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Iniquity City

July 6, 2012
By TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
52 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace."
-Avenged Sevenfold


Let's take a drive to a city where the sins abound.
Let's take a drive to a city where there's nothing holy around.
Let's take a drive to a city where evil resounds.
Let's take a drive to a city that is world renowned.

This despondent place will get to you if you overstay your time.
This is a place where your darkest desires are not a crime.
It may seem great, but it's immoral on the inside.
Get out before it consumes you.
Let's head to destination abomination.

Disguised with lust, greed, and gluttony, this place is a disease.
This city presents opportunities you'll never sieze.
When you step in, you're met with a feeling of unease.
When you step in, you're met with wants that you can never appease.

Don't get caught up in the storm, lest you lose your faith.
This city will suck you dry. This city will feed on you like a wraith.
This city was baptised in the fires of sin.

This atrocity will take you down if you stay for too long.
If you even think of coming, you better be strong.
This wicked city will string you along.
Leave here before it consumes you.
Let's head to destination abomination.

How can people willingly lose their morality for momentary pleasure?
How can people knowingly give up their life for an eternity of pain without measure?
They gamble their lives away, and yet they still want to stay.
They have all lost their way. They must know they have to pay.
Such a savory taste to take in.
There's a reason they call this place the City of Sin.

This monument to the dark inside us will be our demise.
Don't trust those around you, and never believe your eyes.
This is the place where the road to righteousness dies.
Escape before it consumes you.
Let's head to destination abomination.



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xbrit46x GOLD said...
on Aug. 8 2012 at 9:57 pm
xbrit46x GOLD, Whitehall, Pennsylvania
12 articles 0 photos 17 comments

Favorite Quote:
"People haven't always been there for me but music always has"- Taylor Swift

this one is very powerfully written and the description is fantastic!  keep up the great work!(:

on Jul. 31 2012 at 1:01 pm
consumedbygrace247 BRONZE, Durham, North Carolina
4 articles 2 photos 55 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Change the way people think, and things will never be the same." -Steve Biko (South African civil rights martyr)

Lovely, I like poetry that makes me think. Its not bubbly or rhymey, great job :)

Hannabug GOLD said...
on Jul. 29 2012 at 1:08 am
Hannabug GOLD, Winona, Minnesota
10 articles 0 photos 141 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't only practice your art, but force your way into its secrets, for it and knowledge can raise men to the Divine." Ludwig van Beethoven

Idk if you are christian or not but you remind of a christian writer... Ted Dekker... He writes books exposing sin people would rather hide... I like this poem though!! Btw Ted Dekker is one of my favorite authors. ;)

RoseJ BRONZE said...
on Jul. 23 2012 at 11:50 pm
RoseJ BRONZE, Texas, Texas
4 articles 0 photos 5 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is forever, Bite Me, Make me, Pshhhhh

AMAZING!!!!

Totally A five star!! I LOVED it


on Jul. 11 2012 at 9:45 am
TraceBatWingsAndBrokenStrings DIAMOND, Oshkosh, Wisconsin
52 articles 0 photos 72 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This gun has stopped time in its tracks, has altered the course of our fate. Destiny is shattered and timeless. Closed eyes feel the cold winds embrace."
-Avenged Sevenfold

I know for a fact that I don't deserve half of the Five Star Ratings I got on some other pieces I wrote, but I don't feel that this deserves One Star. I can assume one of two things.

1- Whoever rated this couldn't handle the fact that this wasn't another tale of romance, relationships, and the same overdone drivel that everyone has seen enough or.

2- Whoever rated this was just some blind, God worshipping follower who didn't like the fact that I exposed the ugly truth of some of society's most disgusting cities, like Easy Livin' Las Vegas.

Either way, I accept the One Star Rating.