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September 1, 2009
By Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)


[1st Verse]
I wrote you a song
nearly brought me to tears
all our hopes,
our dreams,
Everything,
our fears
but theres no problem
'cause i've already solved 'em
no more fears

[Chorus]
You said your nervous
well thats me too
But i'm just gonna stand here
and hug ya'
now we ain't through
but I gotta tell you
did I ever give you permission
to steal
my heart

[2nd Verse]
You cheered me up
always turned me around
to walk the straight & narrow
& i'll follow that arrow
Straight to you

[Chorus](X2)


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on May. 23 2012 at 9:21 pm
Shahiro PLATINUM, Johnston, Iowa
20 articles 2 photos 262 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Soon we must all choose between what is right and what is easy." - Dumbledore (Goblet of Fire)

Really good! Wish I could hear someone sing it! I always think the songs I write r too short, but I like this one. Ps. Will u Pleaz check out my work? =:D

on Mar. 17 2010 at 7:53 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Thank you. Too bad I have no Idea for a tune to put it too, but thanks again.

on Mar. 17 2010 at 1:26 pm
Bella913 SILVER, New City, New York
5 articles 0 photos 30 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Death is easy, living is harder."

i think that this piece has character and with the right rytheme could be even better. keep at it.

on Feb. 1 2010 at 9:35 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Awesome. hope it helps you if it can.

on Feb. 1 2010 at 5:56 pm
rebeldiamond1313kd GOLD, Franklin, Tennessee
18 articles 0 photos 143 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If you look in the mirror and don't like what you see. You can find out first hand what it's like to be me!" -"The End." -My Chemical Romance

I like this song. It's relatable to my relationship.

on Feb. 1 2010 at 12:04 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

A song without music yes. I haven't wrote any music to anything. That's my weakness

jk lol :) said...
on Feb. 1 2010 at 10:26 am
very good i like it is it a song now

Lonleydandy said...
on Jan. 10 2010 at 10:43 am
:D very nice :D

on Sep. 22 2009 at 5:31 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

yes, yes you are thank you & if you don't mind if you have some sare time can you possibly crituque my other works?

Pweese?

lolZ

on Sep. 22 2009 at 5:05 pm
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
14 articles 0 photos 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

Yay! I'm helpful:)

on Sep. 21 2009 at 3:38 pm
Brittaner DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
51 articles 0 photos 88 comments

Favorite Quote:
"words are just songs without the corny elevator music behind them"
-Me (random thought)

Thanks first negative comment i've gotten, I love critisim it'sgives me something to work on. Thank you your comment is oober appreciated!

on Sep. 21 2009 at 3:25 pm
Phantom_Girl GOLD, Ft. Carson, Colorado
14 articles 0 photos 279 comments

Favorite Quote:
"If it comes out of the lion's mouth...it will be on the test."
-Mr. Bala

It's good, but I think with a little more work, it could be way better. Keep trying:)


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