My Body is a Squiggle, My Feet are on Backwards

July 23, 2011
My body is a squiggle,
I have 46 eyes,
I talk when I giggle,
And my hands look like pies.

My feet are on backward,
I have six noodle like arms,
I twist and bend like rubber,
But my smile always charms.

I live in a world of upside down,
With fish in the sky,
And birds in the sea,
Where a smile is a frown.

Everything here,
Is clear cut and defined,
A place where right and wrong,
Still bind.

True the sky is purple,
And looks like cupid,
And ants are the size of deer,
But I still think,
I’m better off here.

Here the air is clean,
Not grey with smog,
There isn’t a single toxin filled stream,
And no one is greedy or a hog.

We live in peace,
No wars are fought,
No one lives in the street,
And we take comfort in family,
Not just the things we’ve bought.

True the cherries are blue,
But here freedom has no price,
No one must go to the bloody altar of battle,
To be our protection, and our sacrifice.

Yellow faces may seem strange,
Even in my dream,
And the fire that warms the hearth,
Looks like a corkscrew and is definitely green,
But I still think,
That we appreciate life here better,
And I feel so much more worth,
Than I ever could on Earth.

We are friends to each other,
Every striped and polka dotted squiggle a sister,
And every star splattered spiral a brother.

Our families may seem quirky,
And possibly a little weird,
My sister is a turkey,
My father is a sheep sheer,
But at least here,
No child lives in fear.

It may only be a fantasy land,
A creation of my overactive imagination,
But I think it’s rather grand,
Pay attention,
Take an observation,
Maybe we could learn,
A thing or two,
From this made up world discern
Something to help us put out our fires,
Before we burn,
Along with from where it grew,
This better place,
In my imagination unfurled,
Could be,
Don’t mean to brag,
But a saving grace,
And on my part,
A total ace!

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Love.Hate.Passion. said...
Oct. 7, 2011 at 11:34 pm
Bree Tayler just stole the words out of my moth This piece is funny , emotive and just plain amazing. Your rhyme scheme is decent and your poem is clever. Loved it!
Garnet77 This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 2:59 am
This is amazingly creative! The message behind it was very powerful, and I'm sure everyone has said this, but I love the title!!! Your word choice was excellent, though the flow at certain parts seemed a bit awkward. Maybe it was just me, though, because some parts were more rhythmic than others..? But overall, this was a great poem! :)
shadowrider replied...
Sept. 7, 2011 at 5:18 pm
ItsAshMal This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 31, 2011 at 9:55 am

I'd just like to start out saying I am in love with the title. I just had to click on it. It's also just a really fun poem to read, and the word feel sort of thick on my tounge, like they were meant to be put in the order you've got them in. 

The only negatives I have for this piece are in its length and a couple of the rhyes. After a while, it becomes slightly tedious, and I started to feel like you were losing your real point in all the other things you wer... (more »)

BreeTayler This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 10:13 pm

Haha! That was brilliant. And clever! Before I read the passage I thought the TITLE ITSELF was genius... But Wow! lol The symbolism is beautiful ( it has that same powerful meaning as the last I read: We Claim) Your diction, i've noticed, is clever in itself... You are simply a gifted writer. I think i'm going to read all of your work just for the fun of it cause your work is fun to read lol I favorited this by the way:))

MY FAVORITE LINES ARE: "Every striped and polka dotted sq... (more »)

shadowrider replied...
Aug. 17, 2011 at 10:17 pm
Thank you so much! I love it when people give me more than just the one line of feedback (especially when they like it ;) And I'm certainly not going to object to you reading the rest of my stuff ;) Please rate/comment them if you do!
smiles365 said...
Aug. 11, 2011 at 12:35 am
I absolutely love the first two stanzas and that bloody altar of battle part was brilliant!
shadowrider replied...
Aug. 11, 2011 at 11:24 am
Thank you so much!
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