September 1, 2009
[1st Verse]
I wrote you a song
nearly brought me to tears
all our hopes,
our dreams,
our fears
but theres no problem
'cause i've already solved 'em
no more fears

You said your nervous
well thats me too
But i'm just gonna stand here
and hug ya'
now we ain't through
but I gotta tell you
did I ever give you permission
to steal
my heart

[2nd Verse]
You cheered me up
always turned me around
to walk the straight & narrow
& i'll follow that arrow
Straight to you


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IMAdreamerThis teenager is a 'regular' and has contributed a lot of work, comments and/or forum posts, and has received many votes and high ratings over a long period of time. said...
May 23, 2012 at 9:21 pm
Really good! Wish I could hear someone sing it! I always think the songs I write r too short, but I like this one. Ps. Will u Pleaz check out my work? =:D
Tori M. said...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 1:26 pm
i think that this piece has character and with the right rytheme could be even better. keep at it.
b_swain replied...
Mar. 17, 2010 at 7:53 pm
Thank you. Too bad I have no Idea for a tune to put it too, but thanks again.
rebeldiamond1313kd said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 5:56 pm
I like this song. It's relatable to my relationship.
b_swain replied...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 9:35 pm
Awesome. hope it helps you if it can.
jk lol :) said...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 10:26 am
very good i like it is it a song now
b_swain replied...
Feb. 1, 2010 at 12:04 pm
A song without music yes. I haven't wrote any music to anything. That's my weakness
Lonleydandy said...
Jan. 10, 2010 at 10:43 am
:D very nice :D
This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 21, 2009 at 3:25 pm
It's good, but I think with a little more work, it could be way better. Keep trying:)
Humming_Bird replied...
Sept. 21, 2009 at 3:38 pm
Thanks first negative comment i've gotten, I love critisim it'sgives me something to work on. Thank you your comment is oober appreciated!
This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Sept. 22, 2009 at 5:05 pm
Yay! I'm helpful:)
Humming_Bird replied...
Sept. 22, 2009 at 5:31 pm
yes, yes you are thank you & if you don't mind if you have some sare time can you possibly crituque my other works?
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