Lassitude MAG

By Brian S., Philadelphia, PA

     Midnight stars that drag along,
foolish man who sings heavy-hearted songs.
Flowers in the field - never to blossom,
ambitious dreams hidden at the bottom,
wonder turns to resentment, as summer turns to autumn.
Seasons of color, and days of faded undertone,
intangible scent of this cologne,
leaves me in a daydream of yesteryear,
I’ll keep living in this nightmare ...
until all my life disappears.
Too many times now,
I’ve struggled against the tide,
Too many times now,
I’ve had to listen to these lies,
Too many times now,
I’ve had to drown in my own cries,
these very tears,
I’ve shed for my own creed,
but I no longer have any blood to bleed,
and I’d love to believe,
that you’re no longer something that I need.
This oblivious angel rejects her wings,
and all her given prestige,
love is not a matter in which she is willing to concede.
These hands bare nothing,
as those worn eyes take in the dwindling bliss,
this flame withers into an abyss.




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i love this so much!

This is so true. Your great at writing. :)

on Feb. 1 2013 at 8:15 pm
WinterGreer SILVER, Wasilla, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
dance like no one's watching/ love like you've never been hurt/ sing like no one's listening/ live like heaven is on earth

Wow this sonnet is incredible, it's very deep and dark and raw, and I really like reading poetry and stories like that. It has a passion that is very relatable and I love it! GREAT JOB!

on Feb. 12 2012 at 1:17 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
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Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

wow!! just wow

on Sep. 11 2011 at 10:47 am
SLim_SHaDy SILVER, Akola, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Arise, Awake and stop not till the goal is reached!

What a poem! Looks like to be written by a world class poet!!! Really nice!

on Aug. 20 2011 at 9:59 pm
emilybwrites SILVER, Villa Hills, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
last night i lay in bed, looking up at the stars and i thought to myself, where the heck is the ceiling?

this had me hooked great job! please check out my poems "Forgotten Domain" and "The Others" and comment/rate them :)

on Jul. 29 2011 at 3:09 pm
WhatAboutNikki DIAMOND, Uncasville, Connecticut
77 articles 4 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Speak your mind even if your voice shakes." -Unknown
"The function of music is to release us from the tyranny of concious thought"-Unknown
"With me, poetry is not a purpose, but a passion" -Edgar Allen Poe
"Mad is stupid"-Pops

This is really amazing!! I's deep and mysterious in a way :) Great job, keep writing!!! :D

forever23 said...
on May. 24 2011 at 1:26 pm
forever23, Atlanta, Indiana
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oh my goodness this is amasing!!! good job! i can relate to this soo much!

Debbie1 SILVER said...
on May. 2 2011 at 5:07 pm
Debbie1 SILVER, Brooklyn, New York
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Favorite Quote:
"As long as there is life, there is hope."

I LOVE this! Really great job!

on May. 2 2011 at 4:27 pm
DancingInTheRain SILVER, Toronto, Other
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It's called iambic penthameter.

on Dec. 21 2010 at 9:38 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

Thanks. If this isn't a sonnet then why is it in the teen sonnet section of poetry on here?Shouldn't it be in another section?

ellie315 GOLD said...
on Dec. 21 2010 at 2:25 pm
ellie315 GOLD, South Pasadena, California
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Favorite Quote:
"And this, our life, exempt from public haunt, finds tongues in trees, books in the running brooks, sermons in stones, and good in everything." -- William Shakespeare

a sonnet is a 14 lines, each line is exactly 10 syllables. it is written in dactylic hexameter (i think thats what its called)...so it sounds like ba DUM ba DUM ba DUM, etc. (every other syllable is strong). Rhyme scheme:

A B A B C D C D E F E F GG

(a rhymes with a, b with b, etc.)

make sense? also, the description i gave you is for the most common sonnet, a Shakespearian sonnet. But there are other sonnets made popular by other writers so maybe Lassitude is in a kind of sonnet im not familiar with...

but this is a BEAUTIFUL piece of writing none the less!


on Nov. 7 2010 at 8:45 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

This is so sad... I feel for you, and I think everyone has a pretty good idea of what this feels like. I love the mixed up rhyme scheme. This is a fantastic sonnet!

on Aug. 12 2010 at 12:37 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
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Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

Oh.. it isn't. never mind then.

on Aug. 11 2010 at 12:33 pm
This isn't a sonnet.

Book_worm said...
on Jun. 28 2010 at 9:00 pm

"This oblivious angel rejects her wings"  

Brilliant


on May. 15 2010 at 2:38 pm
Alice_in_Wonderland GOLD, San Clemente, California
16 articles 0 photos 620 comments

Favorite Quote:
“I could give up, I could stay stuck, or I could move on, So I put one foot front of the other, No no no nothing’s gonna break my stride, “ –David Archuleta (The Other Side of Down)

Wow! great job! I can see why it was chosen to be in the magazine. DO you have any advice on writing sonnets?(i've never written a sonnet before.)

on May. 15 2010 at 12:30 pm
SeptJess16 BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
4 articles 0 photos 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Where classification is key, I want to erase the shred lines so I can be ME." - Stacey-Ann Chin

this poem is really really well written. You did an amazing job and it's ridiculous how your words express my inner feelings about my life.

"But I no longer have any blood to bleed,
and I’d love to believe,
that you’re no longer something that I need."

Amazing line. I love it.


on Apr. 23 2010 at 10:52 am
LittleBritt PLATINUM, Washington, New Jersey
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loooove the line "this oblivious angel rejcts her wings" very well written!

on Mar. 10 2010 at 4:08 pm
brittneyh SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
Your destination isn't mapped out for you by someone. You map out your destination not only for yourself, but by yourself. -Brittney Harvey

&&. It's much easier to run when you've got something to chase.

OMG!! This poem in stupendous! I love it. I'm good at poetry, but my poems have nothing on this. Good work girl! Keep them coming.




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