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July 27, 2011
I'll miss you she said as she hung up the phone
And please don't feel lonely even though you're alone,
Home is just a jet away, I hope someday
You'll come back down my road

She said: you know I'd wait for you even forever
If you don't come back I'm happy that we spent one day together
Hope is just a dream away and everyday
This moment I'll remember, I'll remember

And he said: I'm already gone
I might never come back
The sun's rays are pulling me to a strange dawn,
I'm so far from home
If I never come back
I just wanted, just wanted you to know.

I'll miss you she said in the panic of dawn
And please don't feel lonely, you won't be that for long;
Don't blame me cos lovers can't while others
have no problem moving on

He kissed her goodbye and then walked away slow
And the airport was cold and it started to snow
And every snowflake held a teardrop, every teardrop
held a story never told

And he said: I'm so far away
I might never come back
Strange winds are taking me to a strange place,
I'm so far from home
If I never come back
I just wanted, just wanted you to know

The letter's in the mail, but these hands are frail,
The pen will break and the ink will spill away;
Telephones are broken, electric lines are shattered,
Connection never really mattered anyway...
Or was there something I had to say?

Springtime had come like the day follows night
Like the thunder that faithfully follows the light
And every night she told herself she was okay
But every day she wasn't right

And he wrote her poetry on his guitar
But she wasn't there so he played for the stars
And to the sound the moon leaned down
And smiled wide and far

So the moon told the sun and the sun told the rain
And the rains they cried out and the thunder complained
Ands the winds began to blow and the waves
Became percussion as he sang

He sang: I'm already gone
I might never come back
The sun's rays have pulled me to a strange dawn
I'm so far from home
If I never come back,
I just wanted, just wanted you to know

She sang: I will find you wherever you are
And never let you go so far away again, and
Leave behind what I need to to find you again





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thoughtfulsoul said...
Feb. 8, 2012 at 6:21 pm
wow this is amazing! it is sad, happy, inspiring, and so many other emotions rolled into one. I loved it! It really did flow beautifully. i didn't even realize i was reading. i just felt the words and i could hear the song in my head. i hope it gets made into a song!!
 
PaigeStreet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 25, 2012 at 3:41 pm
Thank you for such a truly thoughtful comment! :) 

And yes, I have made it into a song :)
 
leafy This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Nov. 19, 2011 at 9:58 am
Loved the flow, loved the imagery, loved the story. In all seriousness, this is truly an excellent poem, and would make a great song. Keep up the great work, 5/5
 
PaigeStreet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 25, 2012 at 3:42 pm
Leafy, your comments are always so much appreciated. It means a lot coming from you. Thanks. 
 
LaceeJade This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Oct. 1, 2011 at 10:25 pm
I Absolutly Adore This:)!
 
msp49 said...
Aug. 28, 2011 at 1:49 am
Very good!  This poem had a certain rhythm to it and it flowed beautifully.  Keep up the good work!
 
CoffeeKat said...
Aug. 24, 2011 at 8:36 pm
Wow. Beautiful poem, good imagary and story. I'd love to hear what kind of music this went to-perhaps a number one hit? ;-)
 
Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 3:12 am
Beautiful! I almost cried and I don't know why. It was so , so lovely. Keep it up!
 
PaigeStreet This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Dec. 10, 2011 at 1:34 am
Thank you so much. That has been my highest goal.
 
musicispassion said...
Aug. 5, 2011 at 12:33 am
i liked it i think it would make a beautiful song :P
 
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