For Our Veterans

November 2, 2011
By Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem


They gave it, their all for us
So we can still say this and thus
About what we deserve
But we didn’t serve
Like when they fought and died for us


The author's comments:
With Veterans day approaching, I decided I should submit this one. Not that good, I think, but at least it is something for the vet who are alive- unlike my grandfather. Hopefully it will get accepted in time.

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on Dec. 2 2011 at 5:08 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Thank you. :)  Almost to 500 views!

on Dec. 2 2011 at 5:01 pm
sunshine7223 SILVER, Holdenville, Oklahoma
9 articles 0 photos 127 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Afterall, a loose screw doesn't want to need, and a hammer doesn't want to be needed." -Me

"Those who observe with their eyes closed and mouths open, are usually not as wise as those who allow their minds to wander freely." -Me

This is so very true! Awesome job Flavius! ((:

on Dec. 2 2011 at 5:00 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Thanks. :)

on Dec. 2 2011 at 2:14 pm
stephie95 PLATINUM, Tripoli, Other
25 articles 1 photo 65 comments
It's really good :D

on Nov. 29 2011 at 5:44 pm
eih yih yih  you comment on here enough but you still don't get the message I am leaving everywhere.... (unless you just don't want to talk to me....)

on Nov. 29 2011 at 4:49 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Hah, that's cool. :)

on Nov. 29 2011 at 4:46 pm
no.name. PLATINUM, Ceres, California
42 articles 0 photos 94 comments

I really like this. It makes me think of that Foo Fighters song My Hero.

 


on Nov. 29 2011 at 4:42 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

My first piece to get 250 views!!!  Thanks guys! :)

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Nov. 22 2011 at 6:42 pm
Congrats again!  it is well deserved

on Nov. 22 2011 at 11:24 am
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

My first poem to get 100 views!!!  For anyone who cares, the average rating is 5 stars.  Thank you to everyone who read this, commented, rated, and lent their encouragement. :) -Flavius

on Nov. 16 2011 at 12:04 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Thanks :)  I write music, too.  Rock, Metal and Rap, mostly.  I haven't sent any in to Teen Ink, yet, but if people like my poems enough, I think I might.  Do you think I should?

on Nov. 16 2011 at 12:04 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

Thanks :)  I write music, too.  Rock, Metal and Rap, mostly.  I haven't sent any in to Teen Ink, yet, but if people like my poems enough, I think I might.  Do you think I should?

on Nov. 16 2011 at 1:29 am
AnimaCordis GOLD, London, Other
13 articles 0 photos 132 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Evil is when the good do nothing"

I really like this poem, it has a great message and it's so meomorable. You're very clever with rhymes.

on Nov. 15 2011 at 7:10 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

lol, that was a typo.  I have this saved on my computer, and it has that extra comma in it.  Nice catch, there.

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 6:25 pm
haha  okay, I will probably never read them, but you never know, I might.....(even though they sound boring) 

on Nov. 15 2011 at 4:34 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

In the books, Jen Talbot is the reason this kid goes on this quest to free illegal children.  I don't want to ruin anything else about them, because they're lame if you don't read them for yourself, or if someone tells you all about them.

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Nov. 15 2011 at 2:00 pm
Yeah....  :(   uhm, I have never read those books....is it possible to explain that to me?  lol

on Nov. 15 2011 at 1:57 pm
Mortimer-Micheals-Jacob-Joyce GOLD, Edgar, Wisconsin
12 articles 0 photos 191 comments

Favorite Quote:
"And when I'm gone, just carry on, don't mourn
Rejoice every time you hear the sound of my voice
Just know that I'm looking down on you smiling
And I didn't feel a thing, So baby don't feel my pain
Just smile back"-Eminem

I know, it doesn't seem to make sense, but it's just that way sometimes- you miss someone so much, even though you never met them.  RIP Jen Talbot...

(Anyone who has read the Shadow Children books will get that...)


on Nov. 15 2011 at 10:15 am
RyanTyler PLATINUM, Windsor, Connecticut
21 articles 0 photos 94 comments

Favorite Quote:
"A myth is a religion in which no one no longer believes." James Feibleman

Really good. Ijust feel like the top line should be be broken in to two parts or had an extra coma so it read something like. They gave it,  their all, for us.....That's just my thoughts on it. Anyways I think you did the Vets proud.

Tiggerlily14 said...
on Nov. 14 2011 at 10:26 am
My grandma died of cancer when only my two oldest brothers were baby's.....even though I never met her, I miss her  :(


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