One More

September 19, 2012
By LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
17 articles 0 photos 237 comments

Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne


Kiss me with those soft lips
Caress my face with your finger tips
Let me look into those deep brown eyes
I wish to God they weren't saying good bye
I know you want to protect us and our rights
But can't you stay for just one more night
Aren't we perfect just like this?
Please just give me one more kiss
Before you leave on your flight
Please just give us one more night
Promise you wont be gone for long
You say you'll come back
Don't be wrong
I need you here
In my arms
I need you near
You say I'm your good luck charm
If that is true
I'll come with you
Just kiss me with those big soft lips
Play with my hair between your finger tips
Look at me with those big brown eyes
God please let them stop saying good bye


The author's comments:
I want to marry a soldier so every time I see them I'll always want one more kiss.

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on Nov. 30 2012 at 10:02 pm
LiveToLove SILVER, Lansing, Michigan
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Favorite Quote:
Having a rough day? Place your hand over your heart. Feel that? That's called purpose. You're alive for a reason. Don't give up♥

Love it! It flows very well except for some parts where you changed your rythm. Try to keep your rythm steady or put it in a steady pattern... or switch at equal sections from one rythm to another.

on Nov. 28 2012 at 1:21 pm
Opticalillusion DIAMOND, Edenton, North Carolina
64 articles 13 photos 59 comments

Favorite Quote:
I am an artist bound only for the poet's glory....But only achieve half of the success that my dreams aspire to find, And to what do the whispers tell me of this failure...To what end to they haunt my nightmares...my eternal dark dreams...

always love poems..... with girls..... no offence but to me its kinda stail i see it to much this is a honnest opinon so yeah stail thats how i describe it stail i heard it before

on Sep. 30 2012 at 7:53 am
BlueSunset BRONZE, Barcelona, Other
3 articles 0 photos 79 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Be who you are and say what you feel, because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind"- Dr. Seuss

I enjoyed it very much. It's short and it's interesting. I liked it a lot, keep it up x

on Sep. 29 2012 at 10:01 pm
Ashlynn149637 SILVER, Snow Hill, North Carolina
9 articles 1 photo 14 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Music comes to me more readily than words."
-Ludwig van Beethoven

I loooove it! It was absolutely beautiful! ^_^

on Sep. 23 2012 at 9:00 am
Sergelinebrown, Miami, Florida
0 articles 0 photos 1 comment

Favorite Quote:
I lay down these words to sum up all confusion
As we may sound the same…one holds more meaning.
I’m a spoken word poet…..
Not a rapper just speaking,

I loveeeeeee

on Sep. 21 2012 at 10:38 pm
JustSauce BRONZE, Asdasd, Kansas
1 article 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Yup" ~Hank Hill

Great, only part that seemed clunky was "In my arms I need you near You say I'm your good luck charm"

bagley777 GOLD said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 8:17 pm
bagley777 GOLD, Tucson, Arizona
11 articles 3 photos 62 comments

Favorite Quote:
Love is a two way street. If you find yourself on a one-way road, it's time to take the next turn off.

I love it!(: The whole poem flows really well. It's really sweet too. 5/5 for sure!

FinnTheHuman said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 5:22 pm
FinnTheHuman, Paris, Other
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Not all that glitters is gold, not all who wander are lost" J. R. R. Tolkien

That was very, very good. Very rromantic, very deep. I give it 10/10. Keep up the good work.

.king. SILVER said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 3:34 pm
.king. SILVER, Yeux Bien Tres Bien, Other
9 articles 4 photos 573 comments

Favorite Quote:
( ͡~ ͜ʖ ͡°)

Very romantic and religious, Good job! :)

StevenD. said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 3:33 pm
StevenD., Toledo, Ohio
0 articles 0 photos 2 comments

Favorite Quote:
Mess with a sleeping dragon and you'll walk away burned

I like it. It's a very good, interesting poem.

LunaLives GOLD said...
on Sep. 21 2012 at 1:58 pm
LunaLives GOLD, South Bend, Indiana
17 articles 0 photos 237 comments

Favorite Quote:
Because I can!-Me "Life is a choice and death is a decision"-Lil Wayne

Please comment constructive feedback. I would really apriciate it. And I'll do the same for your work as well:)


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