Death Swallows Me Whole

April 9, 2010
By k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra


Death swallows me whole,
Like the digestive ways of snake.
It doesn't bite you to warn you of what's coming,
Telling you of your terribly unlucky fate.

It only opens it's mouth and consumes you,
Bringing you to a world of complete emptiness.
Nothing to comfort you, only grief, sadness, and sorrow.
Though it's quick, the pain continues none the less.

Yes, death can be so cruel.
Chew you up, just to spit you out in agony.
Leaving you when you're most vulnerable,
Having you second guessing what you see.

Death is like a very long tunnel,
And at the end there is no light.
A journey of never ending darkness,
With nothing comforting in sight.


The author's comments:
I've just been dealing with a lot in my life right now including deaths of people really close to me and breakups, so I wrote this. Tell me what you think.

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on Mar. 29 2012 at 9:33 pm
dragonfly95 SILVER, Argaon, Georgia
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Favorite Quote:
'' there is nothing to fear but fear its self''

beautiful...you have great talent.

RedDaisy said...
on Dec. 10 2011 at 9:31 pm
RedDaisy, Guayanilla, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"It's not just having the courage; you also need the strength. What's the point of having courage if you lose and can't get back up after the first fail?" -Me-

This poem holds a meaning for me, especially the end. I consider it anti-suicide. Death does not hold comfort, it holds only a dark and unescapable void. One only has but one chance at living a happy life: every step, every turn, every decision...it will lead to the essence of what has already been done. Beautifully written.

~RedDaisy~


HuntressEmma said...
on Nov. 10 2010 at 6:25 pm
Oh. My. God. This is really really good! It's so descriptive! Waiting for more!

on Jun. 2 2010 at 10:37 am
bkcrider92 GOLD, Roslyn Harbor, New York
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Favorite Quote:
“When the power of love overcomes the love of power, the world will know peace.”

Wow this is so powerful! I can feel the emotion the whole time! If you get a chance can you check out my poem Memories and comment and rate it? i would love your opinion <3

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 15 2010 at 2:55 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

Thanks sooo much for the comment :$ and ya your right sometimes it can be good <3

on May. 14 2010 at 11:18 pm
mikaylaquinn GOLD, NewCastle, Pennsylvania
17 articles 7 photos 11 comments

Favorite Quote:
~♥life is your own personal fairy tale, you gotta do what ever you need to do to make it come true!♥~

this is really really good!! and aww i feal bad... but sometimes death dont have to be a bad thing, sometimes its good

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 13 2010 at 10:09 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

THANKS, SO MUCH :)

on May. 13 2010 at 6:18 pm
BiancaMarie SILVER, Colchester, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
better loved then lost then never to have loved at all

this is great! you deff should keep wrighting! itss ahmazingg poem! <3 greatt work!

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 12 2010 at 6:38 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

Okay, i'll keep that in mind while writing my current poem bout my past relationship. Oh, but a poem that i wrote about my now ex boyfriend just got posted so could you check that out for me and comment cause i was thinking of using that for style inspiration and wondering what i could improve on. Thanks :)

on May. 12 2010 at 3:44 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

Your welcome. :)

on May. 12 2010 at 9:01 am
♠♣♦♥Jon♠♣♦♥ SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
7 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
" The greatest things in life are unseen, Thats why we close our eyes when we cry, kiss, and dream."

No problem. And while your writing, try using suspenseful techniques. Really grab your audience, and make them feel what it is your writing.:)

on May. 12 2010 at 6:09 am
UR welcome!!!

on May. 11 2010 at 9:32 pm
inspire.identity. PLATINUM, Ajax, Other
23 articles 8 photos 98 comments

AHAHA

 so am i 


k.james SILVER said...
on May. 11 2010 at 9:31 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

THANKS :), AND YA I'M GOING TO WRITE BOUT MY PAST RELATIONSHIPS GOOD IDEA:) THANKS ALOT FOR THE SUGGESTION

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 11 2010 at 9:28 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

Thanks you it means alot :)

on May. 11 2010 at 8:27 pm
♠♣♦♥Jon♠♣♦♥ SILVER, Albuquerque, New Mexico
7 articles 0 photos 3 comments

Favorite Quote:
" The greatest things in life are unseen, Thats why we close our eyes when we cry, kiss, and dream."

I really like this. That's how it seemed for me when I had my ex.. We were going for 6 months or so.. And everytime a fight occured it would always seem as if it was a never ending path.. Good work though.:) Keep them coming.:) Maybe, in my opinion, write a poem with your feelings on something. Maybe a current relationship or a past one. I don't know. Just something I'd write about.:)

on May. 11 2010 at 8:25 pm
Egyptiangirl13 GOLD, Kansas City, Missouri
14 articles 0 photos 501 comments

Favorite Quote:
\"either write something worth reading or do something worth writing. -Benjamin Franklin

\"If columbus would have turned back, no one would have blamed him. No one would have remembered him either.\"

\"If music be the food of love, play on.\"

wow, i love this and the title is great-keep going!!!

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 11 2010 at 6:46 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

I'm glad someone can relate :) Thanks <3 and lol :P

k.james SILVER said...
on May. 11 2010 at 6:43 pm
k.james SILVER, Whitby, Other
5 articles 0 photos 110 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Love without action is meaningless, action without love is irrelevant." -Deepak Chopra

Yes, lets :)

on May. 11 2010 at 4:04 pm
VampiericRain GOLD, Amarillo, Texas
12 articles 0 photos 137 comments

Favorite Quote:
Would you like a side of epic with that fail?

I know exacty how tis fels. THe whole deal. Amazing as usual. Love it. :) Five stars.

 

 

...wow i cant typ to sav my life...





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