You're Mine

August 6, 2009
By distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"


Verse 1:


When you’ve lost your way,
And you don’t know which path to take; Just reach for my hand, and I’ll show you the way
When the storm of life brings you farther than you want to go
Reach for my hand, and I’ll never let go.

Chorus:
When the rain falls,
when the sky is dark
Don’t be scared, I’ll be there
And I’ll never depart
From right now, to the end of time
I will always be there, and you’ll be just fine, cause your mine,
oh you’re mine!

Verse 2:

When trials seem to rip up your dreams,
Don’t give up, and don’t give in
Don’t let Satan win.
Remember that I’m fighting by your side,
So never run and never hide!

Chorus:

When the rain falls, when the sky is dark
Don’t be scared, I’ll be there
And I’ll never depart.
From right now, to the end of time
I will always be there, and you’ll be just fine, cause your mine,
oh you’re mine!

Sometimes things happen that we can’t understand,
But call out to the Father,
take Him by the hand!

Chorus:
When the rain falls, when the sky is dark
Don’t be scared, I’ll be there
And I’ll never depart.
From right now, to the end of time
I will always be there, and you’ll be just fine, cause your mine, oh you’re mine!

You will always be mine!


The author's comments:
Hi everyone! This is my very fist song that I have ever written!! I hope that you all like this song, and I would Really appreciate it if you could rate and comment, I really want to know how everyone thinks of this! Thanks again!!!

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heybabyluver said...
on Oct. 14 2010 at 9:51 pm
 I love this it is so pretty

tori1256 said...
on Oct. 14 2010 at 1:48 pm
i like ur poem but not who its is about justin bever really

lil_shay said...
on Oct. 14 2010 at 1:02 pm
i really like the way you got your point across.good job

on Oct. 14 2010 at 9:25 am
wendyleee BRONZE, 266, Other
4 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"This is what I've learned, in my life: Headbanging is crucial. Growing up is hard to do. There's nothing wrong with wearing a dress." - Hayley Williams

Well I really liked the whole thing, especially the main sentence when it goes 'cause you're mine, oh, you're mine'.

Still, if you don't mind me saying,  I think some part of the verse were pretty stiff and you could make the chorus more interesting by using some other words that aren't so common.  

Anyway, it would've made a great song as it is :)


on Oct. 3 2010 at 8:02 pm
LunaWingsFlyAway GOLD, Farmingdale, New York
10 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,Can ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee
...Of my darling-my darling-my life and my bride.In the sepulchre there by the sea."

-Edgar Allen Poe

thnks :) can u comment some of my work pleaseee :) thnkkss

on Oct. 1 2010 at 9:35 pm
LaughingGirl GOLD, Ocala, Florida
13 articles 0 photos 50 comments

Favorite Quote:
Play the music not the instrument. -Author Unknown

I agree with LunaWingsFlyAway. I like verse one the best. I envy your song writing.

PS LunaWingsFlyAway nice screeenname


on Sep. 22 2010 at 5:54 pm
LunaWingsFlyAway GOLD, Farmingdale, New York
10 articles 0 photos 42 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And neither the angels in heaven above,Nor the demons down under the sea,Can ever dissever my soul from the soul of the beautiful Annabel Lee
...Of my darling-my darling-my life and my bride.In the sepulchre there by the sea."

-Edgar Allen Poe

its a really cuteee song....i wish i cud hear how it sounds tho...

on Sep. 17 2010 at 9:30 am
ALlovegreen BRONZE, Birmingham, Alabama
1 article 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is not measured by the number of breaths you take but by the moments that take your breath away.
-anonymous

this is really good i wish we could here you singing it or some of the tune!!

on Aug. 27 2010 at 8:30 pm
Just.A.Dream SILVER, Lake Geneva, Wisconsin
7 articles 0 photos 431 comments

Favorite Quote:
Part of the J7X team. :)

Amazing job writing this! :) It's beautiful, it sounds like it would be a huge hit!

puppy123 said...
on Aug. 26 2010 at 1:01 pm
this an cool song or poetry is cool i love it

on Aug. 18 2010 at 12:32 pm
poeticspirit12334 PLATINUM, Groesbeck, Texas
23 articles 0 photos 179 comments

Favorite Quote:
Wearing a Christian T-shirt, and a cross necklace does NOT make you a Christian. , "For I know the plans I have for you," declares the Lord "They are plans to give you a hope and a future.'' Jeremiah 29:11

THIS is really a great piece i love it just like the rest of your stuff! keep up the great work!

 

Check out my stuff??

 


on Aug. 16 2010 at 11:34 am
distant_dreamer GOLD, Belmont, New Hampshire
12 articles 6 photos 498 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life's a climb, but the view is great!"

thank you sooo much! lol :) I want to and probably will someday! :D

on Aug. 16 2010 at 11:24 am
SundanceKid SILVER, Hailey, Idaho
8 articles 1 photo 9 comments

Favorite Quote:
Life is like a box of chocolates...you never know what you're gonna get. -Forest Gump

Tell me you are turning this into a song! I would totally buy this.

on Aug. 9 2010 at 8:05 pm
Marlyre PLATINUM, Kalamazoo, Michigan
21 articles 0 photos 208 comments

Favorite Quote:
"when you cry, do you waste your tears?" Madonna

just out of curiosity, when you were writing this song, what instrument would you think would go with this? as for advice, maybe you should count your syllables in your verses, it might help the flow better and will make easier if you ever want to perform it

on Aug. 4 2010 at 9:58 am
court8652 BRONZE, Franklin, Tennessee
3 articles 0 photos 13 comments

Favorite Quote:
"NEVER LOOK BACK BUT NEVER FORGET. "
"a friend is someone who reaches for your hand but grabs your heart".

is he/she yours or Gods? whos hand are they reaching for. make sure you stay consistant. the whole song youre saying reach for me youre mine then you sday reach for god but youre still mine? also i dont fell emotion.....be aware of that. over all tho it was good for a first song... youll get better once you find a topic youre compassionate about and with practice.....:D

on Aug. 3 2010 at 9:51 pm
I liked your song but i just got the feeling that it constantly repeated over and over and i know a song is soppose to be like that but you took it to an extreme please make it so it sticks but make it different with everything the verses and the chorus make it interesting so people will be more into your song 

SWRA said...
on Aug. 3 2010 at 8:25 am
IT Was a really good song but next time just use a little bit more rhyming words

liljrp said...
on Aug. 2 2010 at 8:20 am
That was pretty good you showed a lot of feelings on having a person be yours (:. Did you just do this writing when you were sad or what?

on Jul. 28 2010 at 2:58 am
ZeldaLarping SILVER, Campbellton, Florida
6 articles 1 photo 3 comments
I love it,its so....cant explain it.

on Jul. 25 2010 at 8:28 pm
HeatherBee BRONZE, I Live In, Texas
1 article 0 photos 1985 comments

Favorite Quote:
Go on and try to tear me down. I will be rising from the ground, like a skyscraper

Love is louder than the pressure to be perfect

awww :)) that was really sweet, i completely loved it!!! nice job ^^ that was so beautiful


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