Goodbye

March 23, 2010
By Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
22 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It's to dumb to see or say you'll still sing it, and I'll just cue the applause" - Marilyn Manson


Why didn't you tell me?
Why do i feel stupid now?
Why did i always let you bring me down?
Now i wish you were still in the ground.

I dare you to tell me goodbye
I dare you to finally die
I dare you to go back down
I dare you to tell me goodbye

Your hands, so cold
Just like that one winter
And now I, I don't know
If your a corpse or its just in my head?

I dare you to tell me goodbye
I dare you to finally die
I dare you to go back down
I dare you to tell me goodbye

I don't want you anymore you're too cold.

I'm sorry baby, you're too cold.

I dare you to tell me goodbye
I dare you to finally die
I dare you to go back down
I dare you to tell me goodbye.

Please just die, i don't want you anymore.
Baby, I'm sorry i can't have you anymore.


The author's comments:
I wrote this about a guy who lost his partner, and turned to drugs to heal himself... but in using drugs he dug up the corpse and tried to convince himself they were alive... but now they won't leave, and he has decided he has had enough.

I hope by reading this, people understand that drugs don't help anything, and that when something is gone, its gone... Nothing can bring it back, contrary to popular belief.

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BabyV GOLD said...
on Jun. 18 2010 at 6:43 pm
BabyV GOLD, Jachksoville, Florida
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Favorite Quote:
A really good poet write so that the reader can walk in their shoes just for that one minute. Victoria Jones

Wow this is a song i would want to listen 2 one day. I can definetaly relate

on Jun. 17 2010 at 7:21 pm
Writingstar SILVER, Hayward, California
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ery good this should go in the teen ink magazine :)

on Jun. 17 2010 at 3:37 pm
respecturself7 SILVER, Medina, New York
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Favorite Quote:
There is a natural law in life to settle.....I broke that law ~Katherine Hepburn
Love, Is the severest of mental diseases~U.K.
Spinning always spinning....when life puts me down I'll give you a call~respecturself7

Wow, It's really dark, deliciously so. It kinda freaks me out a little. The tone is filled with bitterness and mourning, resentment and longing. nice.

IvyVine SILVER said...
on Jun. 16 2010 at 9:29 am
IvyVine SILVER, Unknown, Indiana
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Once again you have an amazing peice written with amazing talent! This one does somewhat seem kind of shorter for a song but then I guess not all songs are that long.

Swiwi17 SILVER said...
on Jun. 16 2010 at 3:51 am
Swiwi17 SILVER, Glasscity, Nevada
8 articles 0 photos 29 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Nothing ever promised tomorrow today"

I admire the way you write. It reminds me of about 2 or 3 of my own works. Just of what I've seen of your writings, you're incredibly intelligent and I'd take into true consideration any comment or review left by you on any of my poems. I'm hoping to get more up soon. I have hundreds upon hundreds...too many to upload them all. Only the best.

korhel said...
on Jun. 14 2010 at 10:45 pm
korhel, Rockhampton, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"I wish I had the guts to walk away and forget about you... But I can't because I know you won't come after me... And that's what hurts the most."

Have you created music to this?  I would love to hear it with a tune=]

on Jun. 14 2010 at 10:08 pm
RedvinesWTHCantTheyDo GOLD, Zephyrhills, Florida
10 articles 0 photos 154 comments

Favorite Quote:
"You make one more comment like that I will wrap you in a tortilla shell and eat you as a snack, maybe with some nice pico de gillo."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship
"If you don't die for something, I'll kill you for nothing."~ Lauren Lopez in Starship

I like this. It has a demanding voice about it.

on May. 27 2010 at 9:36 am
JoetheBlanc GOLD, Roswell, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
"the shadow proves the sunshine!"

wow. u must've really hurt. amazing piece

on May. 13 2010 at 5:38 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

Another great piece!:) I really love the message you're sending!!!This is full of so much emotion and truth! Amazing!:)

on Apr. 17 2010 at 11:56 am
Pitiful_Anonymous PLATINUM, New Cumberland, West Virginia
22 articles 0 photos 75 comments

Favorite Quote:
"and all you f***ers go beep beep beep in cheap,plastic cars. If It's to dumb to see or say you'll still sing it, and I'll just cue the applause" - Marilyn Manson

Yeah... Ive actually had three different melodies, i cant pick which one i like best though.

juliette said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 4:20 am
juliette, Gdynia, Other
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I was almost crying while reading it. And that's saying something, I'm not moved to tears so easily.

Really, really intense

Do you have a melody for that?


SirSeba BRONZE said...
on Apr. 16 2010 at 12:31 pm
SirSeba BRONZE, Marysville, California
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Favorite Quote:
"Just because you can, doesnt always mean you should" ~ achreon

beautifully written, and I love how you put up some background info for the poem. I love the structure and wording. Kudos to you!

on Apr. 15 2010 at 10:58 pm
Loveandboxing PLATINUM, Levvitwon, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
Eat, Sleep, Sing (by me)
Writing is an art few people master it. -me

oooo i love it!!!

on Apr. 13 2010 at 2:11 pm
WonderDreamer23 BRONZE, Maplewood, Minnesota
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Favorite Quote:
Shut Up and Live I am the most sexiest thing that happened to you and i know you know it.

this is deep i like it i wish i could have talent like you:) keep workingnnnnggg

on Apr. 12 2010 at 9:54 pm
LikeToPlayFish GOLD, Omaha, Nebraska
13 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"We all fake smiles, just the ones who are true to themselves seem sad."-Niq.

I love it, it was just great.

please check out some of mine i'm really good but not that noticed


on Apr. 12 2010 at 6:12 pm
SarClark BRONZE, NC, Connecticut
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Yes, definitely. I totally agree with WriteIdea. Amazing structure. Great. 

on Apr. 11 2010 at 8:08 pm
thewriteidea DIAMOND, Pleasanton, California
67 articles 0 photos 336 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Don't cry that it's over, smile because it has happened."

Wow this is really intense! I like how you put the background information. Readers usually like to know where the meaning of the poem originates from. Nice job! Check out some of my work too, if you'd like. Keep writing!




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