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I saw you today,
But you're not as I remember.
Your eyes no longer sparkle,
You've changed since last September.

You were so full of life,
Yet now you are so cold.
Your personality has tarnished,
When you once had a heart of gold.

You fell out of my life,
Just like leaves in the fall.
We were so very close,
Now you're not here at all.

You saw me today,
I'm the same as you remember.
My eyes still sparkle,
I've not changed since last September.




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Hmc15 said...
May 11, 2011 at 1:58 pm:
This is very good, don't stop writting! You really good!
 
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BlakeAyrl said...
May 11, 2011 at 8:08 am:
or i should say who
 
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BlakeAyrl said...
May 11, 2011 at 8:07 am:
True the girl i loved changed and then relized it and saw she didnt like what she changed to
 
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racing king said...
May 9, 2011 at 2:30 pm:
I also know how some people, change
 
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authorgirl_4_19 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 8, 2011 at 6:42 pm:
beautiful, simply beautiful
 
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jocyLOL said...
May 7, 2011 at 10:02 pm:
I know what you mean. I had a friend who changed so much that I feel like i don't know who she is anymore.
 
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SaddieBaby96 said...
May 6, 2011 at 9:54 am:
i love it!!!! and i know how you feel
 
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LiveLoveAnna said...
May 4, 2011 at 8:49 pm:
I really get how you feel. I'm sorry things are that way, The poem is great though! :)
 
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amber1997 said...
May 2, 2011 at 3:41 pm:
i know how you feel. when i read this it was touching. so good! keep it up :)
 
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bridgey said...
Apr. 28, 2011 at 11:49 am:
this is amazing. i know exactly how it feels
 
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Edmondeeee said...
Apr. 14, 2011 at 11:02 pm:

yeaah, know how you feel.

this was great !

 

 
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Dominicano_Loco said...
Apr. 11, 2011 at 2:55 pm:
You strike with a red hot iron and deliver you point like a seasoned mailman. Well done.
 
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LaurennnnThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Apr. 9, 2011 at 1:05 am:
This poem is brillantly written. I love the meter. And I love the way the last stanza mimicks the first. It gives a sense of familarity to it which is a juxtoposition to the friend changing, but it also stays the same which mimicks the way the speaker of the poem stays the same. I love that about it.
 
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Grandma said...
Apr. 7, 2011 at 1:13 pm:
- i love this poem soo much this poem talks about how i really feel right i got with my ex sep 19 2009 n he has changed but im still the same (tears) <3
 
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ScottieMeuse said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:34 pm:
oh, and your title is improper grammar. it should be You & I. that is all.
 
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ScottieMeuse said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:33 pm:
i agreed with the authors comments about the poem. i liked your rhyme scheme, ABCB.
 
Kary123 replied...
Apr. 15, 2011 at 8:11 pm :
I like the rhyme scheme too.
 
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kayllaax3 said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:08 pm:
I really liked the personification/simile when you said "You fel out of my life just like leaves in the fall" also it created imagery ! :D
 
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hiii said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 12:06 pm:
this is my favorite poem yet, i like the rhyming and the way you can tell how the author was feeling when she wrote this.
 
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kvater said...
Apr. 6, 2011 at 11:59 am:
i really liked this poem i can relate to it and i like the ryming
 
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