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Autumn Leaf

January 5, 2012
By kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
11 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth." - Thoreau
"Sometimes you're flush and sometimes you're bust, and when you're up, it's never as good as it seems, and when you're down, you never think you'll be up again, but life goes on."


Brown and orange, with faint whispers of green,
A streak of golden boasts a handsome gleam
The fiery red, angry and daring,
The gentle, blunt yellow, friendly and caring
The dark black freckles, unwanted but completing,
A mix between maroon and amber, colourfully cheating
The leaf flutters down, stays there for a while,
Until a little girl picks it up, admiring it with a smile.


The author's comments:
I love all seasons - nature is continually amazing me with its beautiful changes and its spontaneous bursts of surprise. I don't want to be cliched and say the best part is jumping in the piles and hearing the crunch. Instead, for me, the best part is when you find a drooping leaf on a tree and upon closer inspection, you find it's not red, as you initially thought, it's all different colours as if the tree just couldn't choose.

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on Nov. 29 2013 at 8:42 pm
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
11 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth." - Thoreau
"Sometimes you're flush and sometimes you're bust, and when you're up, it's never as good as it seems, and when you're down, you never think you'll be up again, but life goes on."

What?! As if...your article was amazing! Thanks though, and yeah, I know, I wanted to keep the poem short, but my descriptions are almost always as meaningful to me as the actual poem, sorry! Thank you so much, anyway :)

on Nov. 29 2013 at 8:40 pm
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
11 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth." - Thoreau
"Sometimes you're flush and sometimes you're bust, and when you're up, it's never as good as it seems, and when you're down, you never think you'll be up again, but life goes on."

Totally agreed, rhyming is often pretty overdone...thanks for the comment and feedback!

on Nov. 26 2012 at 9:45 am
apple-pie-in-the-sky SILVER, New York, New York
5 articles 0 photos 6 comments
Well, normally I hate poems that rhyme, but this one was great, because the rhyming wasn't forced. It felt natural, like it was just part of the poem, which is great.  I just loved the imagery you used, and the way you played with the words.

on Jul. 19 2012 at 2:03 pm
AndSoItGoes01 SILVER, Reno, Nevada
9 articles 0 photos 147 comments

Favorite Quote:
"The winter I told you icicles are magic, you stole an enormous icicle from my neighbors shingle, and gave it to me as a gift, I kept it in my freezer for seven months. Love isn't always magic, sometimes it's melting." -Andrea Gibson

You asked me in a comment in my article 'Palpitate' to read some of your writing, and ummm...... I have to admitt you must be crazy because my article wasn't half as good as this poem!

 I loved the descpritions! 'Brown and orange with faint whispers of green' that had to be my favorite line in the poem out of all of them, because right when it started you grabbed the reader's attention.

 The only thing i would say that bugged me was that the author's comment was longer then the actual poem. I wished the poem was longer! Then again, sometimes you need to keep things short and sweet right? Great job, and please keep writing!!!!! :D


french_chic said...
on Jan. 28 2012 at 8:52 pm
hey! can i just say this was fantastic! you are a very good writer and i can tell you have alot of passion injected into this. you are very alternating in your descriptions and i like it! please check out some of my work, im not logged in atm but...yeah!

rosetta456 said...
on Jan. 28 2012 at 8:50 pm
This was Awesome! wow, how do you write! iT WAs short, but was amazingg! I love you write so much, but I no have good wnglish to write any thing or any one help me. But I think this good work, how you say? Bravo, bella!

on Jan. 19 2012 at 3:18 am
KEEP WRITING. THIS IS ABSOLUTELY MAG-NIFICENT! I THINK YOU ARE VERY GOOD, I LOVE THE COLOURS YOU DESCRIBED. PLEASE DO KEEP WRITING, YOU HAVE GOT REAL WORDS. X

kristie22 said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 3:16 am
Hun, I believe you have a career in the making, with this poem. I do think that you shouldn't have made the amber and maroon line quite so bumpy, but it'll do. The rest is quite the masterpiece! I think that this is mag-worthy! I don't get why there is some absolute rubbish going in there, all based on votes. But I think this is a fine example of verbal art! Please keep writing, I rate this 10 out of 5! :-)

jennals said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 3:13 am
AAAAAAAH! I LOVE FALL, my absolute fav season!!!! I cant believe how beautiful your flow is! This is a piece of golD poetry, i reckon :) HOLY COW! its FANTABULOUS :))

BethBuzz said...
on Jan. 19 2012 at 3:09 am
All I can say is: Beautiful! You have got an awesome way with words and I encourage you to keep writing. I can't believe you're only 13, honestly! I am a young adult and I am very thankful that this kind of talent is still alive in the modern age!

on Jan. 17 2012 at 9:34 pm
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
11 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth." - Thoreau
"Sometimes you're flush and sometimes you're bust, and when you're up, it's never as good as it seems, and when you're down, you never think you'll be up again, but life goes on."

Thankyou so much, I am 13 years old!

GertieHam said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 9:33 pm
You have very real talent and this was awesome! Beautiful work, please keep writing more like these. I love to read poems with as much feeling and heart invoked as this. This was very touching and playful, as well, in a bubbly kind of way. This has shown us that our world still has young talent! By the way, how old are you? This is great!

AbbieISready said...
on Jan. 17 2012 at 9:30 pm
Love this. You captured it all perfectly with the flowing ease of a poem. I love how each color has its own personality and it's very flowing. I just read this aloud to my ma and she said it was a true showcase of beautiful imagery and talent. Girl, keep writing. Rated this cause it's amazing. This should defs be in the MAG, don't you reckon, guys? HAHA! xoxoxo

on Jan. 16 2012 at 10:11 am
MollyDoubleU BRONZE, Minooka, Illinois
3 articles 5 photos 45 comments

Favorite Quote:
"So we beat on, boats against the current, borne back ceaselessly into the past." - The Great Gatsby

This is great! I am absolutely horrible at writing poetry, so I really wish I could write like you! I love the flow and rhythm of your work. The imagery was excellent too. Wonderful job! I can't wait to read more of your work!

on Jan. 16 2012 at 4:58 am
kate12345me GOLD, Sydney, Other
11 articles 0 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Rather than love, than money, than fame, give me truth." - Thoreau
"Sometimes you're flush and sometimes you're bust, and when you're up, it's never as good as it seems, and when you're down, you never think you'll be up again, but life goes on."

Yes, I realised that after I submitted! Ah well, can't do much now. But yes, I took that into account and I hope I don't make the same mistake again! Thank you for your feedback, 13-year-old Katie x

on Jan. 16 2012 at 12:24 am
Virtus.et.Sapientia BRONZE, Port Orchard, Washington
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We are all angels with only one wing and we can only fly by embracing one another"

I liked this poem. the description and personification of the colors was beautiful. My one piece of advice would be not to sacrifice the flow. The line about Maroon and Amber doesnt quite fit your rhythm and it threw me off a little bit. I think if you could fix that a bit it would be absoultely stunning.

on Jan. 15 2012 at 11:23 am
SarasotaWonder BRONZE, Cumberland, Maine
1 article 0 photos 61 comments
I really enjoyed the rythmn you had to the piece.....it was easy to read and added meaning to the words.....and you also did an awesome job with imagary and word choice :) keep it up and I look forwords to seeing more from you!

on Jan. 14 2012 at 8:01 pm
AceOfAngels BRONZE, Milford, Connecticut
2 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Truth is rarely pure and never simple~Oscar Wilde

This was beautifully written. The grammar and writing was excellent. It ties together to show great imagery with the colors and the falling leaf. Keep writing

on Jan. 14 2012 at 3:57 pm
hedwigy13 PLATINUM, Piscataway, New Jersey
27 articles 2 photos 21 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Only in the dictionary does success come before work." -unknown

Really pretty. I love those leaves that are just a ton of different colors

on Jan. 13 2012 at 7:52 am
stringing.words.together SILVER, Mumbai, Other
6 articles 3 photos 8 comments

Favorite Quote:
A picture paints a thousand words. -Anonymous

Amazing, your poem is. Great job and keep writing.


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