I'm not okay.

October 4, 2011
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All I feel is pain,
As I'm standing in the rain,
Under a pitch black sky.
I'm out here by myself,
Trying to get some of these
Bad feelings out.
Then you are by my side,
Asking me if I'm alright.
And I say


I'm not okay.
I'm not alright.
I'm not doing good,
'Cause I've got bad feeling,
That I just can't seem
To hide.
I don't know what to do,
'Cause I am so confused,
About what you're telling me
To believe.

I went back inside,
And straight onto my bed.
And as I cried,
I thought things through in my head.
Like how I have doubts,
About what you have taught me.
Things like how
Life came to be.


I cried, and cried, Oh I cried.
while I tried, and tried, Oh yeah I tried,
To understand
What to believe in.
A loving God,
Or evelution.
But still,


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TaoTwins said...
Mar. 30, 2012 at 1:24 am
Wow. your talented! (:
LilZo11 replied...
May 4, 2012 at 9:32 am
i agree i love this it has a really powerful message to it
Kev-Girl replied...
May 8, 2012 at 12:58 pm
Thank you. :)
Taphephobia This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 6, 2011 at 1:38 pm
I really love this. I have a relationship with God myself and I know someimes people doubt during the hard times in life sometimes but....you know....that's why you need faith.
J4Yc3 said...
Oct. 26, 2011 at 8:34 pm
Pretty amazing bet it would sound great with music added :)
RayBaytheDinosaur said...
Oct. 17, 2011 at 2:59 pm
Really pretty, I'd love to hear how it sounds with music =)
Kev-Girl replied...
Oct. 17, 2011 at 3:00 pm
Thank you. :)
AbstractFragment This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 16, 2011 at 7:32 am
I like your alternating ryhmes, a GREAT way to create emphasis. Although we have a huge stylistic difference (for one I'm not a big fan of chrous structuring, but you make it work.) I liked this, but the last stanza kind of threw me off as well.
.iloveyou. said...
Oct. 14, 2011 at 2:45 pm
I can feel the rhythm here except in the last verse seems to interrupt that flow, but it might just be the beat i was using for the poem. 
Kev-Girl replied...
Oct. 15, 2011 at 8:10 am
The beat I wrote this with goes along with it just fine, so I'm sorry if it's a bit confusing to read and create a beat that goes with it. But thanks for the comment! :)
Kev-Girl replied...
Oct. 15, 2011 at 8:13 am
oh! Sorry, I get what you mean now! lol the last verse is the bridge, so it has a different beat than the rest of the song.
kingofwriters replied...
Nov. 23, 2011 at 6:53 am
Wow, you did a great job with this! I bet it would be even better if you made it into an actual song! :)
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