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Wandering through the forest I feel fear
I hear footsteps and see shadows around
Anything can be hiding very near
I sit so quiet - hear that scary sound
I look and see nothing it is so dark
I can’t stand this dark and so I must fight
I try and try until I see a spark
A shining lovely beautiful bright light
I don't have to be scared ever again
Now that I have light I feel such great hope
My feelings start to soar from one to ten
Even if I have no light I can cope
As I wander through the hills where I belong
I feel such joy I have to sing a song



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1stclasspoetrylover said...
Jan. 8, 2013 at 12:28 pm:
Very vivid detail. Much fear seems to arise out of the poem as if the speaker was trapped not once before. Strong diction. Everyone needs a "spark" to "ignite" thier hope or spirit as this poem did here. very well done
 
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Mellifluous said...
Oct. 3, 2011 at 3:09 pm:
This is an excellent Shakespearean sonnet. I love the imagery. You have a few issues with rhythm--where the wrong word has to have the accent in order to fit the meter--but that's not too much of a problem. Great job!
 
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LeahSkai said...
Nov. 29, 2010 at 9:46 pm:

I like this sonnet. I like the opening few lines the most. It makes the reader want to read more. The vagueness is enchanting. Read my sonnet and tell me what you think?

 

 
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Milo! said...
Mar. 14, 2010 at 4:58 pm:
I really love this. I really like how everyone can relate to this. I hope you keep writing, because this is great. You should check out some of my stuff. I think you would like it.
 
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