this!!! i love how it lifts u up then let u down hard. we have all felt this way at one time and thts wat makes this piece soo moving! Again i love it.
pnkninja11 said...
Jan. 5, 2011 at 7:33 am
This is a very sad poem. I think most people want to to feel loved and cared for. Mostly of all attention.
Sparklemaze said...
Oct. 16, 2010 at 5:01 pm
This is very sad but Amazingly well written. It gave me chills
Dessometrics replied...
Oct. 21, 2010 at 10:07 am
ohmigosh me too but i love it
CassieSherman14 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 30, 2010 at 8:29 pm
Great job! That's soooooo sad! If she was a real person, and I knew them or had the chance to know them... I would care about them and help them.
bluemagnet22 replied...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 11:12 am

Thank u:)

Unfortunately she was a real person...the daughter of my father's best friend...In writing this poem my hope was to help others to identify when someone in their life is crying out for love and to also maybe stop someone from ending their life

CassieSherman14 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jun. 4, 2010 at 7:21 pm

Awwww... that's soooo sad!


That's too bad... well great job anyway although it's soooo depressing.

dia.dreamer replied...
Sept. 4, 2011 at 12:54 pm
really nice poem....the saddest part is it actually happened....I hope your father's best friend is all right now....when did this happen?
Goalieinsoccer10 said...
May 16, 2010 at 11:02 pm
wow, its scary how well i can relate to this. its amazing. :]
bluemagnet22 replied...
May 20, 2010 at 7:29 pm
Thank you I'm glad you like it
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