Cambio Network
Magazine, website & books written by teens since 1989

Take my Heart and Break It

Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.




Join the Discussion


This article has 200 comments. Post your own!

insaneprincess said...
May 9, 2010 at 8:00 pm:
This is amazing ! 
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Volleygirl25 said...
May 9, 2010 at 8:56 am:
I love this so much! All the words just flow together perfectly. Thank you for the comment also. :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
lnvo97 said...
Apr. 30, 2010 at 6:03 pm:
this is most deffinatly something i can relate to!!! AMAZING!!!!! keep up the good job!!!
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
vnprice said...
Apr. 30, 2010 at 10:31 am:

This was so great!

I can definitely relate to how you feel, and this is beautiful. Keep up the great work! :D <3

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
AlexSerino said...
Apr. 30, 2010 at 9:46 am:
This is such a true poem.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Valery5This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 30, 2010 at 9:43 am:
AWWWW!!! I love it! It was great and sad
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
writergirl13 said...
Apr. 22, 2010 at 8:19 pm:
It's not easy to make me cry, but those few stanzas almost did, especially the last one. So beautiful and so true. :')
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
tennisislovee34 said...
Apr. 14, 2010 at 9:05 pm:
This has to be one of my most favorite poems I've ever read on here. Literally. It has a lot of emotion in it, and actually reminds me of this guy from my past. But the point is, THIS IS AMAZING. :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
chelsead said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 11:56 am:
I completely understood this poem and felt like it went directly with my story the "Daydreamer." I loved your end rhyme and how the poem flowed. This is beautiful =] 
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
LiveLife2theMax said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 11:26 am:

wow. this is amazing. i loved the way that it didn't rhyme just for the sake, that he rhyming actually made sense. its a great poem.you should be really proud of this one.

i loved it (:

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
tenderheartx3 said...
Mar. 30, 2010 at 11:29 pm:

Thank you for your comment on my page!

:]

and I like this piece. A way to improve it is possibly add more imagery to it, so that way the reader can clearly see what and how the speaker is feeling... You said "love" a lot, but you didn't SHOW it as much, ya know?

so I think if that is established more, it would be nothing but wonderful

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
lunaEccentric said...
Mar. 28, 2010 at 6:57 pm:

Great poem! The last stanza, last line was my favorite! It's a refreshing look at the scenario and I love the line!!!

 

 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Ashlie94 said...
Mar. 24, 2010 at 2:58 pm:
Wow!! You are an amazing writer and i love how your poem has a lot of truth to it. Keep writing. :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
noelleism said...
Feb. 23, 2010 at 8:01 am:
I like this alot. I've had something like this happen to me. But I hope my end is perfect. Love it. keep-it-up.
p.s. not so sure this is a sonnet there supposed to have 14 lines you have 11. :)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
annexgrey This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Feb. 19, 2010 at 4:20 am:
Wow, this is so fantastic.
I love it to bits :) You've captured the emotions so perfectly and expressed them exactly as they feel. Take everything you said about my poem and double it for yours ;)
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
bellviven said...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 3:57 pm:
i know what you meen hmmm great work love it
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
***Rain*** said...
Jan. 23, 2010 at 4:04 pm:
Isn't that the truth. I'm having a problem like this and it sucks.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Lonleydandy said...
Jan. 18, 2010 at 7:33 am:
Love it love it love it
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
calephchad said...
Jan. 13, 2010 at 2:45 pm:
This poem is so true to life. Thanks for posting this. Very well written. This is a definite 5 out of 5. If you'd like, stop by and check out some of my work.
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
ZiRaww! said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 10:19 pm:
This brought tears to my eyes and unlocked the pain
 
Reply to this comment Post a new comment
 
Site Feedback