Cut The Valentine

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It's 5 o-clock on the day of V,
here lies, you and me.
You climb on top of me, to tell me,...
You don't love me, anymore.

I don't know what to say.
You told me once i was just right.
When i heard you say that, the cold black heart turned white.
I put you into me, and now oyu must leave.

I could be the boy you want,
Or the girl you need.
It don't matter babe, as long as your pleased....

Before i cut, cut, cut you out of me.

There you go, out into the snow.
It's a great big white world.
Now i get out the bag, the straw, the knife.
That's when i turn out the light.

Just before i cut, cut, cut you out of me.

I don't cry, there's blood all over me
I might die, there's blood all over me.
Long and wide, there's blood all over me.

After i cut,cut,cut,cut you out of me.. on the last day of V
for you, and me "baby"





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just.me_899 said...
Jul. 30, 2010 at 10:34 am
aww :( This was really really reallly really really good tho.....i honestly dont kno wat else to say, i just really liked this poem. lol GOOD job!
 
AvengedJasonFold said...
Jun. 27, 2010 at 9:09 pm

simon cowell feedback--you asked for it!

After glancing at all your poems, this one looked the most interesting to me. I have trouble relating to what it's like to fall in love with a guy lol but I know what it's like to be mad at an ex.

there's a couple of ugly typos here and there but I can ignore them and still appreciate the creativity and the rythm in this poem. I love the lines with "cut cut cut you out of me" and the last stanza has an awesome rythm. I love how it all sta... (more »)

 
HeronHero said...
May 13, 2010 at 5:42 pm
This is heartwrenching!!!I'm so sorry for you! You really have a unique way of writting and you express yourself well! I want to cry after reading this.....but it's still awesome in an incredibly sad way.
 
Brian_Lambert replied...
May 13, 2010 at 6:13 pm
Thank you so much for the feedback :)
 
HeronHero replied...
May 14, 2010 at 1:25 am
No problem!:) I enjoy reading your work!
 
BabyV replied...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 6:46 pm
Its really different, which makes it good! It does suck to be dumped on valentines day.
 
respecturself7 replied...
Jul. 2, 2010 at 3:37 pm
lol very bitter. Who wouldn't be? A lot of ur poems sound like a dark song but there's a hit of something else....
 
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