October 16, 2009
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All around me they soundlessly lie asleep
But one is delicately whispering
It whispers softer as I get closer
But I cannot find anything around me
They rose and fell in the heat of battle
But still one, only one stands to fight alone
I cannot find anything around me

He calls my name countlessly toward his grave
I run, run towards the sound forgetting,
Forgetting where I am, I see him living
He tells me not to worry he is free
He says he is where soldiers are at peace
As he leaves, tears roll down in my sadness
“Good bye”, I say, “I will see you in peace”

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Bren_Bren said...
Mar. 10, 2011 at 6:36 pm
I really did enjoy reading your peom because its very touching and it really makes you think..... Great Job!!
alyyyx609 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 11:51 am
this is very touching. very descriptive (:
thugggaasouras said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 8:55 am
omgg its soo good itt touched me like insidee . it made me cry from the inside. your really good at writting poems.
proudaunt said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 8:23 pm
Great piece of poetry. You can tell there is
great depth of feeling in the way you write and the way you express yourself.
Your grandfather would be so proud of you.
irislynne said...
Nov. 6, 2009 at 6:31 pm
Wow! You might be famous some day! Keep up the good work!
aydenblack This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 2, 2009 at 4:37 pm
I agree with both you and bluemagent22...poetry is my only escape.
And this poem was reminded me of a battlefield I once visited.
bluemagnet22 said...
Oct. 23, 2009 at 12:07 pm
Vry Nice:) Ya I'm the same way,poetry helps me cope and get over's almost like once it's on paper it's not in your head anymore
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