theres only so much black to light up the stars

January 8, 2010
If I spontaneously combust
and turn into dust
would you save me?

a million miles away from here
i’ll be okay my dear
if you just, save me

save me
save me

a billion people, tons of cries
i’d lie into there eyes
if you don’t, save me

don’t come over here and weep some more
i’ll point you straight to the door
if you refuse, to save me

save me
save me

trapped like a rose in a vase
i’m well fed but I can’t replace
the feeling of being close to someone’s face
changing, arranging my mind
to feel safe

I am lacking self-confidence
I will just remain anonymous
so can’t you, save me?

id actually like to just stay here
but im afraid of what will appear
so try to, save me

save me
save me

its getting late for a rescue team
but ill give you a chance to redeem
yourself, please save me

outlining the blissful darkened sky
is a nice constellation which spells goodbye
and it will save me

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PoetLaureate07 said...
Dec. 2, 2010 at 5:34 pm
This is beautiful.. Please Please never give up... btw, thank u 4 commenting on my article *Kiss*
Rulesofmyown said...
Jul. 13, 2010 at 7:49 am
ohhh this is really cuteee, really it is veryy nice, great job:) keep up the good work:)
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
Jul. 26, 2010 at 6:10 pm
thanks so mmuch.
Jannie said...
Jun. 12, 2010 at 3:21 am
I agree! i like all of your work. but this one is my fav!!
SethB said...
May 27, 2010 at 11:43 pm
Good job ,  i love how deep it gets towards the end and its great lyrics for a alternative song maybe
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 29, 2010 at 8:14 pm
the song's beat is sorta indie rock...
Sarahbear said...
May 27, 2010 at 11:41 pm
I wanted to add to the coments. & btw i love this.
StereoSkylineLuver said...
May 22, 2010 at 10:55 am
This poem is absolutely amazing. 5 stars n_n
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 23, 2010 at 5:42 am
thank you keep reading!
poeticgurl said...
May 19, 2010 at 11:38 pm
This has good beat!
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 19, 2010 at 11:41 pm
thank you(:
mysterywriter2012 said...
May 14, 2010 at 9:36 am
I can really relate to this! good poem. I like  your stuff. I'm hoping to get published in the teenink magazine but no feedback yet ;(
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 14, 2010 at 5:34 pm

Im glad you like my stuff,

and ill be happy to look at some of yours!(:

Bianca said...
May 13, 2010 at 9:51 pm
wow, i just looked at this one and i decided to make this my favorite this is sooooo catchy(in a noncheezy way)
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 13, 2010 at 9:53 pm

Aww thanks soo much! keep

looking at my post!

Sunshinegirl said...
May 13, 2010 at 9:49 pm
wow i was going to say i could hear this on the radio but its wayyy to good for that!ilove this one soo much!
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 13, 2010 at 9:55 pm

Haha thanks yes,

it is a song and has a beat.. but not really a mainstreet type of song!(:

RheaD.Ravenfinger This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
May 13, 2010 at 7:20 pm
I love the very first stanza. It's beautiful. I heard you're writing a book. I'm writing one too. Have fun with it and work hard at it! :)
jessica.cherish.conner replied...
May 13, 2010 at 9:41 pm
thanks soo much Oh and im not.. but i would like too!good luck to you too.. !!(:(:
Clairepoetry said...
May 13, 2010 at 10:07 am
thank you for commenting on " falling down" i really appreciate when i get feedback and this is such a poem the detail in it reminds me of a book i can't put down good job!
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