I’m better off MAG

By Ashley F., Idaho Falls, ID

     a drumming beat
rolls through her head
seems screamed aloud
but yet unsaid
she marches on
to her new song
tries to move on
she marches on
“I’m better off
better without
I’m better off
without a doubt.
It is a fact
no looking back
for what I lack
(maintain the act)”
a constant beat
tears through her head
she tries to scream
but nothing’s said
she marches on
her path is long
tears far from gone
she marches on.
“I’m better off
better without
I’m better off
without a doubt
no looking back
for what you lack
I’ll never crack
(maintain the act).”




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i love this so much!

very nice poem

SallyW. BRONZE said...
on Jul. 3 2016 at 3:34 pm
SallyW. BRONZE, Atlanta, New York
4 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There's no point in being an adult if you can't act childish sometimes." - Doctor Who, The 4th Doctor.

Beautiful Poem!

on Nov. 4 2015 at 12:04 pm
mariyahm-- BRONZE, Plaquemine, Louisiana
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I enjoy this poem because the quote “I’m better off better without, I’m better off without a doubt.” This can relate to my life because at times I feel like that if someone don’t have what they want then maybe they don’t have it for a reason. Objects/Material that is wanted is not always needed,so therefore you should get the items that's needed the most and not the items that you want.

on Aug. 29 2015 at 8:32 pm
justmyexistentialthoughts GOLD, Cumberland, Rhode Island
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You can't make great stuff until you've made good stuff, you can't make good stuff until you make alright stuff, and you can't make alright stuff until you've made pretty bad stuff." - P.J. Liguori

This is amazing! I totally relate, in fact I've written something similar if you'd like to check it out

Lanimal SILVER said...
on Aug. 29 2015 at 12:38 pm
Lanimal SILVER, Thornton, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
"It is not the mountain we conquer, but ourselves."
-Edmund Hillary

This poem has such great wording and rhythm. Amazing job!

Xandi said...
on Jun. 2 2015 at 10:22 pm
Xandi, Mckinney, Texas
0 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Cinderella never asked for a prince. She asked for a night off and a dress." -Kiera Cass

And a lot of adults would throw a fit.

garri BRONZE said...
on Nov. 15 2014 at 9:31 pm
garri BRONZE, Lagrange, Georgia
2 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
judging a person does not define who they are , it defines who you are.

this is a really great peom, and you know it would make a great song also!

on Jul. 6 2014 at 9:30 pm
Princess.Renda GOLD, Travelers Rest, South Carolina
14 articles 0 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
"All the world is made of faith, trust, and pixie dust." --J.M. Barrie, Peter Pan

The flow was great and the wording beautiful. I love it!

on Mar. 12 2014 at 4:20 pm
AloneandFree SILVER, Williamston, South Carolina
5 articles 0 photos 40 comments

Favorite Quote:
Rise above the storm and you will find the sunshine.
-Mario Fernandez

OMG!! that was amazing. Your flow is awesome.. I LOVED IT. <3

on Oct. 23 2011 at 6:06 pm
Belluna45 PLATINUM, Shelbyville, Kentucky
31 articles 0 photos 58 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Look after my heart- I've left it with you."
-Stephenie Meyer (Eclipse (Twilight #3))
"Either write something worth reading or do something wor
th writing."
-Benjamin Franklin
"A dishonest man you can always trust to be dishonest."
-Johnny Depp

This poem is great! It flows nicely as you read it.

on Oct. 8 2011 at 11:01 am
Countrylife4 GOLD, Maine
11 articles 4 photos 118 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Someday soon we're gonna catch that dream we've been chasing"
"Seven days without a horse makes one weak."
"The worst part of riding is when you dismount."

Insult my clothes, I say, “Okay, thanks for the compliment.”
Insult the way I look, I say, “Thanks for notifying me.”
Mock me and say riding isn’t a sport, and I’ll say,”You say that ’cause you can’t ride.” But before you make fun of my horse, make sure you have “911″ on your speed dial.

I do too! I love it!

on Aug. 17 2011 at 6:10 pm
Jessi_suarez1 GOLD, Kissimmee, Florida
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i absolutely love the flow of this poem! good job!

on Jul. 26 2011 at 11:48 pm
WhatAboutNikki DIAMOND, Uncasville, Connecticut
77 articles 4 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Speak your mind even if your voice shakes." -Unknown
"The function of music is to release us from the tyranny of concious thought"-Unknown
"With me, poetry is not a purpose, but a passion" -Edgar Allen Poe
"Mad is stupid"-Pops

I dont know if you meant to pick song lyrics when you submitted this, but indeed, it's not a sonnet. It IS really fantasic though. I would LOVE to hear it as a song, or just simply, a poem :) Keep creating and writing!!! :D

on Mar. 16 2011 at 3:20 pm
NoxInviticus SILVER, Las Vegas, Nevada
7 articles 1 photo 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I never paint dreams. I paint my own reality." Frida Kahlo

This is a really nice poem. I love the rhythm and repitition as well. Only thing is...this isn't a sonnet my dear. I would rather suggest submitting this into the song lyrics category. :)

on Jan. 9 2011 at 9:37 pm
LaurenE. PLATINUM, Nashville, Tennessee
26 articles 19 photos 51 comments

Favorite Quote:
Two woods diverge in a yellow wood, and I- I took the one less traveled. And it has made all the difference. -Robert Frost

Wow great stuff. The picture kind of creeps me out though....

on Oct. 13 2010 at 10:27 am
GreenLover SILVER, Anaheim, California
5 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
Time is but a number

love the beat to it!

good work

 


on Aug. 30 2010 at 7:59 pm
starryeyed10 GOLD, Pittsburgh, Pennsylvania
17 articles 29 photos 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
if you don't get into it, no one will

This does have a rythm

a song version with similar inspiration would be fantastic!


Chelz PLATINUM said...
on May. 12 2010 at 8:53 am
Chelz PLATINUM, Iron Mountain, Michigan
23 articles 3 photos 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"When life gives you lemons, bite into it and embrace the bitter taste of reality." (My own words)

This poem sent an image into my head and i was dancing with it.  It was very moving and understandable. Nice work, keep it UP!

on Apr. 28 2010 at 12:44 pm
nickp2115 BRONZE, Springdale, Arkansas
2 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Then let the fires of hell, consume the last descendant, of the hated Dragon Lineage!"
(Zedonius, Ninja Gaiden 2)

this is a cool poem, you could almost sing to it




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