March 11, 2010
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What did they do to the poor souls
They are like ghosts hiding in holes
Gonna get you if they can
Gonna get you
Kill the good man
Cause they are the experts at holes
They dig them,build them,put them in molds
To disguise the reality of the holes
Got to get out while you still can
Or they'll take you down in their holes longer than
You can imagine and longer
You'll stay there at the bottom and wonder and wander
are dangerous brother

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Sultana said...
May 15, 2010 at 9:47 pm
This is really awesome. I loved how you put "Gonna get you if they can / Gonna get you / Kill the good man" early on in this. It made me want to rush through it, thus causing this lovely sense of urgency and truth. Well done.
HeronHero replied...
May 15, 2010 at 10:02 pm
thanks so much I'm glad you like it!:)
Ebony_Rose said...
May 6, 2010 at 8:14 am
I like it... There is definitly feelings put into the words.. :)
HeronHero replied...
May 10, 2010 at 8:21 pm
thanks:)I love playing this on my guitar......
Meagan M. said...
Apr. 15, 2010 at 8:56 pm
Oh I really like this one the repetition of rhymes helps it to really connect well. I would maybe add some punctuation; comas and what not but not to much that it, you know, becomes choppy. Love the last line too and how it stands out
HeronHero replied...
Apr. 16, 2010 at 11:23 pm
thank you so much and good advice about the punctuation, I'll keep that in mind for the future!:)
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