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The droplets burn through my skin,
But I do not whine;
Pain and suffering begin
Yet it is all fine.

My flesh melts like a candle
Burned by fervent fire;
But what I cannot handle
Than pain far more dire

Is having the heart all bare
And burning apart;
The flesh may melt--I don't care--
But oh, not the heart.
But what



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thatunknownthingThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
today at 6:31 am:
I really liked your piece, and the way you've written it, but I don't get your last line 'but what', does that mean something, or is it an error? Anyway, I'd rate this 4/5! 
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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
today at 1:35 pm :
Thank you as always. The last line I confess was an error. But like I told SaphiraBrightscales, this typo didn't prevent this poem from receving an Editors' Choice. Isn't that amazing? Thanks.
 
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SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 30 at 3:11 pm:
That was one clever way of saying what you just said here, But te lsat line left me a bit vague...I dunno...Maybe I didn't get it that's all....And the rhyme again: Awesome! Loved the way ou used "Whine" and "fine"...
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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 2 at 3:44 pm :
The last line was a typo. But hey, it for me an editors' choice! But thank you!
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SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 3 at 11:11 am :
You're most welcome! Hahaha look at all my typos up there!
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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Apr. 4 at 2:30 pm :
Gotta love those mistakes that sometimes lead us to the greatest accomplishments in life, no? xD
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SaphiraBrightscalesThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. replied...
Apr. 4 at 10:57 pm :
Hahaha yes!
 
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SecretFlameThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 20 at 8:06 pm:
The rhythm of this poem was exquisite! The comparison between acid rain on the skin and a burning heart was painful and breathtaking. Excellent I loved it :)
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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 22 at 12:47 pm :
So happy you loved it! Thank you.
 
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EPluribusUnumThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Mar. 18 at 9:08 pm:
I really appreciate the subject of the poem, which is nicely highlighted by the rhyme scheme. There was  lot of melting imagery, and I got the idea that all the speaker's walls and barriers were being washed away, leaving, as you wrote, "the heart all bare."  Opeanness can be terrifying. Lovely poem.
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MckayThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 19 at 1:47 pm :
Thank you, thank you, thank you! I'm ecstatic that you liked it.
 
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