Trapped In The Dark With Your Words

Custom User Avatar
More by this author
I was told that sticks and bones break our bones,
but words don't hurt us,
what does that person know?

Because I know that everybody knows a place,
where the sun won't shine,
and the rain keeps coming down,
trapped in the dark,
no one hears our screams. No they don't.

Why do words hurt so much?
why can't we laugh it off like we just don't care? Why not?
If we could we would...

Lock your words,
where the sun don't shine,
and the rain keeps coming down,
'cause maybe in the dark words will die.

Everyday in the mirror now,
we'll be lookin' at ourselves,
you'll wonder "what's wrong with this?"
we should all know that answer...
don't waste your breath...
please shut it.
nothing's wrong.

Everybody knows that place,
where the sun don't shine,
and the rain keeps comin down,
the only thing holdin' us there is us!





Join the Discussion

This article has 20 comments. Post your own now!

raemarie This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 21, 2011 at 4:24 pm
i absolutely love this, such wonderful eloquent flair! how do you get so mmuch publicity? it's nearly impossible for me to draw any type of attention to my writing.. which discourages me so much. i wish you the best of luck! please read more of my work :)
 
JoPepper replied...
Aug. 26, 2011 at 5:54 pm
THANK YOU you made my day even better than it already was,  Have you tried the writing forums?  I ask other Teen ink authors occaisoinally.  Hmmm I wonder if there is a way I can help bring your writing to light???  Thank you sooooooo much!!!!
 
TheSilverLaurel said...
Jul. 3, 2011 at 2:43 pm

i liked to ending, and it's a really good description of how we feel sometimes.

Keep it up :)

 
JoPepper replied...
Jul. 30, 2011 at 1:10 pm
Thank you so much for reading and commenting!!!!! :D is there anything of yours you'd likeme to read?
 
Anagam said...
Jun. 21, 2011 at 6:04 pm
Also very true. People always think something is very wrong with their lives when really it is something so small. And they're the only ones who can let it go and move on.
 
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 22, 2011 at 11:56 am
Thank you for commenting on my stuff!!!!!
 
-DreamForever- said...
Jun. 5, 2011 at 2:37 pm
I like this, because it's real.  We do all know that place. Great job. (:
 
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 6, 2011 at 9:55 am
Thank you it means alot!!!!! :))
 
...Life said...
Jun. 4, 2011 at 10:57 pm
I enjoyed it a lot (:
 
JoPepper replied...
Jun. 5, 2011 at 11:13 am
Thank you !!!!!! :))
 
FlipSwitchFast said...
May 30, 2011 at 10:27 pm
I think we all do know that place and it's not much fun to be. Great writing though. I think that for such a dark poem, you left us all with some encouragement knowing that we have the power within ourselves let go of the mean words that others say to hurt us and keep us down. And it is true that words can hurt much longer than broken bones. A good lesson to watch what we say to one another. Good Job!
 
JoPepper replied...
May 31, 2011 at 1:52 pm
Thank you!!!!!! :))
 
.Izzy. said...
May 26, 2011 at 4:38 pm
I really like the opening line, it pulled  me in (though i do believe it is sticks and stones in case that is a typo:b) I like this because it is relatable to pretty much anyone.  Keep writing!
 
JoPepper replied...
May 26, 2011 at 5:44 pm
Yeah I just noticed that, I wish I could fix that but oh well:P  Thank you for the feedback, anything of yours you want me to read? ;)
 
Kaleighgirl97 said...
May 26, 2011 at 10:29 am
It is really good! but in the first line it says sticks and bones and i think you meant sticks and stones.
 
Kaleighgirl97 replied...
May 26, 2011 at 10:31 am
none of my stuff is officially published yet it's still pending.
 
JoPepper replied...
May 26, 2011 at 12:13 pm
Whoops I didn't notice that yeah I meant stones instead of bones.  Thank you for the feedback  :))
 
JoPepper said...
May 22, 2011 at 8:15 am
Thank you.  Anything of yours you'd like me to read. :D
 
picchick101 said...
May 21, 2011 at 10:17 pm
i really like this:)
its really good!
 
JoPepper replied...
May 22, 2011 at 6:43 pm
thank you:D anything of yours you'd like me to read? :))
 
bRealTime banner ad on the left side
Site Feedback