The Other Me

May 10, 2013
By iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -


I am a girl
Who knows this other girl
She lives in another world
I think we resemble
But yet
She is a little disassembled
It's a slur when she talks
It's a blur when she walks
She stays inside and she writes all

night
Until life is no more

She put a knife to her heart
It left a scar
Kinda in the shape of a star
I asked her why she did it
She stopped and admitted
She prayed to God for the sins she committed
She cried
And cried
Because she hides
Whats inside ..

Whenever she wrote
She said the words had spoke
And they told her in such vulgar
That hate & lust was a must
So when she opens her mouth there is no sound
And when she opens her eyes there is no life
There's only black & white
Just her & the sky
It's always dark in our hearts
And I wonder why..


The author's comments:
I just went into a very inner part of myself that people don't usually know. I just wrote the things I was feeling at the time.I hope it touches or inspires someone!

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on May. 22 2013 at 3:59 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Thanks ! Your Comment Is Very Much Appreciated :)

on May. 22 2013 at 1:56 pm
Court901 BRONZE, Magnolia, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Imagniation is not a talent of some people, but it is the health of every person" -Ralph Waldo Emerson

I really enjoyed reading this poem. It gave me chills it was so good. Keep up the good work.

on May. 21 2013 at 4:03 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Thank You Very Much ! :)

on May. 21 2013 at 5:48 am
Rebecca.xx BRONZE, Springboro, Ohio
4 articles 3 photos 39 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I became insane, with long intervals of horrible sanity."
-Edgar Allan Poe
(this summarizes my life)

Great poem!! The picture you chose made it even better. I loved all the details that made it dark and fearful, it was definitely chilling. I would suggest changing the word 'kinda' because it seems a bit like slang, but other wise, love it!

on May. 20 2013 at 11:44 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Thanks ! Very Appreciated :)

on May. 20 2013 at 10:09 pm
Wings10FeetTall GOLD, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
May your words be sharp.
- Christopher Paolini


Nobody's going to wait for you, so do it now.
-Ingrid Michaelson


Broken hearts heal, but never the same.
- Jessica Romo

Idiots rely on luck.
-Sherlock Holmes

This is great! Really emotional. 

on May. 20 2013 at 3:54 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Thank You Very Much ! And Unfortunately Im Not Really A Grey's Anatomy Fan ... I've Never Watched It Before But I Shall Give It A Try For You :)

on May. 19 2013 at 10:34 pm
wordnerd54 SILVER, Sparta, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"Writing is a socially acceptable form of schizophrenia." ~E.L. Doctorow

Hi! Wow, I love this! It's so raw, so emotional. It's "dark and twisty" (hopefully you're a Grey's Anatomy fan.) The rhythm of it is intiguing. I love the way that the language is very simple - there's nothing fancy in it (in terms of big words, I mean!), and it shows the power in a simply worded poem. Great, great job!!

on May. 16 2013 at 8:01 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

:)))) Thanks Sarah ! 

sarah98 BRONZE said...
on May. 16 2013 at 6:23 pm
sarah98 BRONZE, Holyoke, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
It is better to write for yourself and have no audience than write for your audience and have no self.

wow i loveee the rhthym of this. it's gorgeous.

on May. 16 2013 at 5:09 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Thank You So Much And Believe Me , I Will ! 

OlveraJorge1 said...
on May. 16 2013 at 9:56 am
Really moving and caught my emotional side! Replying back! THANK YOU! Please keep writing?

on May. 15 2013 at 8:40 pm
iDani-iBeauty SILVER, Chicago, Illinois
5 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
- Failure Is Only The Opportunity To Begin Again, Only This Time More Wisely
- Henry Ford -

- Thank You Sooo Much ! Thanks For Taking The Time To Actually Read This ! I Really Appreciate It :)

Mckay ELITE said...
on May. 15 2013 at 6:46 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

Very touched right now by this song. Defitnitely continue to write pieces like this. I enjoyed reading it. I love the title and the rythm to it. 3rd or so stanza is the best. I think anyone, regardless of gender, can relate to this song. It's very universal with its message and theme. 


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