Blackened Hearts MAG

September 20, 2009
By SaintJamesHallow PLATINUM, Sequim, Washington
SaintJamesHallow PLATINUM, Sequim, Washington
26 articles 1 photo 12 comments

when i was young
i believed my heart was shaped
just the way they portrayed it
on the television
and it was painted red
like a brick house

but lately i've learned
it's been sprayed black
from the bruises it's taken
it's shaken
i was mistaken
you make it pulse at times
but without you it's dead
without the beat it used to have
the chains have held it down
from falling out of my chest
it can't hold on any longer
it's dead and blackened
from your disgusting way
of loving me

mayday mayday
i'm going down
i was shot with an arrow
the engine has failed
i'm burning! burning …
someone explain
the pain
it's a shame
to have to ask you
to tell me the truth
do you love me?

was it fate?
is this a joke?
am i a fool?
for loving you?
am i doomed?
why can't you answer me?
i haven't even sewed your lips shut
to stop the lies
not yet
so answer me!

lately i've learned
it's been sprayed black
from the bruises it's taken
it's shaken
i was mistaken
you make it pulse at times
but without you it's dead
without the beat it used to have
the chains have held it down
from falling out of my chest
it can't hold on any longer
it's dead and blackened
from your disgusting way
of loving me

love me
kill me
just shoot me
i'm burning in your eyes
throw me the gasoline!
watch me burn!

lately i've learned
it's been sprayed black
from the bruises it's taken
it's shaken
i was mistaken
you make it pulse at times
but without you it's dead
without the beat it used to have
the chains have held it down
from falling out of my chest
it can't hold on any longer
it's dead and blackened
from your disgusting way
of loving me



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selenafan#1 said...
on Feb. 1 2011 at 4:34 am
wow this is really good and really deep u definitley hav a soul!

ISoMe SILVER said...
on Jan. 29 2011 at 6:33 pm
ISoMe SILVER, Grove Hill, Alabama
8 articles 0 photos 4 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love yourself and be true to yourself"
"Live life to have fun"

OMG! this is so totally good. Its amazing how well of a writer you are. Please keep writing. I love it!

on Dec. 1 2010 at 5:31 pm
secrets_of_silence GOLD, Gisborne, Other
12 articles 0 photos 439 comments

Favorite Quote:
life had i loved the more
had it but passed away
as quietly as the day
ebbs from the darkening star.


-emanuel litvinoff

i am really loving your work its emotive and polished but it lets the rawness of the topic shine through

on Oct. 31 2010 at 6:21 am
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
14 articles 0 photos 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

Excellent. The theme is a little overused, but the rhyme scheme is great and I love the emotion behind it.

IansLover GOLD said...
on Sep. 17 2010 at 7:59 pm
IansLover GOLD, Otisco, Indiana
19 articles 9 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Moshimo anata kanarazu no naka de ai... ai to issho ni anata no kokoro soshite tamashii."

(translation: If you fall in love.... Love with your heart and soul.)

Love it!!! Very well written :D keep up the good work

on Aug. 26 2010 at 12:19 pm
Depending on where you live, I'd start a band with you. I do vocals as well, but of course...depends on what genre would be played. Ha...But good job and keep it up.

on Aug. 26 2010 at 12:15 pm

I write something of the sort.

But this is very detailed. Very good job


on Aug. 4 2010 at 6:27 pm
MadisonMarie BRONZE, New York, New York
1 article 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
"Never look down upon somebody unless you are helping them up."

Wow this was beautiful, it hurt to read because I felt like I was reading the pain. I can't wait to look at more by you!

on Jul. 27 2010 at 6:09 pm
I could see every word! This is really good! Please check out my work. I appreciate it!

on Jul. 13 2010 at 2:46 pm
everthought BRONZE, Vancouver, Other
1 article 13 photos 69 comments

Favorite Quote:
"forever is the new now"
-anonymous

Loveeeeeee!

on Jun. 14 2010 at 4:15 pm
mariahLynn SILVER, Craig, Colorado
7 articles 0 photos 11 comments
you have an awesome talent... I do at times.. only when the words flow i can put them into writing. keep it up.. check out some of my work, thanks.

on May. 8 2010 at 10:33 am
sparkofheart GOLD, Plymouth, Minnesota
16 articles 2 photos 254 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Always" - Severus Snape

sooooooo amazing! great imagery :) keep it up!

on Apr. 22 2010 at 2:10 pm
hearbreaker2009 BRONZE, Md, Maryland
1 article 2 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
You've got to take the good with the bad, smile with the sad, love what you've got, and remember what you had. Always forgive, but never forget. Learn from mistakes, but never regret.

I've learned that things change, people change, and it doesn't mean you forget the past or try to cover it up. It simply means that you move on and treasure the memories. Letting go doesn't mean giving up... it means accepting that some things weren't meant to be."

this is deep...i love it i really do.

on Apr. 14 2010 at 10:20 am
AddisonElizabeth, Myrtle Beach, South Carolina
0 articles 2 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
Fool me once, shame on you. Fool me twice, shame on me.

Oh my God. I absolutly LOVE this. amazingg.

RoboCop BRONZE said...
on Apr. 4 2010 at 2:18 pm
RoboCop BRONZE, Easley, South Carolina
2 articles 2 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"For beautiful eyes, look for the good in others; for beautiful lips, speak only words of kindness; and for poise, walk with the knowledge that you are never alone.” ~Audrey Hepburn

your poem is amazing. it reminds me of all the tough tasks the heart takes on. also, how everyone can take another person's heart for granted and tear it apart.

on Apr. 2 2010 at 1:20 pm
Loveandboxing PLATINUM, Levvitwon, Pennsylvania
29 articles 0 photos 70 comments

Favorite Quote:
Eat, Sleep, Sing (by me)
Writing is an art few people master it. -me

It kinda sounds lik a emiemn rap. i like it alot. GREAT JOB!!! <333

laaeira BRONZE said...
on Apr. 1 2010 at 8:34 pm
laaeira BRONZE, Kilgore, Texas
2 articles 0 photos 18 comments
good job!It really touched me i loved it

on Mar. 15 2010 at 8:19 am
CrYiNg_eYeS BRONZE, Fairfax, Virginia
1 article 0 photos 3 comments
Your poem really made me see things in a different light, I love how you can take an emotion so complex and get it down into words. I'm a poet myself, but I can't write nearly as well. Do you have a myspace? I'd love to share some ideas with you.

on Mar. 13 2010 at 12:15 am
SaintJamesHallow PLATINUM, Sequim, Washington
26 articles 1 photo 12 comments
Hey, I'd just like to thank everyone for all the feedback and support and to tell all of you that I'm trying to slowly work my way through in returning the favor. It's really because of all of you that I'm being published in the magazine so thank you so much. I unfortunately don't play an instrument, but I do try and sing. Hopefully sometime in the future I can find a band to gather up to play these songs but I'm not relying on being a rock star for my career. For now I'm just a writer :) Thank you again, all of you.

on Mar. 11 2010 at 11:23 pm
AlexandraVasari PLATINUM, Fort Stewart, Georgia
28 articles 4 photos 174 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Writing songs is super intimate. It's a bit like getting naked"~ Gwen Stefani

This is heart wrenching!!Don't get me wrong though I love it! Do you play an instrument? <3




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