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Deep into your eyes
One can perceive
An azure ocean
Of murderous storms
Sunken ships hosting
Drowning friends
The hurt is so visible
Their blood spills
Into your bloodshot eyes

Deep into your eyes
I can distinguish
An indigo sky
Harmonizing with
Soothing melodies
There I find the comfort
I need to go on
The sap of the love
I feel for you

The pitch black
Of your pupils
Hypnotizes me

Their intenseness
Brings out in you
The hurt and love
You’ve felt

Everytime you look at me
That’s what I observe
Deep into your eyes

Deep into your eyes
One can perceive
The immense navy sea
Of tears that have spilled
From your soar, moist eyes
Each tear carried with her
A story to be forgotten
Every tear helps the plea
To recover faster

Deep into your eyes
I can distinguish
The fire we’ve set up
That night in the country
Which still burns
Of one millions orange sparks
The sound of guitars
Ring in our heads
At the same time

The pitch black
Of your pupils
Hypnotizes me

Their intenseness
Brings out in you
The hurt and love
You’ve felt

Everytime you look at me
That’s what I observe
Deep into your eyes



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writing_chicka_4 said...
Mar. 12, 2010 at 11:46 am:
I like the colors you used to describe stuff. And the writing is wonderful! Keep it up!
 
Louis This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Mar. 13, 2010 at 4:31 pm :
thank you so much! i'll have a look at your work as well!
 
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AnniePham said...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 11:37 am:
I absolutely love this poem! It's one of my favorites in this entire site! I can relate to it so easily, and this poem is just beautiful. I love your work! :)
 
Louis This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Feb. 13, 2010 at 11:48 am :
wow, thank you so much! it really means the world to me when people can relate to whatever i write... i'm a big fan of your writing as well, and i've left comments on two of your pieces! i look forward to reading more, so i'll check back! thanks again!
 
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Ocean<3 said...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 3:48 pm:
the poem's great =) haha I got a preview of course... but the writer is just so awesome honestly. All your poems are great. Never stop writing, believing in yourself and following your dreams!! Sounds sort of cliché but thats all the advice i can give youuu!!
 
Louis This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 4:10 pm :
Wow! Thank you so much for your comment, it really means a lot me!
 
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Taylor T. said...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 3:27 pm:
I fell in love with this poem the first time i read it. It's so beautiful. :)amazing job!
 
Louis This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jan. 28, 2010 at 4:11 pm :
Thank you so much! Can't wait to read your next pieces of work!
 
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