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Why didn't you tell me?
Why do i feel stupid now?
Why did i always let you bring me down?
Now i wish you were still in the ground.

I dare you to tell me goodbye
I dare you to finally die
I dare you to go back down
I dare you to tell me goodbye

Your hands, so cold
Just like that one winter
And now I, I don't know
If your a corpse or its just in my head?

I dare you to tell me goodbye
I dare you to finally die
I dare you to go back down
I dare you to tell me goodbye

I don't want you anymore you're too cold.

I'm sorry baby, you're too cold.

I dare you to tell me goodbye
I dare you to finally die
I dare you to go back down
I dare you to tell me goodbye.

Please just die, i don't want you anymore.
Baby, I'm sorry i can't have you anymore.





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Writingstar said...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 7:21 pm
ery good this should go in the teen ink magazine :)
 
IvyVine said...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 9:29 am
Once again you have an amazing peice written with amazing talent! This one does somewhat seem kind of shorter for a song but then I guess not all songs are that long.
 
Swiwi17 said...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 3:51 am
I admire the way you write. It reminds me of about 2 or 3 of my own works. Just of what I've seen of your writings, you're incredibly intelligent and I'd take into true consideration any comment or review left by you on any of my poems. I'm hoping to get more up soon. I have hundreds upon hundreds...too many to upload them all. Only the best.
 
Kandyz said...
Jun. 14, 2010 at 10:45 pm
Have you created music to this?  I would love to hear it with a tune=]
 
Joe B. said...
May 27, 2010 at 9:36 am
wow. u must've really hurt. amazing piece
 
HeronHero said...
May 13, 2010 at 5:38 pm
Another great piece!:) I really love the message you're sending!!!This is full of so much emotion and truth! Amazing!:)
 
Julia P. said...
Apr. 17, 2010 at 4:20 am

I was almost crying while reading it. And that's saying something, I'm not moved to tears so easily.

Really, really intense

Do you have a melody for that?

 
Brian_Lambert replied...
Apr. 17, 2010 at 11:56 am
Yeah... Ive actually had three different melodies, i cant pick which one i like best though.
 
D3N~Po0ki3SaUR:3 said...
Apr. 16, 2010 at 12:31 pm
beautifully written, and I love how you put up some background info for the poem. I love the structure and wording. Kudos to you!
 
--DH-- said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 10:58 pm
oooo i love it!!!
 
RayRay23 said...
Apr. 13, 2010 at 2:11 pm
this is deep i like it i wish i could have talent like you:) keep workingnnnnggg
 
njume7925 said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 9:54 pm

I love it, it was just great.

please check out some of mine i'm really good but not that noticed

 
thewriteidea This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 8:08 pm
Wow this is really intense! I like how you put the background information. Readers usually like to know where the meaning of the poem originates from. Nice job! Check out some of my work too, if you'd like. Keep writing!
 
Laughternchoclate replied...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 6:12 pm
Yes, definitely. I totally agree with WriteIdea. Amazing structure. Great. 
 
MadAsAHatter... replied...
Jun. 14, 2010 at 10:08 pm
I like this. It has a demanding voice about it.
 
respecturself7 replied...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 3:37 pm
Wow, It's really dark, deliciously so. It kinda freaks me out a little. The tone is filled with bitterness and mourning, resentment and longing. nice.
 
BabyV replied...
Jun. 18, 2010 at 6:43 pm
Wow this is a song i would want to listen 2 one day. I can definetaly relate
 
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