Comets

September 24, 2011
By LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick


They said I was trouble
You said you were, too
They put up walls against me
And you crashed right through

I gave you a chance
To get out of this mess
You wanted to save me
You’re doing your best

And I don’t know how
You can be this way
You have a real life
So why’d you stay?

It’s like seeing two comets crash and collide
And while my life’s a river, I’m fighting the tide
I used to be hopeless, used to let myself drown
But now I’ve got you here, I’m coming around

You’re wasting all you’ve got
On a lost cause like me
I’m trapped in my own cage
Watching you fly out free

We’re running out of time
On a stretched out life line
The threads could come loose
Any day now, love

It’s like seeing two comets crash and collide
And while my life’s a river, I’m fighting the tide
I used to be hopeless, used to let myself drown
But now I’ve got you here, I’m coming around

I know I’ve been living
This way for a while
But everything’s shifting
Whenever you smile

The sunrise is coming
The stars disappear
The end is collapsing
The beginning is here

There’s a reason the waters
Are clearing away
And I’m sticking around now,
Day after day

You are the secret
I don’t want to hide
I can’t keep myself from you,
I’ve tried and I’ve tried

It’s like watching two comets crash and collide
And while my life’s a river, I’m fighting the tide
I used to be hopeless, used to let myself drown
But now I’ve got you here, I’m coming around

You feel like a limelight
I feel like the stage
The script is our story,
We’re turning the page

The play’s not a tragedy,
But it’s cutting close
It’s about us, and a river,
A storm and a boat

You want to keep hoping,
While everything’s right,
You cling to the daytime,
I wait for the night

It’s like watching two comets crash and collide
And while my life’s a river, I’m fighting the tide
I used to be hopeless, used to let myself drown
But now I’ve got you here, I’m coming around

You won’t give up on me
That’s how it goes
I’ll give you all I have
I need you to know

The only good thing
In those years
I pretended I was alive

Was you coasting along with me
On this never-ending ride
It’s like watching two comets collide

And while my life’s a river, I’m fighting the tide
Still seeing the comets
Collide


The author's comments:
I've been trying lyrics for years. I love the idea that love can pull you out of anything, so that's what this is supposed to be about... hopefully, you'll get that vibe.

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on Jan. 22 2012 at 9:51 am
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

Woah, if this is anything to judge by, then you are meant to be a song writer. This defidentally looks like it is going to be a fun song, seriously. And I love the chorus. I haven't seen many good songs on TI lately, alot of them are just cheesy raps. But this is great! 5/5, definatly! By the way, did anyone tell you that you that the results are in for the poetry contest? You were one of the ones who placed, why don't you go check it out where you ranked and let me know which works you want me to comment on. You have to do it in the the Fairytale thread because I won't know if you reply to this comment. This comment dosen't count as part of your prize, this is just me sayin this song looks good and letting you know you placed. Congrats!

on Nov. 7 2011 at 4:37 pm
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick

By the way, I searched your channel on youtube and couldn't find it, so I guess I'll wait for it to appear on teenink! Yay!

on Nov. 7 2011 at 4:32 pm
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick

THANK YOU SO MUCH! I'll look for it, and I'm really excited to see it!

on Nov. 6 2011 at 1:23 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

So I uploaded it on Teenink but it looks like it was published twice. I fyou don't realy feel like waiting for it to be done pending approval you can also find it on my youtube account. I'm Taphephobia13 there.

on Nov. 5 2011 at 12:13 pm
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick

yaaaayy! please tell me when you're done, I'm so excited!!!!!

on Nov. 5 2011 at 10:04 am
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
51 articles 9 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

So, I've tried it twice. I already have the music done, the problem is filming it. The first time didn't go so well. The second time the video didn't load, but I am almost done.

on Nov. 3 2011 at 9:57 pm
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick

Taphephobia: THAT WOULD BE SO AMAZING. I don't play an instrument, I'm just a lyricist, but to see my work set to music... I would love it if you did that!!!! Please do, if you can!!!! :D

on Nov. 2 2011 at 10:26 pm
VandalSpirit DIAMOND, Pleasant Prairie, Wisconsin
51 articles 9 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Yet this I call to mind and therefore I have hope: Because of Gods great love, we are not consumed. His compassion never fail. They are new every morning; great is your faithfulness.

I love this. It's so easily relatable for me because I've felt in that place before. I was wondering, is there any possibility if you haven't already written the actual music for this, could I try making the music using my guitar and just post it on a video on here. I'd tell you when it shows up of course so you can hear how I imagined it.

Rayne GOLD said...
on Oct. 31 2011 at 9:38 pm
Rayne GOLD, Chippewa Falls, Wisconsin
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Looove this:)

on Oct. 21 2011 at 7:26 pm
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick

:) Thanks! :D

JuStMe.DeZZi said...
on Oct. 21 2011 at 9:00 am
JuStMe.DeZZi, NA, Other
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I agree with glimmer, it sounds like an indie song I would want to hear :D I love your main lines that you repeat throughout the poem, their my favorite. The entire poem is really great and completely filled with emotion. Awesome job! :3

on Oct. 14 2011 at 7:06 pm
LittleMissSunshine08_11 SILVER, Boston, Massachusetts
9 articles 0 photos 23 comments

Favorite Quote:
Those who can laugh without cause have either found the true meaning of happiness or have gone stark raving mad. ~Norm Papernick

Thanks so much! :)

glimmer BRONZE said...
on Oct. 13 2011 at 2:08 pm
glimmer BRONZE, Corvallis, Oregon
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Favorite Quote:
My favorite quote is one by Albert Einstein-
"Learn from yesterday, Live for today, Hope for tomorrow."

Super, super, job!!!!

This sounds like the kind of song I would listen to. Keep up the great work!:)





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