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Broken love

March 19, 2013
By Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"


this is the me with the broken heart,
you tore away so why can't you hear the voices i scream,
why can't i show who i am,
because were different you and I,
I'm a monster your a goddess,
your beautiful I,m a beast in sheep's clothing,
a twisted soul of a forbidden love,
but how can i leave you behind,
when you stole my mind,
i love you and that's all i care,
but do you love me or that jerk you stole my life,

i gave you love you stole my eyes,
i give you me you throw me aside,
I give you my heart you rip it apart,
I tell you the truth you drown me with lies but still I stay I don't know why

A broken road that lead to us
Marks the path of nothingness
The pain of betrayal as you leave for another
brings back the memories of what we were before
The siren blows through my head yet again.

I gave you my love you stole my eyes
I give you me you push it aside
I give you my heart you rip it apart
I Tell you the truth you drown me with lies
I find the courage to leave you for good,
You tell me you change your eyes lie again,
I walk away into the world,
the birds hiss your name,
I'm free from the lies I lived with you


The author's comments:
What happens when love break away at least to me"

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on Nov. 5 2013 at 11:17 am
KaylaaLovee GOLD, Philadelphia, Pennsylvania
14 articles 1 photo 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Imperfection is beauty. Madness is genius. And its better to be absolutely ridiculous than absolutely boring. And when it comes down to it, I let them think what they want. If they care enough to bother with what I do, I'm already better than them."

I love it! your poetry is so consistent & amazing !!!

Monicaa GOLD said...
on Apr. 26 2013 at 3:21 pm
Monicaa GOLD, North Las Vegas, Nevada
11 articles 0 photos 27 comments
iLove This One Too :) i Especially Love This Part, " gave you love you stole my eyes,
i give you me you throw me aside,
I give you my heart you rip it apart,
I tell you the truth you drown me with lies but still I stay I don't know why" <3

on Apr. 3 2013 at 4:33 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

Thanks and it dose have a strange flow but that only makes it more unique thanks to all who commented you really helped me out :3

on Apr. 1 2013 at 8:02 pm
RakshaWillow SILVER, Watkinsvile, Georgia
5 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We have nothing to fear but fear itself."

Wonderful!!! you're voice really can be felt in your words.

on Apr. 1 2013 at 4:10 pm
AmorMoritur PLATINUM, Monroe, North Carolina
25 articles 38 photos 71 comments

Favorite Quote:
"There is only you and your camera. The limitations in your photography are in yourself, for what we see is what we are." ~Ernst Haas

these are all so beautiful...

ZainabS SILVER said...
on Mar. 30 2013 at 4:14 pm
ZainabS SILVER, Karachi, Other
5 articles 3 photos 14 comments
Im in loveee withthisss  

on Mar. 30 2013 at 3:43 pm
Another sad poem of despair and anger. I type of resentment I can relate to, but this poem is more like beautiful song that refuses to have a melody. I love it. very, very sad

on Mar. 30 2013 at 11:29 am
romanticpoet GOLD, Dhaka, Other
16 articles 2 photos 26 comments

Favorite Quote:
love is like a rose, it has many colors & sights of beauty in spite of having thorns

the think i like most in this poem that it has a nice gesture & a nice concept

on Mar. 29 2013 at 10:09 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

sorry sad to say i can't sing to say my life but it goes soft at first like its two people singing lol i know im confusing maybe all embarass myself and sing it lol

dagnytaggart said...
on Mar. 29 2013 at 10:07 pm
Do you have a tune in mind for this song? Because I LOVE the lyrics, and this would probs be my fave song. Can you sing? Because put it up on youtube or teenink!!!!! So anyaways this song was super relatable, and I can totes feel the pain.

on Mar. 29 2013 at 9:23 pm
BorderlineGenius777 SILVER, Lewiston, Idaho
7 articles 0 photos 80 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If all our misfortunes were laid in one common heap, whence everyone must take an equal portion, most would be content to take their own and depart."- Socrates

Very Interesting. I loved your choice of words...

on Mar. 29 2013 at 8:27 pm
rockyyyyyyyyy SILVER, Lawrenceville, Georgia
9 articles 0 photos 61 comments

Favorite Quote:
dont let people drive u crazy if you know its in walking distance

nice stuff you word choice was excellent, but a strange flow. i suggest revising the way you write it. putting the words you used on another line on a latter one, this poem would be perfect. and oh there arre a few grammer mistakes. but your word choice is excellent

on Mar. 28 2013 at 8:37 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

This is a great piece! It almost reminds of song lyrics with how it's written. This has wonderful imagery and an interesting flow. It describes the feeling of heart break perfectly. I loved it! Keep it up :)

on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:33 pm
HopethroughFaithInGod BRONZE, Perry, Michigan
2 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For every action there is an equal and opposite reaction" - Issac Newton (i think?)

hmmmm your writing skills show... yes

Hanban12 ELITE said...
on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:29 pm
Hanban12 ELITE, Lake Worth, Florida
133 articles 7 photos 633 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost; that is where they should be. Now put foundations under them."
Henry David Thoreau

"I fell in love the way you fall asleep; slowly, and then all at once."
John Green

Love love love it! The emotion is very strong and clear :D

on Mar. 28 2013 at 5:17 pm
WhiteSwan13 SILVER, Hawera, Other
8 articles 0 photos 35 comments

Favorite Quote:
Nothing is Impossible & We Live and Learn

Love it soooo much :)


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