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A Whispered Question/A Hopeful Breath

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I feel a breeze
It’s blowing across the sand
And I remember
(Oh) when you first took my hand
And you said to me
I just wanna spend eternity
With you…
A promise is like a star
It shows a future that’s not too far
(away)
It shows a place where the hurting stops
And only a single tear of joy drops
Across your face...
It’s been so long
Since then
We’ve been through so much
And I just want to know when
It’ll all
Just
Stop
And I can look into your eyes and stay there forever.



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Destinee This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 1:31 am
I love this! I'm not a romantic person, but the rhythm is great and I like the line with the star. :) 
 
StrangeJade This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 15, 2011 at 8:54 pm
Very nice! :) The pacing was really nice, I thought -- the way you space the words.
 
Shminkanator5000 said...
Jul. 20, 2011 at 11:22 am
Tagged that one as a favorite! Words can't describe how much I loved that piece! So much emotion built around it!
 
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