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     a drumming beat
rolls through her head
seems screamed aloud
but yet unsaid
she marches on
to her new song
tries to move on
she marches on
“I’m better off
better without
I’m better off
without a doubt.
It is a fact
no looking back
for what I lack
(maintain the act)”
a constant beat
tears through her head
she tries to scream
but nothing’s said
she marches on
her path is long
tears far from gone
she marches on.
“I’m better off
better without
I’m better off
without a doubt
no looking back
for what you lack
I’ll never crack
(maintain the act).”



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Renda.AndersonThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 9:30 pm:
The flow was great and the wording beautiful. I love it!
 
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luvmeformeThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 12 at 4:20 pm:
OMG!! that was amazing. Your flow is awesome.. I LOVED IT. <3
 
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horsewriter4evr said...
Oct. 23, 2011 at 6:06 pm:
This poem is great! It flows nicely as you read it.
 
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dark_armor1 said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 6:10 pm:
i absolutely love the flow of this poem! good job!
 
BieberLover16 replied...
Oct. 8, 2011 at 11:01 am :
I do too! I love it!
 
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NoxInviticus said...
Mar. 16, 2011 at 3:20 pm:
This is a really nice poem. I love the rhythm and repitition as well. Only thing is...this isn't a sonnet my dear. I would rather suggest submitting this into the song lyrics category. :)
 
Music0609This teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 26, 2011 at 11:48 pm :
I dont know if you meant to pick song lyrics when you submitted this, but indeed, it's not a sonnet. It IS really fantasic though. I would LOVE to hear it as a song, or just simply, a poem :) Keep creating and writing!!! :D
 
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LaurenE. said...
Jan. 9, 2011 at 9:37 pm:
Wow great stuff. The picture kind of creeps me out though....
 
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GreenLover said...
Oct. 13, 2010 at 10:27 am:

love the beat to it!

good work

 

 
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sarabeara This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 30, 2010 at 7:59 pm:

This does have a rythm

a song version with similar inspiration would be fantastic!

 
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Chelz said...
May 12, 2010 at 8:53 am:
This poem sent an image into my head and i was dancing with it.  It was very moving and understandable. Nice work, keep it UP!
 
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nickp2115 said...
Apr. 28, 2010 at 12:44 pm:
this is a cool poem, you could almost sing to it
 
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earthy_kat said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 7:04 pm:
Interesting.
 
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CountryGothic said...
Jan. 22, 2010 at 6:44 am:
Wow, I love this. It's the best I've read here so far! I'm addining it to my favorites! I hope you're going to write more, if so, I'll read it.
 
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ashleygurl said...
Dec. 22, 2009 at 6:13 pm:
deep....... i like it
 
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~Corrii~ said...
Nov. 5, 2009 at 12:09 pm:
It's nice
 
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bluemagnet22 said...
Oct. 8, 2009 at 12:39 pm:
I like...i like alot
 
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Alyssa S. said...
Sept. 18, 2009 at 10:08 pm:
Nice very nice.
 
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