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He's A Rainbow

His smile is the sunshine
His smile is a golden ray
His smile is a circle of heaven
Warmth on a cold day

It makes his perfect eyes shine
It’s like a candle flame
It’s something you can stare at
A bright heart it contains

I don’t know how to describe it
It’s that warm and fuzzy feeling
It’s a tingle through your fingertips
It’s the glances you’ve been stealing

His smile is the sunshine
But this you already know
Of course his laugh will be the rain
So together it’s a rainbow



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MedievalMouse94 said...
Jul. 24, 2010 at 9:36 pm:
Love it! It's amazing
 
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ellyn-bo-bellyn_2014 said...
Jul. 16, 2010 at 1:25 pm:
Nice! Love it! :) Really great!
 
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Lonleydandy said...
Jul. 2, 2010 at 1:02 pm:

I really like the ending especially! "His smile is the sunshine/But this you already know/Of course his laugh will be the rain/So together it's a rainbow"

Love it love it love it!

I was actually wondering where the rainbow part came in, and I like what you did with the last stanza relating the sun and rain and rainbows. My mind doesn't go down that path, I was kind of expecting colors, but I like the way that you did it better :D

Keep writing!

 
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toflyaway said...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 1:29 am:
Random poems are the best kind of poems! You've captured really disticnt feeligns and the fact that it's random, as in, it was just a moments burst of inspiration, adds all the more meaning to it! :)
 
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AvengedJasonFold said...
Jun. 15, 2010 at 4:33 pm:

YES OMG! Simon Cowel feedback--you asked for it!

Oh please, how am I supposed to be able to do my worst to this poem? It melted my calloused heart (my ex girlfriend and her friends tell me that I'm a bleepedy bleep bleep bleeep without a heart)

What I liked about this thing was that it rhymed. I can't stand poems that don't rhyme lol. I also liked that it was short.

What I absolutely loved about this (and I'm going to sound REALLY sappy) is that I can tell that it's from ... (more »)

 
AprilBlue replied...
Jun. 15, 2010 at 6:23 pm :

Aha :) Thank you very much 

And hmm... I think you are now a fugitive lol :D

 
AvengedJasonFold replied...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 8:55 am :
yw :) Why am I a fugitive? lol
 
AprilBlue replied...
Jun. 16, 2010 at 7:10 pm :
Because you said 'cute' lol :)
 
AvengedJasonFold replied...
Jun. 17, 2010 at 12:28 pm :
lol the man police are after me!!!
 
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katie-cat said...
Jun. 4, 2010 at 6:38 am:
Awwwww!!!!!  This was so cute :)  I absolutely loved it!  Very creative and original! Keep it up:)
 
AprilBlue replied...
Jun. 4, 2010 at 2:22 pm :
Thanks so much!!
 
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SUPERMANDwightHowardThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
Jun. 2, 2010 at 7:14 pm:

Wow, that poem actually was quite easy to decipher, I love the last two lines Of coourse his laugh is rain so together its a rainbow,

Very Nice not mushy like other poem of the sort

 
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Egyptiangirl13 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 16, 2010 at 7:53 pm:
I love this its great!!!
 
AprilBlue replied...
May 20, 2010 at 6:15 pm :
Thank you!!!!
 
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jonas_chic899 said...
Apr. 12, 2010 at 9:53 pm:
awww last line was cute:) whole thing-i liked it
 
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saher said...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 6:36 pm:

Really nice!

I dont know why but i cant stop reading the third para!:]

 

 
Laughternchoclate replied...
Apr. 11, 2010 at 7:29 pm :
aha thank you!
 
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Laughternchoclate said...
Mar. 24, 2010 at 7:05 pm:
Ah sha! Thanks, ya made my day :) x like a lot
 
ZAVERY replied...
Mar. 30, 2010 at 3:41 pm :
I love this poetry! So adorable! Five stars. *****
 
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sleeplessdreamer said...
Mar. 23, 2010 at 5:57 pm:
Adorable! I loved it and I love your user name.... Check out my work if you ever get the chance!
 
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