I will conquer

April 22, 2011
Ares god of Sparta,

Ares, god of war,

Leading a life,

Blood and gore,

Shattering bones like waves,

Upon the shore.

A malicious smile,

He completes his daily chore.

Sparta cheers as their lord approaches,

The generals stand tall,

with their golden broaches,

Watching silently as there lord encroaches,

The drums begin to pound,

As Athena lays down her crown,

With a grin of vengeance he calls

“Surely today, Athens will fall.”





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k.s.h This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. said...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 8:14 am
It is very, very good but I do have constructive criticism for you: try to work on rhythm and balance.  That's about it!
 
x_Topscore_x replied...
Jul. 13, 2011 at 9:46 am
thank you very much for the comment :3
 
k.s.h This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 15, 2011 at 12:33 pm
Sorry, this is really weird, but do you do plays at Hayswood Theatre?
 
x_Topscore_x replied...
Jul. 17, 2011 at 9:59 am
Cant say I have ^.^
 
k.s.h This work has been published in the Teen Ink monthly print magazine. replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 9:18 am
Well, sometimes you call yourself Sammy and you look like someone I know named Sam who does stuff there.  Weird!  Well, sorry for bothering!
 
x_Topscore_x replied...
Jul. 18, 2011 at 10:38 am
No problem :3 thanks for the comments!
 
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