I Love the Way. . .

September 28, 2009
By BeautifulSoul BRONZE, Toledo, Ohio
BeautifulSoul BRONZE, Toledo, Ohio
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I love the way you look a me
you long to make me smile.
It's apart of your trickery
to keep my heart for awhile.

I love the way you treat this girl
you renew her spirit from within.
You make her love you more and more,
but she battles the conquering of sin.

I love the way you are spiritually stable
because it brings me closer to God.
You might not know, but it makes me able
to express my spiritual feelings aloud.

Gosh, I love the way you respect this girl
you never fail to show your appreciation.
You always make her feel well-deserved
and you love to reach her expectations.

I'm so happy you finally made me that girl,
that I consistently dreamed to be
each time I get stronger when I
think about the future of you and me.



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on Apr. 26 2010 at 7:35 pm
BiancaMarie SILVER, Colchester, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
better loved then lost then never to have loved at all

thanks!!!! itss hardd to figuree out thiss websitee!

on Apr. 26 2010 at 10:32 am
thanx, I tried to comment yours but i cant find any of your work. dont worry i'll keep looking though!

on Apr. 26 2010 at 10:30 am
thanx for your comment!!

on Apr. 25 2010 at 2:31 pm
FreeTheWordZ BRONZE, Eutawville, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"success is not behind you its straight ahead, that tiny light that if you get closer it will get begger"

I really like dat it gave me the gooses>>>:~)

on Apr. 22 2010 at 9:50 am
BiancaMarie SILVER, Colchester, Vermont
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Favorite Quote:
better loved then lost then never to have loved at all

Love itt! comment on some of minee??? (:

on Feb. 16 2010 at 11:53 am
DallysGrrl PLATINUM, Middlesex, New Jersey
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Ur welcome n thnx.

on Feb. 16 2010 at 10:19 am
BeautifulSoul BRONZE, Toledo, Ohio
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thanx nd yes, I'll be sure comment your work!

on Feb. 12 2010 at 9:32 pm
DallysGrrl PLATINUM, Middlesex, New Jersey
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Great job!!!! i think that u did so awesome on this limerick. Its really great. Good job. Its very strong and relateable. So good. Awesome. Amazing. Mayb comment on some of my work??

on Feb. 12 2010 at 2:23 pm
BeautifulSoul BRONZE, Toledo, Ohio
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thank you !!!

shortyy101 said...
on Feb. 12 2010 at 12:19 pm
i like it...its really good...

on Jan. 19 2010 at 10:48 am
BeautifulSoul BRONZE, Toledo, Ohio
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Hahaha thanx

on Jan. 14 2010 at 3:34 pm
Inkspired PLATINUM, Whitby, Other
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Favorite Quote:
"If one will scoff at the study of language, how, save in terms of language, will one scoff?" - Mario Pei
"I write for the same reason I breathe - because if I didn't, I would die." Isaac Asimov

This is really great, I love the way you expressed it! You could maybe use stronger words in some places, but the casual language can also emphasize it. Love it!

on Oct. 21 2009 at 8:56 pm
cassandra_2011 PLATINUM, North Pole, Alaska
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Favorite Quote:
"Give in to love, or live in fear."

It may help if you did a little more work on the rhyme, but the poem is great no matter what. That was just a thought.

on Oct. 21 2009 at 8:55 pm
cassandra_2011 PLATINUM, North Pole, Alaska
28 articles 0 photos 15 comments

Favorite Quote:
"Give in to love, or live in fear."

I really like this. It's not a love poem, but not quite a tragedy. You show devotion and much meaning within the poem. Great job!

on Oct. 9 2009 at 11:42 am
BeautifulSoul BRONZE, Toledo, Ohio
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thanx for ur comment

on Oct. 8 2009 at 3:30 pm
Caroline35 GOLD, Bain De Bretagne ( Britany), Other
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Favorite Quote:
"There's never one of anyone"

It reminds me of a film I saw which was "Ten things I hate about you". I really like your poem ! Your ending isn't really expected and the feelings you express are true.

on Oct. 8 2009 at 2:57 pm
LostinthisWorld.67 BRONZE, Charleston, South Carolina
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Favorite Quote:
"You don't know what you got till it's gone."

I really like this and the rhyme makes it really good to.




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