God, Can You Hear Me?

September 18, 2009
By ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
72 articles 2 photos 28 comments

I try to talk to you
But it's like you're not there
My words fade away
Into empty air

(Chorus)
Can you hear me?
Can my prayer reach that far?
Do you hear one child's cry
Wherever you are?
I'm just one small voice
In a world of pain
And I'm not sure
So I'll ask again
Can you hear me?

I try to hear your voice
But you seem so far away
I know you're calling me
But I don't know what you're saying
I can't hear you

(Chorus)
I can't hear you
I'm drowning in my sin
I try to reach for you
But I'm falling down again
One still, small voice
In a world of pain
If I try hard enough
I know I can
I can hear you

Rolling like thunder
In my once dead heart
I can hear you speaking
We were never apart
I can hear you



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on Jul. 1 2011 at 9:08 pm
14hipkri PLATINUM, Williamsport, Pennsylvania
22 articles 10 photos 27 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Is that when you get you're thinger off you're thinger?"-Eric Stopper

Love it! Really good! The part were you said ''In a world of pain'' reminds me of one of my songs I wrote and uploaded into Teen Ink, I had those exact words, only in a different setting, It's really cool to see the same phrases used in different scences. (:

on Jun. 18 2011 at 3:29 pm
silence-is-loud GOLD, Chicago, Illinois
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Favorite Quote:
FLOAT LIKE A BUTTERFLY, STING LIKE A BEE- MUHAMMID ALI

I love this!!! I especially love the ending when you say " we were never apart/I can hear you" :) keep up the good work!

abby7 SILVER said...
on Jun. 9 2011 at 10:51 pm
abby7 SILVER, Bardwell, Kentucky
7 articles 0 photos 25 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If lifes not what you dream, in the end its better than you expected" - my cousin Josie Hannah Gray

AMAZING! i love it ! Good messege! I wish i knew the pitches and the music alog with this song so i could sing it ! great job ! God bless :) <3

Shadow878 GOLD said...
on May. 18 2011 at 2:43 pm
Shadow878 GOLD, Marion, Indiana
10 articles 0 photos 32 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I tell you the truth, unless you change and become like little children, you will never enter the kingdom of heaven." Matthew 18:3

"Do not pray for easy lives, pray to be stronger men." JFK

“Science without religion is lame, religion without science is blind.”Albert Einstein

"I believe in Christianity as I believe that the sun has risen: not only because I see it, but because by it I see everything else."
C. S. Lewis

"A young man who wishes to remain a sound atheist cannot be too careful of his reading."
C. S. Lewis

"Anyone who doesn’t believe in miracles is not a realist."
David Ben-Gurion

"An eye for an eye makes the world go blind" Gandi

Nice job great message

Lysergia said...
on Apr. 26 2011 at 4:35 pm
Lysergia, Washougal, Washington
0 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
“Look down at me and you see a fool;
look up at me and you see a god;
look straight at me and you see yourself”

Rebecca B. as in Rebecca Black?!

on Apr. 4 2011 at 4:55 pm
Cause_OneMore BRONZE, Farmington, New Mexico
3 articles 0 photos 12 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Life Is Beautiful"




-Press Play

Great Job On your song its message is so clear and I wish I could hear it how the music go's or at least have the chords or music but all in all its one of the best songs I have read on this sight way to go please check out my stuff if not thats totally fine Stay with your faith never loose hope and also you song really spoke to my heart its really what I needed to read.

on Apr. 4 2011 at 6:39 am
jaymishae SILVER, Jonesboro, Arkansas
6 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Two things are infinite: the universe and human stupidity; and I'm not sure about the universe." - Albert Einstein

Girl, this is great. I wish I could write lyrics like this, but sadly all I can write is chords structures and melodies. If you're interested, just saying. But this was probably one of the best songlyrics I have ever heard. Could even be a Christ Tomlin song.

Lizette SILVER said...
on Nov. 23 2010 at 8:14 am
Lizette SILVER, Delphos, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
Everyone is entitled to be stupid. But some people abuse the privlidge!

way to keep the faith

 


on Oct. 9 2010 at 12:12 pm
Carmella_Hastings GOLD, Atlanta, Georgia
10 articles 1 photo 28 comments

Favorite Quote:
"What lies behind us and what lies before us are tiny matters compared to what lies within us." -Walt Emerson

God bless ya child, this is really amazing :) straight to the favorites.

Shweta SILVER said...
on Aug. 27 2010 at 7:42 am
Shweta SILVER, Saharsa, Other
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it went straight into my fav :)

its amazing


Laura16 GOLD said...
on Aug. 5 2010 at 8:54 pm
Laura16 GOLD, Baldwin, Wisconsin
12 articles 12 photos 10 comments

Favorite Quote:
"No, I would not want to live in a world without dragons, as I would not want to live in a world wihtout magic, for that is a world without mystery, and that is a world without faith." Coincidence is God's way of remaining Anonymous." ~Einstien

This is AMAZING! I love it so much, and for some reason brings tears to my eyes... Love it!

on Jul. 9 2010 at 9:28 pm
ShenelleCrystal SILVER, M, New York
7 articles 0 photos 186 comments

Favorite Quote:
Laugh your heart out dance in the rain cherish the memories ignore the pain love + learn forget and forgive because remember you only have [one life to live] ♥

This is really pretty

estu_2011 said...
on Jun. 22 2010 at 1:30 pm
estu_2011, Knoxville, Tennessee
0 articles 3 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
Why am I trying so hard to fit in, when I'm born to stand out.

I agree...I would love to here the song put to music.

on Jun. 13 2010 at 1:05 pm
Great song.  I would try to sing it and play along and mabey put it on youtube.

bluespark13 said...
on Jun. 7 2010 at 7:19 pm
this song is really nice ,a work of art XD i kinda relate to it cuz i feel that way most of the time -.-...im new on teen ink :)

juliette said...
on Apr. 23 2010 at 10:24 am
juliette, Gdynia, Other
0 articles 1 photo 18 comments
you're welcome. i love evanescence too, and for months i've been struggling to learn how to write a song that would fit their style. i can just hope to be that good, my own writing style is still far behind this...

on Apr. 22 2010 at 7:48 pm
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
72 articles 2 photos 28 comments
Thank you so much much, I love them!  Pretty much the best compliment you couldhave given me =)

juliette said...
on Apr. 17 2010 at 3:03 am
juliette, Gdynia, Other
0 articles 1 photo 18 comments
This could totally be an early Evanescence song! I'm so impressed

on Mar. 27 2010 at 4:54 pm
ElizabethW. DIAMOND, Oconto, Wisconsin
72 articles 2 photos 28 comments
I don't really have much advice.  Believe me, for every good song there are a dozen failures (and I don't post those!).  I guess what I would suggest is to stick to a meter for the verses and another for the chorus, plus maybe a bridge, for form.  Then use lots of creative language, with metaphors and colorful adjectives.  I don't know if you like the song Fireflies by Owl City, but the greatest thing to me about it is the ongoing metaphor about recapturing childhood and all of the beautiful wordage.  Songs like that are pretty much what I aim for, although none of my mine are radio material!

on Mar. 26 2010 at 7:36 pm
ShannonVictoria BRONZE, Dutch Haror, Alaska
4 articles 0 photos 31 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love takes time. Don't keep asking random people to go out with you. If you wait, God will send the right person to you. But if you don't, then you may never find the one you're destend to be with." -Shannon McConnell

You've got some talent writing songs. and i am honestly impressed. i too try and write songs, but they're never that good.  Do you have any advice in how to write some good songs? if your wondering, i try to write songs for my friends that leave that way they know how i feel when i they are leaving and so that they know how much i will miss them and so that they never forget about all the fun times we have. Please, if you dont mind, please reply back (whenever you can) and give me some advice on how to write some good songs. Cant wait to hear back from you! :D


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