Empty

September 10, 2009
By indiecaligurl PLATINUM, Long Beach, California
indiecaligurl PLATINUM, Long Beach, California
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Why do I feel so alone
With everyone surrounding me
The silence over the phone
Constitutes the emptiness inside of me.

The fire inside has burned out
And the end is coming near
Tonight you’ll fulfill my doubt
That you won’t be staying here

Tell me you love me again
Just one more time before you go
Tell our story, how it began
“Once upon a time, not so long ago...”

You think I’m stupid but I know
Every little game you’ve played
‘Cause through your eyes it can show
How your love for me has fade

But it’s okay, it’s okay
I’ll move on one day
You’ll be dues I had to pay
To live life this way.


The author's comments:
Past experiences.

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on Jun. 23 at 3:30 pm
passionatepoet02 BRONZE, Shawnee, Oklahoma
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Favorite Quote:
If you shoot for the stars and miss, you'll land upon the moon💫🌚

This is amazing! I enjoyed reading.

on May. 12 2015 at 9:25 am
Allison16 BRONZE, International Falls, Minnesota
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I thought this was very well written and went together nicely! Keep it up!

Virginia SLH said...
on Feb. 5 2015 at 8:25 pm
This is so gr8 I wanna read it over and over again!!!!!! ;-)

on Sep. 20 2014 at 2:44 pm
MickLiberty GOLD, Troy, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
"A hero can be anyone. Even a man doing something as simple and reassuring as putting a coat around a young boy's shoulders to let him know that the world hadn't ended."
Bruce Wayne/Batman, The Dark Knight Rises

These are great lyrics! There is a lot of depth to your song. Awesome job!

on May. 3 2013 at 9:34 am
imhereforthethought PLATINUM, Wayne, New Jersey
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The LIne "You'll be dues I had to pay" reminds me of my own short story series. There are 2 parts still being approved as of 5/2/2013, but if you want to, check it out. A great song like this would go very well with the series.

Ann17 SILVER said...
on Sep. 29 2011 at 12:30 pm
Ann17 SILVER, Greensboro, North Carolina
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I love it!!

inspir3d GOLD said...
on Mar. 11 2010 at 7:31 pm
inspir3d GOLD, Norcross, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
We're all just looking for attention, to be discovered overnight. We're all frustrated by the popular ones that claim the limelight before they fall to pieces. So many of us are stuck under the radar--what makes me different? You decide!

Hey nice song :) i really like it.

u might want to check out Lie to Me by David Cook, it kind of reminds me of this :)

but great job!!!

on Mar. 10 2010 at 6:43 pm
Saphira96 SILVER, Crestwood, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
I have 3 but here they are:
Truly Great friends are hard to find, difficult to leave, and impossible to forget.
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take but by the moments that take your breath away. And the only problem is time.

Thanks and your very welcome! I just love reading good emotional work, and i believe you can do that perfectly!

on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:26 pm
indiecaligurl PLATINUM, Long Beach, California
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Thank you! I wrote this when I was going through a rough time so it's supposed to convey those feelings I had. Thanks so much for taking time to read my work and comment :)

on Mar. 9 2010 at 6:25 pm
indiecaligurl PLATINUM, Long Beach, California
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Awww you're the sweetest! Thanks so much!!!!! I hope so :)

keilly GOLD said...
on Mar. 9 2010 at 7:14 am
keilly GOLD, Springfield, Massachusetts
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Favorite Quote:
there is always a rason for things

i agree it is very deep. it has a lot of meaning and feelings. i loved it

on Mar. 6 2010 at 5:05 pm
Saphira96 SILVER, Crestwood, Kentucky
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Favorite Quote:
I have 3 but here they are:
Truly Great friends are hard to find, difficult to leave, and impossible to forget.
Life isn't measured by the number of breaths you take but by the moments that take your breath away. And the only problem is time.

Wow that was really emotional and deep! The message is really good and it made me feel how you intended! You are a great writer and i really do believe that you will become a famous writer!

Bobo B. said...
on Oct. 27 2009 at 12:14 am
it goes skin deep and even further if you know what i mean. fuhreal im inside my skin right about now

on Sep. 21 2009 at 3:27 am
indiecaligurl PLATINUM, Long Beach, California
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Thank you!

Alexa. SILVER said...
on Sep. 18 2009 at 12:51 pm
Alexa. SILVER, Stockport, Other
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Favorite Quote:
Henry David Thoreau:

"Envy Is Ignorance."
"Imitation Is Suicide."

I really like this piece. It's quite emotional and metaphorical and all that without being too over the top :)


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