The Cassandra Complex

October 5, 2009
By Lunchbox* BRONZE, Bigfoot, Texas
Lunchbox* BRONZE, Bigfoot, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Someday you will day and somehow something's going to steal your carbon."- Modest Mouse


It’s getting light outside
And the cold stops this shivering sight
The lines on your face
They glisten and they crystallize
Heathens, they cry
I whisper only too, God why?
And you’ll just sit there and die
Because now they’ve got you inside
And they’ll continue to lie
Because you have already died!

And the more that we try,
These knots that we tie are too tight
The more that we lie,
The bonds that we bind break at night
And if we don’t pry
The s*** that we see will not fright

It’s getting dark outside
And the warmth retreats to the night
The lines on your face
They’ve deepened and they’ve crystallized
Heathens, you cry
Why did you take away my light?
And you’ll realize you’ve died
And, no nothing will be alright
But heaven won’t cry
Because we’re truly alone this night!

And the more that we try,
These knots that we tie are too tight
The more that we lie,
The bonds that we bind break at night
And if we don’t pry
The s*** that we see will not fright
When the sex has gone dry
There’s nothing left but to fight
And the more we are right
The more we’re alone at night

The author's comments:
It's ironic, really- I'm talking about relationships, whether they're of teenagers or adults married for years, yet I've never been in one myself. The song's all based off the things I've seen, but not actually experienced. So, I have no idea if it's right or not.

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on Oct. 28 2009 at 4:45 pm
nevercliche159 BRONZE, Clark, New Jersey
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Favorite Quote:
"A man who has nothing to die for, is not fit to live."
--- Martin Luther King Jr.

I guess I can see what you meant by how none of the words flowed as well.

And don't think just because you've never been in a relationship before that you can't convey the feelings you may have for someone in a poem. A lot of people, including me, write about relationships and haven't been in one.

on Oct. 28 2009 at 12:16 am
Lunchbox* BRONZE, Bigfoot, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"Someday you will day and somehow something's going to steal your carbon."- Modest Mouse

I did try to use some alternative words, but nothing just seemed to flow as well. Plus, I thought that it helped to convey the message that the things we see really are that bad sometimes. Or perhaps I just need to expand my vocabulary.

alfavetta said...
on Oct. 22 2009 at 6:59 am
It was really good. They always say it is best to write from experience, but I think you conveyed your message well. I don't really think that you need the curse words though. It almost ruins it.


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