The Pine and the Willow Pond

June 18, 2012
By SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends


The old, lone, pine,
Down by the willow pond,
Moaned and ached,
In the cold blown wind,
During the winter months.
Drawing its dark needles close,
Like a shaggy green coat,
As if to block out the loneliness.

The young, blush pine,
Down by the willow pond,
Sighed mournfully sweet,
In the gentle wind's whispers,
During the spring months.
Stretching it's branches wondrously to the sun,
Longing for the warm companionship.

The whippy, strong pine,
Down by the willow pond,
Burst with pride,
Emerald leaves swaying in the breeze,
During the summer months.
Standing proud and unashamed,
It never once felt lonely,
Or at least it could pretend.

The shaken, stooped pine,
Down by the willow pond,
Shivered and trembled,
In the back and forth gusts,
During the autumn months.
Realizing it was by itself,
Alone in a sea of willows,
The only pine down by the willow pond.


The author's comments:
I think this incorporates themes of loneliness as well as the beauty of nature. And I like the flow of it. Any comments would be awesome!

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on Mar. 28 2013 at 8:43 pm
Fallen_ PLATINUM, Quakertown, Pennsylvania
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Favorite Quote:
" a shattered world is only an opening into a new beginning with laughs, smiles, and love all around enter the world of the light and away from the broken darkness"

I love how you pull and push and let us flow through your words like the seasons and loving the pines you make everyone want to reread it forever good job keep it up

on Mar. 24 2013 at 9:54 am
Rolledthestone SILVER, Nowhere, Other
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"You hypocrite, first take the plank out of your own eye, and then you will see clearly to remove the speck from your brother’s eye." (Matthew 7:5) and "All the poeple who supported slavery were free, all the people who support abortion live..."

Huh, interesting. Kinda skimmed through it cuz I'm running out of time but liked the concept.

on Mar. 23 2013 at 2:15 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

This comment meant a lot to me thank you so much :)

on Mar. 21 2013 at 9:54 pm
Helena_Noel BRONZE, Burnt Hills, New York
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“I'd rather see a sermon than hear one any day; I'd rather one should walk with me than merely tell the way: The eye's a better pupil and more willing than the ear, fine counsel is confusing, but example's always clear.” -Edgar Guest

This is moving. I love the flow, the consistancy and the feel. I was drawn along through the seasons, and by then end i was in love with that lonely pine. I love the human feel of the pine and, perhaps due to my warcry "mom! There are no pine trees!!!!" and the fact that loneliness is a relatable human emotion, i couldnt help but become absorbed. It more than adequatly shows the beauty of nature, and adds, i think, another demention through the use of personification. To me, even the bare trees of winter are stout and steadfast, standing sturdy with their thick bark and brave face against storms. So for me, it broke my heart to hear of one who felt alone.

on Mar. 20 2013 at 9:31 pm
SecretFlame PLATINUM, Portland, Oregon
20 articles 1 photo 375 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I have a life. I just choose to ignore it."
-one of my friends

Thank you so much :)

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on Mar. 20 2013 at 5:20 pm
Mckay ELITE, Somewhere, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
"The people who are crazy enough to think they can change the world are the ones who do."
—Apple’s “Think Different” commercial, 1997
“Crazy people are considered mad by the rest of the society only because their intelligence isn't understood.”
― Weihui Zhou

I like this. The imagery, personification, repitiion here and there, the steady rythym, similes and metaphors—all of these carefully and masterfully instilled in one beautiful poem of longing and loneliness.


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