Love’s Mutation MAG

May 25, 2009
By Molly Clementz BRONZE, St. Charles, Illinois
Molly Clementz BRONZE, St. Charles, Illinois
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Release me swiftly from your red-rimmed eyes,
I can't bear contrived smiles anymore.
No more false greetings with your cheerful guise,
Relieve your cracking façade, I implore.
Sunshine-filled days and a happy semblance,
Amorous gazes during this sweet repose,
The pure lush seedling of this remembrance
Became rotten flesh of a with'ring rose.
Love is first a wild and wistful wing
Of which dreams fly beyond our volition.
Then love transforms to a tight tethering,
Thick frayed ropes of stifling suspicion.
In a perfect world, love has no restraint,
But nothing lives and matures without taint.


The author's comments:
I’ve always fancied myself a bard from the Renaissance, misplaced in the 21st century, and find that sonnets are an excellent way to drive an eloquent point. This particular format is an English sonnet about how poorly relationships can turn out.

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NOIZTHIMS GOLD said...
on Apr. 6 2015 at 6:55 pm
NOIZTHIMS GOLD, South Jordan, Utah
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Favorite Quote:
"If your eyes could speak, what... what would they say?" -Max (from "The Book Thief")

I like it but you need to read up on Renaissance sonnets. your meter is nuts.

RealRiter GOLD said...
on Feb. 20 2015 at 4:04 pm
RealRiter GOLD, Astoria, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
"I did not fail 101 times, but I simply found 101 ways that did not work." -Thomas Edison

Wow. I am impressed. You should take my place for ratings. You definitely went above and beyond in this poem. Congrats!

on Jul. 30 2014 at 9:39 pm
EmilytheBelleofA. DIAMOND, Athens, Georgia
81 articles 5 photos 1492 comments

Favorite Quote:
To love is to be vulnerable; Triumph is born out of struggle; We notice shadows most when they stand alone in the midst of overwhelming light.

I LOVE THIS. The rhythym, the feeling in it is AMAZING. Keep writing, please! Thank you for sharing this!

on Jul. 30 2014 at 2:40 pm
TheComet PLATINUM, Mostaganem, Other
22 articles 1 photo 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Speak when you are angry and you will make the best speech you will ever regret" -Ambrose Bierce
" Be yourself! Everybody else is already taken ;)"
"Don't go where the path leads you. Go instead where there's no path and leave a trail ;)"-R.W.Emerson

Nice work on the rhyme scheme I loved it!! And most of all I loved your poem cuz it's TRUE. You're so perfectly right. It's kind of sad but somehow that's how life goes. Nothing lasts forever. Keep up the great work it's awesome ^_^

on Jul. 8 2014 at 3:24 pm
elycavill SILVER, Samobor, Other
5 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Leave nothing but footprints,
Take nothing but pictures,
Kill nothing but time.

I just love it. Simply loving it.

Lizzy said...
on Apr. 14 2013 at 8:59 pm
cute little poem :) heehee

BlackFTW said...
on May. 4 2012 at 6:27 pm
BlackFTW, Seattle, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
Everything I say is a lie.

Yeah, it is a rather large text wall.

on Dec. 24 2011 at 5:41 pm
AbandonedSoul BRONZE, Baldwin Park, California
3 articles 2 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For it so falls out
That what we have we prize not to the worth,
Whiles we enjoy it, but being lack’d and lost,
Why, then we rack the value; then we find
The virtue, that possession would not show us
Whiles it was ours" - William Shakespeare

Finally, a proper sonnet with the right rhyme scheme. It is very amazing, I grant you that. It could be improved visually if you divided the quatrains from each other and the couplet by skipping a line.Again, it is the best sonnet I have ever seen.

on May. 20 2011 at 9:58 am
DarkAngelNinjaXP, Madison, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
When dancing with Death, don't trip.

I love the Renaissance too, and this sonnet is just amazing.

on Nov. 7 2010 at 8:54 pm
Karamel PLATINUM, Gwinn, Michigan
35 articles 0 photos 38 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Clever people will recognize and tolerate nothing but cleverness." -Anonymous

I totally know how you feel about imagining yourself as a bard! And I would certainly listen to you; this sonnet is perfect; the way it flows and jerks back and forth in its healthy rhythm. Thanks so much for sharing it!

JewBoi BRONZE said...
on Sep. 15 2010 at 3:15 pm
JewBoi BRONZE, Winter Park, Florida
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This sonnet is so beautiful! It tells a story in your mind as you read it. On a scale 1-10, i'd rate it at least a 100!

on Dec. 1 2009 at 11:52 pm
Lixxy_93 DIAMOND, Westminster, California
53 articles 0 photos 52 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have them, flaunt them" -Circle of Friends

"may the saddest day of the future be no worse then the happiest day of your past" -irish blessing

If male homosexuals are called "gay," then female homosexuals should be called "ecstatic."

this amazing

on Nov. 9 2009 at 5:34 pm
FluffeeKittee SILVER, Birmingham, Alabama
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Sometimes I wish you would pay closer attention to my favorite songs, because the words they sing are the words I'm too afraid to say" -- anonymous.

Very deep, thank you for sharing it.

~Corrii~ said...
on Nov. 5 2009 at 12:11 pm
~Corrii~, Romeo, Alaska
0 articles 0 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
look before you fall

Nice poem its cool




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