I'm not okay.

October 4, 2011
By Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.


All I feel is pain,
Tonight.
As I'm standing in the rain,
Under a pitch black sky.
I'm out here by myself,
Trying to get some of these
Bad feelings out.
Then you are by my side,
Asking me if I'm alright.
And I say

Chourus:

I'm not okay.
I'm not alright.
I'm not doing good,
Tonight.
'Cause I've got bad feeling,
Inside,
That I just can't seem
To hide.
I don't know what to do,
'Cause I am so confused,
About what you're telling me
To believe.


I went back inside,
And straight onto my bed.
And as I cried,
I thought things through in my head.
Like how I have doubts,
About what you have taught me.
Things like how
Life came to be.

(Chourus)


I cried, and cried, Oh I cried.
while I tried, and tried, Oh yeah I tried,
To understand
What to believe in.
A loving God,
Or evelution.
But still,

(chourus)


The author's comments:
I think about how people struggle to understand what is true, and I have also struggled. But I found that God is true, and I hope readers will find the same. Hope you like. :)

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on May. 8 2012 at 12:58 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

Thank you. :)

on May. 4 2012 at 9:32 am
Zoe-22-Turner DIAMOND, Beverly, Massachusetts
99 articles 33 photos 91 comments
i agree i love this it has a really powerful message to it

on Mar. 30 2012 at 1:24 am
TaoTwins SILVER, Seattle, Indiana
5 articles 2 photos 7 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am the wisest man alive, because I know one thing, and that one thing is that I know nothing~Socrates

Wow. your talented! (:

on Nov. 23 2011 at 6:53 am
kingofwriters BRONZE, DeWitt, Michigan
1 article 0 photos 196 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Books are a uniquely portable magic." - Stephen King

I love books, and I love technology, but I don't want to see the latter overwhelm the former. I just think books are meant to be pages you turn, not screens you scroll through.

Wow, you did a great job with this! I bet it would be even better if you made it into an actual song! :)

on Nov. 6 2011 at 1:38 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
51 articles 9 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

I really love this. I have a relationship with God myself and I know someimes people doubt during the hard times in life sometimes but....you know....that's why you need faith.

J4Yc3 GOLD said...
on Oct. 26 2011 at 8:34 pm
J4Yc3 GOLD, Nashville, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
What doesn't kill you only makes you stronger

Pretty amazing bet it would sound great with music added :)

on Oct. 17 2011 at 3:00 pm
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

Thank you. :)

on Oct. 17 2011 at 2:59 pm
RayBaytheDinosaur GOLD, Hampton, South Carolina
18 articles 17 photos 159 comments

Favorite Quote:
Beauty is in the eye of the beholder

Really pretty, I'd love to hear how it sounds with music =)

on Oct. 16 2011 at 7:32 am
AbstractFragment GOLD, Dalmatia,, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
"You know what it feels like when all your teeth are falling out really slowly and you don't realize and then you notice that, well, they're really far apart. And then one day... you don't have any teeth anymore." - Where the Wild Things Are

I like your alternating ryhmes, a GREAT way to create emphasis. Although we have a huge stylistic difference (for one I'm not a big fan of chrous structuring, but you make it work.) I liked this, but the last stanza kind of threw me off as well.

on Oct. 15 2011 at 8:13 am
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

oh! Sorry, I get what you mean now! lol the last verse is the bridge, so it has a different beat than the rest of the song.

on Oct. 15 2011 at 8:10 am
Kev-Girl SILVER, Plymouth, Indiana
5 articles 0 photos 86 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is a maybe. Death is for sure. Sin is the cause. Christ is the cure. :)

Love is the breath of God, and prayer is the melody that makes it sing.

If you cant annoy someone, there's no point in writing.

Love is overrated, marry for money.

The beat I wrote this with goes along with it just fine, so I'm sorry if it's a bit confusing to read and create a beat that goes with it. But thanks for the comment! :)

on Oct. 14 2011 at 2:45 pm
.iloveyou. GOLD, Evansville, Wyoming
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Favorite Quote:
"There are but two certainties in life; death and taxes." Ben Franklin

I can feel the rhythm here except in the last verse seems to interrupt that flow, but it might just be the beat i was using for the poem. 


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