Lady Leprechan

October 12, 2011
By PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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Lavishing speheres gleam with mistrust,
sacrifing the ways of midsummer's night lust
Bone meets luscious lip
unsure of what remains in her evasive grip.
Sprinkle the unobtainable with her malicious fairy dust.

The author's comments:
Wrote this for school.

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on Jan. 6 2012 at 12:22 am
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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Here is this girl who always get what she wants. In this piece, she wants to cheat on her boyfriend. That's when her eyes spell out the whole mistrust thing. "sacrificing the ways of midsummer's night lust" is how she's being to obvious about the cheating- kind of hinting to the other guy that he's being used. "bone meets luscious lip" is her biting her lip to make a decision on what to do next because she doesn't know how much she gave away and where that leaves her. The last line is her flirting away the questions because she knows how to get what she wants and she does. Hope I could help?!

Brooke M. said...
on Jan. 5 2012 at 6:44 pm
It does create good imagery, but to be really honest, I don't understand it

on Dec. 30 2011 at 11:06 pm
pablo pantaleon, Escondido, California
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I wish i could give you better feedback but im not very good at understanding poetry with so much figurative language, im too logical so it doesnt make much sense :B But i do like the imagery(:

on Dec. 29 2011 at 1:27 am
PhoenixCrossing GOLD, Tinley Park, Illinois
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yuhp typo. and thanks!

Brobin BRONZE said...
on Dec. 28 2011 at 11:03 pm
Brobin BRONZE, Milwaukee, Wisconsin
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Favorite Quote:
This life is hella nauseous.

In the first line did you mean "spheres"? Loved the last line, just excellent!

Fayrouz SILVER said...
on Dec. 27 2011 at 6:37 pm
Fayrouz SILVER, Fargo, North Dakota
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Favorite Quote:
"Only dead fish swim with the stream"

The rhyme here is nice and it reminds me of a fairy tale! Very creative and mysterious!

anzzz SILVER said...
on Dec. 26 2011 at 11:01 pm
anzzz SILVER, Batam, Other
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Favorite Quote:
stand up for your self

this is amazing, the content of this poem sound's like mystery, I like that..

on Dec. 26 2011 at 1:11 pm
poetic.eyes PLATINUM, Everson, Washington
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Favorite Quote:
eARTh

It does leave mystery! It's creative!

on Dec. 26 2011 at 12:11 am
XxConverse_LoverxX BRONZE, Omaha Ne, Nebraska
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Favorite Quote:
"Knights of Nii!"

I really like this poem. It almost feels like it leaves mystery to it. The only thing i would possibly look at is the last line, it through me off a bit, but if you don't want to change it I was only being nit picky, it is still really good with it :] Also, could you check out my poem Green Little Monster? :D


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