Snapshots of a Village by the Sea MAG

By Marika Tobak, Fort Bragg, CA

empty swings and abandoned dreams
half-filled notebooks and forest streams
the road that seemed to go on forever
broken promises, “always” and “never”
Hell-fire and trumpets, the sun sinking low
secrets told and kept, for only us to know
running and hiding, and closing your eyes
trust and betrayal, the truth behind each lie
a cardboard box, unlabeled and empty
a note on the counter for only you to see
I wish it wasn’t like this, I fought with all I had
but look at what came of it, is it really all that bad?
empty swings and dreams abandoned
we had to grow up, even if we didn’t get all we planned in
we had to say good-bye so we could meet again
if time is our only enemy, let us face it together, as friends
Hell-fire and trumpets, wait for the sun to rise
maybe by then, the tears will be gone from your eyes
the road that seemed to go forever on
it seems like forever that I will be gone
a cardboard box, unlabeled and empty
I look out the window and light is all I see
I wish it wasn’t like this, I fought with all I could
and I’ll promise, if you promise, to let it turn out good
and I’ll promise, if you promise, to let “good-bye” be just for now
I’ll promise, and if you promise, we can show each other how



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on Apr. 22 2016 at 2:30 pm
Eccentric101 GOLD, Chesterton, Indiana
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Favorite Quote:
"It is not in the stars to hold our destiny but in ourselves."
"I loved with a love that was far much more than love." Edgar Allan Poe

Wow....no words....just...a superb piece of art. Perhaps even a master piece. :)

NoniDoni GOLD said...
on Jan. 8 2015 at 8:02 pm
NoniDoni GOLD, Calabasas, California
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That is simply beautiful! I have no words! Check out my poem and give feedback!

on Nov. 6 2014 at 2:59 pm
DreamersJourney SILVER, Old Massett, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"The best thing you can do is the right thing, the next best thing you can do is the wrong thing. The worst thing you can do is nothing."
"Decide to have an attitude of gratitude, you can become bitter or better."
"beYOUtiful, everyone else is taken."

This is simlpy spectacular. I appreciate your neutral creativity, your word choice fits perfectly, and its smooth to read. Lovely:)

EllieHeart said...
on Dec. 9 2011 at 12:43 pm
EllieHeart, Tempe, Arizona
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Favorite Quote:
"Pay no attention to what the critics say; no statue has ever been erected to a critic."










~Jean Sibelius

Really, really, really amazing! Could you check uot my poem Siren Lies and comment? Thanks!

 


on Oct. 26 2011 at 1:07 pm
WeAllBurn PLATINUM, Vermilion, Ohio
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Favorite Quote:
"The weak can never forgive. Forgiveness is the attribute of the strong." ~Mahatma Gandhi

amazing. i am going through a very tough break-up right now </3. and this makes me think alot, about what i can do to change it? idk. but thank you for sharing your amazing talent.

beautiful <3


lbr17 BRONZE said...
on Nov. 30 2010 at 4:16 pm
lbr17 BRONZE, Houston, Texas
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Favorite Quote:
"And in the end, it's not the years in your life that count. It's the life in your years."
-Abraham Lincoln

Really good!

on Nov. 8 2010 at 10:44 am
GreenLover SILVER, Anaheim, California
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Favorite Quote:
Time is but a number

this has to be one if my favorite poems ever! i loved the way it flowed so very nice. the endinq was qood. it really qot me thinkinq. spectacular! keep it  up.  your a really qood writter

 

hopefully you can read some of my work. i think you will like the one named my child, my son


on May. 16 2010 at 12:58 pm
funnythewayitis SILVER, Redmond, Washington
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this is really amazing. i loved it

 


on Jan. 26 2010 at 3:06 pm
savannah-jane PLATINUM, Soooomers., New York
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oh, wow. this was incredible. the ending really had an impact on me; i had to go back and read it over a few times. this entire poem was beautiful.

i really love the lines;

the road that seemed to go forever on

it seems like forever that I will be gone

i don't exactly know why, but i do. this poem was amazing! without a doubt one of my favorites. :)

on Jan. 4 2010 at 5:37 pm
The_Number_Five GOLD, Manassas, Virginia
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Favorite Quote:
Be who you are and say what you feel because those who mind don't matter and those who matter don't mind.
-- Dr. Seuss

This poem is amazing and one of my favorites in teen ink's poetry section. Do you think you could comment on some of my work? Thanks! :)

on Apr. 27 2009 at 11:33 pm
SagaLiSela PLATINUM, Boonsboro, Maryland
27 articles 27 photos 85 comments

Favorite Quote:
"I love you."

Simple as that.

Or not that simple.

Wow! beautiful

on Apr. 27 2009 at 5:48 pm
soinlove SILVER, Parish, New York
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when i read this it brings one person to my mind and tears also i really like this alot u did a grate job

on Apr. 11 2009 at 11:48 pm
becky72195 BRONZE, Brooklyn, New York
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I truely love this peice of writing and do believe it desirved to get published in Teen Ink.

THe poem has a true deep meaning, the style you use is amazing.

I have two poems also online, if you can please take a second to read it and comment it

on Apr. 11 2009 at 4:57 pm
Babybluelove1 SILVER, Clyde, Texas
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wow that was soo great

tweedle dee said...
on Apr. 11 2009 at 1:25 pm
wow i saw this on here forever ago, and loved it. i was phyked to see it on the top page!!!!! this poem is amazing, you rock! same as Keira, i'll buy your book!!

Keira. Hunt said...
on Jan. 19 2009 at 2:35 am
This is amazing,

the ending, was spectacular.

promise to keep writing.

and some day when your famous,

ill buy your book!


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