You & Me

October 8, 2009
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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.

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Kyra_McN said...
May 16, 2012 at 7:16 am
This is extraordinary, it touched me. 
TTTeeSS said...
May 16, 2012 at 7:12 am
This is really amazing. It touched me.
Special Me said...
May 1, 2012 at 12:49 pm
I think it was a great poem. You used a great simile comparing how he changed to how the leaves fall off a tree. Also I could hear the Rhythm of the poem. It was a great poem.
erin m said...
Apr. 30, 2012 at 8:11 am

I liked this poem because it had good rhythm and flowed well.

I also liked it because it had personification

MiaUnwritten said...
Apr. 28, 2012 at 7:02 am
Somehow I feel this piece was written for me. I so can relate, I mean really relate to what you wrote. So true too, I love it.
MusicRox1310 said...
Apr. 27, 2012 at 8:35 pm
This is such a truthful poem.  You conveyed your idea well and I can relate to this so much! Awesome job! This is going to my favorites!
irishdancer97 said...
Apr. 27, 2012 at 7:38 pm
I can really relate to this. I really hate when that happens, especially when it's happening right before your eyes and you can't do anything to stop it.
demos said...
Apr. 25, 2012 at 7:49 am
most truthful poem ive seen inna min
CTS207 said...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 10:42 pm
Very well doneand easily relateable, good work
dinosaurhifives said...
Apr. 2, 2012 at 6:41 pm
I can relate to this poem so much. One of my best friends has changed so much, I don't even think we relate anymore. 
Jaycee92 said...
Mar. 22, 2012 at 9:38 am
Great poem!
Kianie_B. said...
Mar. 6, 2012 at 1:57 pm
I dislike it when my friends change for the worse. ]: Totally relatable sonnet! Nice job!
nauset.johnson said...
Feb. 7, 2012 at 7:31 pm
Whats good about this poem is that it will always be true, like much of Shakespeare's work. Although like his, it's not in Shakespearean Sonnet form, or any other form I am aware of. With that said, I think this poem is great and the rhyming that it does have is perfect. Personally, I am not a fan of poems that every line rhymes somewhere; I like ones where there is a little rhyme here and there, giving it a definite song sense. Overalll, a job well done.
TrishhG said...
Feb. 4, 2012 at 12:55 pm
This poem was really good and I feel relevant as well. I really do feel as if it describes my relationship with some people. Really Good :)
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Jan. 27, 2012 at 11:07 pm
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Ella1 said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 12:09 pm
This is a great poem and I can definitely relate :) Would you mind reading my poem A Pink Watch, Portal, and Perpetual Sea?
chloe_garrett said...
Jan. 27, 2012 at 8:42 am
This poem is amazing. I can definitely relate. I'd love it if you could check out some of my poems and leave a comment and rating. I really like the way you write.
Kate298 said...
Jan. 26, 2012 at 5:55 pm
Loved this poem, I tagged it as a favorite :) I can totally relate to the topic, my poems are very similar to this one.
Silver2black said...
Jan. 18, 2012 at 12:17 pm
I did enjoy it Blue, I really enjoyed the rhyming and the read !!!
Call.Me.Clueless said...
Jan. 10, 2012 at 10:35 pm
I love this poem! It's very easy to relate to.
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