Dysfunctional

October 12, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


We were so wrong,
That we made it right.
We slept through the day,
And only talked at night.
We never told the truth,
We only lied.
We always laughed,
When we should have cried.
We were never bland,
We had to add spice.
We were always naughty,
But rarely nice.
We used the words hate,
Instead of using love.
We fell into a ditch,
Instead of rising above.


The author's comments:
This poem was inspired by a previous relationship... can you see why it didn't work out?!?

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on Aug. 6 2011 at 9:06 pm
IAmWhoIWantToBe PLATINUM, Manila, Other
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Favorite Quote:
‎"I’m learning how to drown out the constant noise that is such an inseparable part of my life. I don’t have to prove anything to anyone. I only have to follow my heart and concentrate on what I want to say to the world: I run my world." - Beyoncé

The reasons why relationships don't work! Good job on this poem! 

on Jul. 20 2011 at 3:19 pm
LaBellaVie SILVER, Bethel, Connecticut
8 articles 5 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
with every single letter and every single word, there will be a hidden message about a boy who loves a girl

Very interesting... it described the actions of many people in modern society. Beautiful job (:

zone7294 GOLD said...
on Jul. 14 2011 at 8:25 pm
zone7294 GOLD, Newport News, Virginia
18 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
If im good for nothing, then your bad for everything

I love this poem it's different. You should check out my poetry here's the link to one of my poems TeenInk.com/poetry/sonnet/article/349142/poetry-speaks/

SierrahS GOLD said...
on Jul. 6 2011 at 8:35 pm
SierrahS GOLD, Bronx, New York
14 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Be a leader, not a follower

Beautiful, it was nicely written :)

on Jun. 21 2011 at 11:43 am
EnochDreams GOLD, Simi Valley, California
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Favorite Quote:
Hence poetry is something more philosophic and of graver importance than history, since its statements are rather of the nature of universals, whereas those of history are singulars. - Aristotle

‎"I think the biggest thing that my failures have taught me is that you can't succeed without failing"

-Rick Riordan

How did it get its name?

on Jun. 18 2011 at 12:35 pm
shayKittyFlcoka GOLD, Blockingham, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't give my emtions to people who dont matter to me. you cant make me angry, happy, sad, or watever unless you count.

i still liked this poem although the relatonship between u n whoever didnt work out. lolz it actually reminded of a realtionship of mine too. gud work!

TheBug BRONZE said...
on Jun. 6 2011 at 10:51 pm
TheBug BRONZE, Uniontown, Kentucky
3 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I see myself as a huge fiery comet, a shooting star. Everyone stops, points up and gasps "Oh look at that!" Then- whoosh, and I'm gone...and they'll never see anything like it ever again... and they won't be able to forget me- ever."- Jim Morrison

This is really, amazing. I'm sorry to hear about what happenned with your relationship, though. It seems that you came out of it stronger, and for that, props to you.

on Jun. 6 2011 at 10:39 pm
RanaHewezi1998 SILVER, Ames, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"I may not have gone where I intended to go, but I think I've ended up where I needed to be."
-Douglas Adams

i'm sorry the relationship didn't work out :( nicely written

on Jun. 6 2011 at 3:38 pm
R5andParamore BRONZE, Manalapan, New Jersey
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Nicely written, refreshing. Great job.

 


on Jun. 6 2011 at 2:03 pm
lovemeso14 BRONZE, Gurnee, Illinois
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I definitely can relate to tis. Amazing work, great job :')

kat27 GOLD said...
on Apr. 27 2011 at 4:44 pm
kat27 GOLD, Jacksonville, Florida
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very short. thumbs up.

on Mar. 10 2011 at 6:23 pm
Bren_Bren BRONZE, Memphis, Tennessee
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Favorite Quote:
If you stand for nothing you will fall for anything

This poem is great!! Love it

lion101 said...
on Mar. 10 2011 at 9:34 am
i like ur poem

on Jan. 3 2011 at 11:04 am
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

ooh, kool rhyming, awesome poem :D it was worded nicely.. Great job, i liked it!!

on Aug. 11 2010 at 7:34 pm
avantgarde GOLD, Stillwater, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
I write for the same reason I breathe...because if I didn't I would die. --Isaac Asimov

I love the realness of this poem! Very lovely, but it's not a sonnet. Sonnets have ten syllables per line, and their rhyme scheme goes like this:

 ABABCDCDEFEFGG

But nice work anyways :)


on Jun. 21 2010 at 11:27 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thank you!!

on Jun. 21 2010 at 11:25 am
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thank you:) ya it's just a lil bit obvious right?!? lol

on Jun. 19 2010 at 8:53 am
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
7 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

this is really good :) keep it up

please come check out some of my work =]


on Jun. 15 2010 at 9:05 pm
PoemLoverSara PLATINUM, Tampa, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
Love Is Nothing But A Dream♥

really nice work i can totally see why it ddnt work out nice job .. i really like the rhyming!! plz check out my work thnx!!!:]

on May. 11 2010 at 3:06 pm
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
24 articles 16 photos 644 comments

Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)

Thank u n ofcoarse i'll check it out:)


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