Take my Heart and Break It

October 11, 2009
By jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."


Take my broken heart,
and rip it from my chest.
Steal away my soul,
and finally put me to rest.

I dreamt about you day and night,
and I wanted you to be mine.
You watched me in my hardest days,
and sometimes you watched me shine.

Every time I saw you,
my heart would skip a beat.
Every time you said my name,
I would spring out of my seat.

I loved you with my heart and soul.
I loved you year after year.
But something always kept us apart:
our confusion, our chances, our fear.

But now there is no hope for us,
we are doomed to be apart.
Maybe I won't feel the pain
if you completely break my heart.


The author's comments:
Most of the time relationships grow from the innocence of a best friend. This is my poem explaining how it feels to realize that. This is also to express the awful truth when you discover that you can never be together.

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on Feb. 9 2013 at 1:24 pm
TaylorWintry DIAMOND, Carrollton, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Never fear shadows. They simply mean there's a light shining somewhere nearby." - Unknown

I really loved this. The rhyming was perfectly and the rhythm was never skewed. Great job!

on Feb. 1 2013 at 12:14 pm
WritingLoverForever PLATINUM, Bowling Green, Ohio
32 articles 2 photos 198 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's not about success; it's about significance.

No one can make you feel inferior without your consent.

Wow, this was very moving.  The feelings you describe are so real and honest.  "Maybe I won't feel the pain if you completely break my heart" hit me the hardest of all.  You write incredibly gripping poetry. Keep it up! :)

on Jan. 25 2013 at 1:36 pm
RyanM. PLATINUM, Klamath Falls, Oregon
30 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who deny the darkness in their hearts, are the ones who fall deeper into it."

Amazing job it's so surreal because alot of go through something with another where the  other just doesn't see what we see so bravo I'm your fan for life

on Jan. 22 2013 at 12:47 am
shayKittyFlcoka GOLD, Blockingham, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't give my emtions to people who dont matter to me. you cant make me angry, happy, sad, or watever unless you count.

obviously this poem is very understandable n moving. youve gottan so many views and comments. this is how alot of ppl feelwen they just give up bcuz theyve been torn apart so many times. extremely touching!goodjob!

KhatzDoxa said...
on Jan. 9 2013 at 5:27 am
Wow, I love this!!!

Zoya_Khan GOLD said...
on Dec. 23 2012 at 3:20 am
Zoya_Khan GOLD, Gujranwala, Other
19 articles 0 photos 420 comments

Favorite Quote:
Where LOGIC ends, FAITH begins.
- Zoya Khan

Nice :) :) :)

on Dec. 13 2012 at 9:54 pm
Timmmaayyy BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
1 article 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yes I am a Christian, but I am not perfect.

Wow this was awesome I went through the same thing things will always get better man.

on Dec. 10 2012 at 9:53 am
Not once, But twice.

on Oct. 18 2012 at 5:02 pm
FallenDreamerGurl SILVER, Tokoroa, Other
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
The Quiet is better than the noise,
Just like peace is better than chaos.

Absolutly love it completely!!!! best ever in my book :)

Lovergirl GOLD said...
on Oct. 18 2012 at 12:04 pm
Lovergirl GOLD, Gretna, Virginia
12 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"don't jugde and ye won't be jugde" matthew 7:1
"If you don't know the trees you will get lost in the forest, but if you don't know the stories you will get lost in life' -Siderian Proverb

beautiful i love it

on Oct. 18 2012 at 6:42 am
remember16 SILVER, WhiteLake, Michigan
9 articles 0 photos 44 comments

Favorite Quote:
This is only a minor setback to a major comeback

verrry verrry good poem, i like it a lot

KaTie98 said...
on Oct. 10 2012 at 8:28 am
KaTie98, Reykjavík, Other
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It was very dramatic, maybe a little too much but I still liked it. It would have been better if you just made it a little more realistic. It was really beautiful and the first sentence is what caught my attention. It really pulled me in. It was very well written and hopefully you‘ll keep writing in the future! :)

on Oct. 7 2012 at 1:09 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

thank you!! :)

on Oct. 7 2012 at 1:08 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

i'm glad that this helped you! that's what i want my poetry to do :) thank you!!

on Oct. 7 2012 at 1:07 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

that means soo much! thank you :)

on Oct. 7 2012 at 1:07 am
jennee21_ann GOLD, Helper, Utah
17 articles 0 photos 568 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't gain the world and lose your soul....wisdom is better than silver or gold."

"You can always close a book, but you can never close the mind of a writer."

awh thank you sooo much!

on Sep. 4 2012 at 5:17 pm
LynaNicolee BRONZE, Cleveland, Ohio
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
Hate is too great a burden to bear. It injures the hater more than it injures the hated.

I feel this same way at times . . . ! But I love it (:

hail97 said...
on Sep. 2 2012 at 11:05 am
hail97, Carlisle, Pennsylvania
0 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
The future belongs to those who believe in the beauty of their dreams.

This is wonderful!

on Aug. 24 2012 at 2:06 pm
midnightsorrows, Redlands, California
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Favorite Quote:
''Don't let anyone pull you so low as to hate them.''-Martin Luther

This is beautiful!! <3

on Aug. 9 2012 at 1:37 am
Mistreated BRONZE, Cayucous, California
1 article 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Our deepest fear is not that we are inadequate. Our deepest fear is that we are powerful beyond measure. It is our light, not our darkness, that most frightens us. You playing small does not serve the world. There is nothing enlightened about shrinking so that other people won’t feel insecure around you. We are all meant to shine as children do. It’s not just in some of us; it is in everyone. And as we let our own lights shine, we unconsciously give other people permission to do the same. As we are liberated from our own fear, our presence automatically liberates others”.

I think you did the bestest job ever! i love it! you describe exactly how i feel! Keep up the great work


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