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Thoughts on Childhood

December 30, 2012
By Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein


Sitting on a bench,
Not a comfortable one,
In a public park,
It was not dark.
As I was thinking of invention,
Something caught my attention,
It was a boy,
Quite a small boy,
Playing with joy,
With his toy.

Tears trickled down,
My cheeks, I looked down,
Upon the green ground,
Remembered an old wound.
That wound of emotion,
Stopped all my motion.
Seeing the child play,
Made me sad, this way,
I was not being cruel.
But had been a fool,
Fool in the sense,
Which is quite dense.

I wanna re-live my childhood,
If only be possible, it could!


The author's comments:
The scene of the poem is all imagination, but the thoughts and the message are quite autobiographical and real.

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on Apr. 24 2013 at 2:49 pm
Jade.I.Am ELITE, Fishers, Indiana
214 articles 14 photos 1163 comments

Favorite Quote:
“If you're losing your soul and you know it, then you've still got a soul left to lose”
― Charles Bukowski

Haha this was sort of emotional AND playful, to me...I liked it mucho

on Apr. 21 2013 at 12:03 pm
SaphiraBrightscales DIAMOND, Islamabad, Other
75 articles 16 photos 1143 comments

Favorite Quote:
I've learned that people will forget what you said, people will forget what you did, but people will never forget how you made them feel.
- Maya Angelou
When i was little/I used to point a chubby finger toward the dark sky/And ask my father/why some stars moved and others didn’t/He would laugh and explain that some were airplanes/I still wish on them today ~ Laugh-It-Out
The feathers of a crow are black/The ink of my pen is blacker/The pain of my heart is blackest~ Mckay
If love produced a blossom/I’d take it in my palm/What a blessing, the bright color!/How soothing, such a balm!/I’d keep a petal for my own/The rest, drop from my hands/For such a flower would multiply/And populate the lands~ thesilentraven
And I began to rival legends/Long entombed before my birth./But for all my much envied fame/The lust for more would not abate./The plaques and prizes with my name/Will, like all things, disintegrate. ~ TheEpic95 now known as Helena_Noel

Aww that's true most of us feel that way....just one tiny thing I'd like to point out... Umm you rhymed "wound" with "ground" I guess, But wound is pronounced as "woo-ound" just check the pronunciation. :D BUt overall lovely poem.

on Apr. 17 2013 at 12:58 pm
UsamaAhmed BRONZE, Lahore, Other
3 articles 1 photo 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
It's Better To Live A Day Like A Lion Than A Thousand Years Like A Jackal . (Tipu Sultan)

hahah awsum yaar... but i agree with sparkle.

on Apr. 14 2013 at 10:13 am
Shaas_It_is.. BRONZE, Udupi, Other
2 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Happiness presents itself before man with a crown of sorrow. He who accepts it must accept both.
-Swami Vivekananda

Don't be led by your problems. Be led by your dreams.

share the same feeling..wanna live my childhood again...the innocence and carefreeness haunts me still....  

on Apr. 12 2013 at 7:47 am
AbbaDabbaDoo PLATINUM, Mountain Grove, Missouri
43 articles 6 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
Some folks are wise and some are otherwise. I guess we know which one you are.

Very relatable and beautiful!

on Apr. 4 2013 at 3:07 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
25 articles 3 photos 436 comments

Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

so cool it is something we all want to re-live :3

on Feb. 15 2013 at 4:31 am
The_girl_at_her_desk SILVER, Delhi, Kentucky
6 articles 0 photos 13 comments
well said...somethng everyone dreams abt....

on Feb. 15 2013 at 12:16 am
fromtheashes GOLD, ~~~~~, Montana
14 articles 6 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I took the road less traveled, and that has made all the difference"~Robert Frost

<3 

on Jan. 27 2013 at 11:30 am
Scribbleaway. BRONZE, Karachi, Other
4 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
Paper is more patient then people. Anne Frank
“It doesn’t matter. I have books, new books, and I can bear anything as long as there are books.”
“Sometimes I think books are the only friends worth having.”
“Fill your paper with the breathings of you
“Tears are words that need to be written.”

Thats so cool. :3

on Jan. 15 2013 at 2:36 pm
LyricLove SILVER, Webster City, Iowa
6 articles 0 photos 20 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't tell me the skies the limit when there are foot prints on the moon."

Wow... i got teary eyed!  AWESOME JOB!! :)

on Jan. 12 2013 at 12:53 pm
country-cutey GOLD, St.croix Falls, Wisconsin
10 articles 0 photos 43 comments

Favorite Quote:
Dont say it if you dont mean it because i might actually belive it

again u have great talent but dont force the rhym in so much let it flow

on Jan. 11 2013 at 2:15 pm
MonsterGirl2000 SILVER, Des Moines, New Mexico
9 articles 0 photos 53 comments

Favorite Quote:
When it seems like there’s no one left to run to in this empty world you can come to me I’ll be your shooting star. You can tell me your dreams I can’t promise to make them come true, but I’ll be there to pick up the pieces of your broken heart if your dreams happen to fall through…Unknown

i loike it

on Jan. 7 2013 at 12:27 pm
Mr.Poetman PLATINUM, Union City, Indiana
28 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
“You miss 100 percent of the shots you never take.” -Wayne Gretzy

By reading this i can tell you have great talent, but i dont necesarily like this particular poem, no offence, like i said your vary talented

on Jan. 7 2013 at 2:03 am
Hamzawaseem GOLD, Lahore, Other
15 articles 1 photo 144 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The important thing is not to stop questioning." ~Einstein

thanks everyone for the comments

MysticLady said...
on Jan. 6 2013 at 11:23 pm
MysticLady, Estancia, New Mexico
0 articles 0 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
Your limit is what you make it

Wow!! this totally remined me of my childhood. This is pretty emotional. Good writing though

Honour SILVER said...
on Jan. 6 2013 at 2:29 pm
Honour SILVER, New London, Connecticut
9 articles 0 photos 181 comments

Favorite Quote:
Greater love has no man than this, that a man lay down his life for his friends. ~John 15:13

"Give me liberty or give me death!" ~Patrick Henry

Be brave and steadfast; have no fear or dread of them, for it is the Lord, your God, who marches with you; he will never fail you or forsake you. ~ Deuteronomy 31:6

"I prefer dangerous freedom over peaceful slavery" ~ Thomas Jefferson

This poem is good.  It's also true, childhood is a good time.

SerenX SILVER said...
on Jan. 6 2013 at 6:52 am
SerenX SILVER, Keenesburg, Colorado
6 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Those who choose safety over freedom deserve neither."

I think the idea here was very good, but at a certain point the rhymes became forced. They were there just to make rhyming and didn't help the depth of the poem. This caused your meaning to become a bit obscured. I liked it but it needs some fine tuning. ^^

on Jan. 4 2013 at 1:53 am
wordweaver1999 SILVER, Richmond, California
5 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
It is a man's own mind, not his enemy or foe, that lures him to evil ways. -Buddha

very flowy, but the last two lines could be better

B.C.S. BRONZE said...
on Jan. 2 2013 at 3:51 pm
B.C.S. BRONZE, Doylestown, Pennsylvania
2 articles 0 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
“When someone says you've changed, it's only because you stopped living your life their way.”

I like the topic of the poem, but the last line does not really flow all that great, and i would change "wanna" to "want to". it doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the poem. 

on Jan. 2 2013 at 2:29 pm
theatregirl PLATINUM, Lathrup Village, Michigan
30 articles 12 photos 212 comments

Favorite Quote:
"To thine own self be true," -from Hamlet, a play by Shakespeare.
"I have sworn on the altar of god eternal hostility against all forms of tyranny over the mind of man." - Thomas Jefferson

I like your poem too. I do agree with other commenter. The last line sound forced and awkward. Fix and the poem will be perfect.keep writing ! :)


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