You & Me

October 8, 2009
By bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
bluemagnet22 PLATINUM, Dearborn Hts, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
You were born an origanal why die a copy?The secret to success is the consistency to pursue.To the world you may be one person,but to one person you may be the world.To receive the right answer,you must ask the right question.Don't worry be happy! :)


I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.


The author's comments:
Isn't it so sad when you see an old friend and their whole personality and outlook on life has changed...and not for the good. Well that's what inspired me for this poem...I hope you enjoyed it

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anonymous said...
on May. 29 2013 at 4:23 am
Just thought I'd let you know...I read your sonnet a couple of weeks ago while looking for inspiration for my own sonnet I had to write for a class assignment. I thought it was truly amazing and inspired me to write my own sonnet that wasn't boring, completely comprised of shakespearean language and make me want to pull my hair out as I wrote it. A couple of days ago we presented to the class and this guy read out the sonnet he had written, I couldn't help but think I'd heard it before. After hours spent driving myself crazy searching for where I'd heard it I FINALLY came back to this page and realized he had read yours. Congratulations, your famous! Love from Australia. 

on Apr. 13 2013 at 8:21 pm
This poem is really incredible. Anyone can relate to this and you did an amazing job:)

on Mar. 29 2013 at 3:16 pm
freckledleopardxox BRONZE, Troy, New York
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Very deep and emotional. I feel this way a lot whenever me and a very close friend drift apart and its just totally awkward when you see them again. Love it!

on Mar. 23 2013 at 8:06 pm
LittleRedRidingHood SILVER, Edinburgh, Other
6 articles 0 photos 6 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Even if I knew that tomorrow the world would go to pieces, I would still plant my apple tree."
Martin Luther

I love your poem! I think the idea's great, there were a couple of bits in which the rythum was very slightly off, but it was hardly noticable, so I think that it was still amazing! :0)

on Mar. 22 2013 at 11:04 am
kincaid_ily BRONZE, Osteen, Florida
2 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
i dont try to be captian wierd, im just me

It looks like to me you were trying to write an english sonnet. But for future refferance here is rhyme schemes... Italin: a-b-b-a, a-b-b-a, c-d-e-c-d-e English: a-b-a-b, c-d-c-d, e-f-e-f, g-g.

lysha said...
on Mar. 20 2013 at 12:45 pm
this was extremely good!

on Feb. 7 2013 at 1:08 pm
RyanM. PLATINUM, Klamath Falls, Oregon
30 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who deny the darkness in their hearts, are the ones who fall deeper into it."

Oh and amazing job by the way

on Feb. 7 2013 at 1:08 pm
RyanM. PLATINUM, Klamath Falls, Oregon
30 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who deny the darkness in their hearts, are the ones who fall deeper into it."

That's what my friends think of me, but I see it as they haven't changed for the better they stayed the same.

Delilah..2 said...
on Feb. 5 2013 at 10:07 pm
i love this poem is it a sonnet

on Feb. 1 2013 at 8:01 pm
WinterGreer SILVER, Wasilla, Alaska
7 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
dance like no one's watching/ love like you've never been hurt/ sing like no one's listening/ live like heaven is on earth

This poem is amazing, so true and relatable! Great job!

on Feb. 1 2013 at 12:42 am
Sonnets are comprised of 14 lines consisting of iambic pentameter.

on Jan. 31 2013 at 11:51 pm
WinterGreer SILVER, Wasilla, Alaska
7 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
dance like no one's watching/ love like you've never been hurt/ sing like no one's listening/ live like heaven is on earth

Well you can still have a sonnet without the iambic pentameter can't you? I just learned about sonnets in honors english and the iambic pentameter and stuff but our teacher told us that we could write a sonnet without that. Do they ALL NEED THAT EVERY TIME?

on Jan. 22 2013 at 12:55 am
shayKittyFlcoka GOLD, Blockingham, Illinois
11 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
I don't give my emtions to people who dont matter to me. you cant make me angry, happy, sad, or watever unless you count.

love this poem..shows howb ppl change we no one is lookin. great job!

grace1017 said...
on Jan. 18 2013 at 2:28 pm
You're right! This isnt a sonnet. A true sonnet has iambic pentameter. Which means the each line has ten syllables each. A true sonnet also has 3 stanza's and one closing statement with two lines. The first stanza needs to have a problem. The second is for when the problem gets worse and the third is a possible solution. The last two lines in the closing statement are for the solution. ALL LINES MUST HAVE TEN SYLLABLES EACH. (I did all caps to make it obvious or something... i dunno.)  Mmkay well yeah thats how to write a sonnet...

love_bird said...
on Jan. 16 2013 at 7:38 pm
love_bird, Guyton, Georgia
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this is really good! i wish i could write one like this  

on Dec. 21 2012 at 11:02 pm
VickyNickyKitty SILVER, Lincolnton, North Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Praise him with the tambourine and dancing; praise him with strings and flutes!
-Psalm 150:4

I loved this poem.  It was one of the most beautiful poems that I have ever read.  I think that everybody can relate to this poem in some way.  Wonderful job!

on Dec. 17 2012 at 7:49 pm
1stclasspoetrylover GOLD, Highland Village, Texas
11 articles 0 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Do not dwell in the past, do not dream of the future, concentrate the mind on the present moment.
by Buddha

Really beautiful work. It almost brought me to tears becuase it reminded me of a very close friend of mine that I lost. He/she becmae a different entity when i saw them; lost in negative thoughts and drained of life. Friendships can last forever, and we will remember them, but sometimes those memories about them are the only thing that we can relate to, because the current state of our friend(s), aren't like they use to be. Thanks again

on Dec. 7 2012 at 7:11 pm
IfLifeGivesYouLemons PLATINUM, Sacramento, California
37 articles 0 photos 22 comments

Favorite Quote:
When I was 5 years old, my mother always told me that happiness was the key to life. When I went to school, they asked me what I wanted to be when I grew up. I wrote down 'happy'. They told me I didn't understand the assignment. I told them they didn't understand life

It's a greay poem...but it's not a sonnet. There isn't a defined meter to it, and (please correct me if I'm wrong) I believe the rhyming pattern is wrong. It's an excellent piece of writing, but it's in the wrong category. 

on Dec. 3 2012 at 2:02 am
MidnightWriter SILVER, Ontario, Other
6 articles 0 photos 225 comments

Favorite Quote:
Writers are a less dangerous version of the career criminal. Everywhere they go, they see the potential for the perfect crime. The difference is that writers have better self control.

I met a friend on the city bus a week and a half ago. I hadn't spoken much to him in over a year. I guess he gave up on me. Anyway, I understand that lifeless feeling we see in someone's eyes. It's like looking into the face of a stranger, even though we used to know almost everything about them; we don't anymore. They don't know us. We have to leave it that way. 

Chloenhearts said...
on Dec. 2 2012 at 7:16 pm
Im not sure if you turned this in for a grade in school, but your poem was amazing. And sad. lol. But your rhyme scheme was off and so was the lines in the paragraphs. Soo I kind of changed your poem a little and hopefully you wont care if I turn it in as a grade. So it goes: (line 1)I saw you today, but youre not as I remember. (line 2) Your eyes no longer smile (line 3) Youve changed since last september (Line 4) I would travel for that old you miles and miles. 2nd paragraph: (Line 1) In my life you were cherished. (line 2) But now our relationship has went cold (Line 3) Your personality has tarnished (Line 4) Now that your heart is no longer gold 3rd paragraph: (Line 1) You fell from my arms (line 2) Just like leaves in the fall (Line 3) Sound the alarms (Line 4) Because your not apart of me at all. Couplet: (Line 1) You saw me today, the memories the same. (Line 2) My eyes still burst with fire, my love forever tamed. Sorry for the change but I just figured it would be respectful to show you, maybe it would help. The rhyme scheme and pattern/set up is now fixed. Thanks!




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